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Reviewer: Vampiric Blood Signed [Report This]
Date: March 31, 2010 09:49 pm Title: Chapter 1

I really like this story. Nice flow to it and your characterizations and dialogue are good.

I do think it would've benefited from a second pass or a review by a beta. There were just enough grammatical/spelling errors that it was a bit disconcerting to me.

Reviewer: pamelamorganhalpert Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: March 13, 2010 11:39 am Title: Chapter 1

Aww. That was so adorable. Great job with every part - they all flowed together seamlessly. Fantastic! I really enjoyed that Pam set a fourth place for her mother. It gets the reader wondering, 'Was that to make her dad see how uncomfortable this feels to her?' or is it because she's so used to having them together it just hurts to only set one place? Or that she's wishing so much that everything would be okay? I liked that element a lot. Also, before they fell asleep, Jim and Pam are so perfect for each other, and that was just beautiful. Wonderful story all around. Very cute.

Reviewer: Hannah_Halpert Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: March 13, 2010 09:29 am Title: Chapter 1

I very much enjoyed this. Jim feeling guilty for going back to work - the way Cecelia already owns his heart... you captured that beautifully :)

Reviewer: NanReg Signed 8 [Report This]
Date: March 13, 2010 07:01 am Title: Chapter 1

I like this,Dedeen.  Poor Jim--torn between work and home, and Pam--mourning her parents' marriage.  Sweet end-of-the-day family portrait.

Reviewer: andtheivy Signed [Report This]
Date: March 12, 2010 01:54 pm Title: Chapter 1

I think I'm going to love parent fics. This was a great one. I hope you'll write more. Great insight with Pam not being able to accept her parents' not being together.

Reviewer: JHalpert Signed [Report This]
Date: March 12, 2010 12:12 pm Title: Chapter 1

:) Loved this. I'd love a story of Daddy Jim coming home from work to different things--continue?!

Reviewer: adampascalfan12 Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: March 12, 2010 10:43 am Title: Chapter 1

This story is cute! Daddy Jim getting anxious to get home to see Cecelia and Pam after his paternity leave. I love when you describe the moment with Jim holding the baby. It's been a week! I can't get over with the baby episode yet. Keep up the good work and looking forward to read more of your stories! =D

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