Date: January 27, 2011 04:15 pm Title: Chapter 5
Very, very sweet. I look forward to seeing what happens next.
Date: January 26, 2011 04:11 am Title: Chapter 5
Such a sad story, I hope Pam gets better soon! I love Jim's encouraging words about her art. Looking forward to more.
Author's Response: Thanks perfect_match, I'm glad that you're enjoying the story. =) I will try my best to update the next chapter soon, at the moment it's a little crazy with my grandmother being ill, play practice and college. I will try to upload the story more on the weekends when it calms a bit down after doing so many things on the weekdays.
9 [Report This]Date: October 06, 2010 04:33 am Title: Chapter 4
Very glad Pam is awake! Very sweet with them snuggling together. Hope she gets her words back soon. Send over the next chapter when you're ready.
Author's Response: Thanks so much Danielle for the review, I'm glad you liked this chapter! I will send the story soon when all this craziness at my house and school settles down more.
Date: September 22, 2010 01:32 pm Title: Chapter 3
I got very excited to see you had updated. I'm sad Pam is "stuck" but love how she hears Jim. Can't wait for more.
Author's Response: Thanks khand3stooges, the next chapter should be up soon! Writing the 5th chapter at the moment.
Date: September 19, 2010 03:19 pm Title: Chapter 3
Awww. It's like sleeping beauty waking up from her deep sleep :) Hoping we're on our way to some happy, Dani!
Author's Response: Thanks NanReg! You'll see some happy moments in the next chapter which it should be up soon!
Date: September 17, 2010 11:16 pm Title: Chapter 3
i knew this was going to end like this from the beggining and more and more as it got to the end of the page..but one always hopes for it to not leave u on the hiatus =/ all thats left to do is wait for the update..pleasee hurry!!!
ps. loved the dr. mcdreamy reference
Author's Response: Thank you so much dmbd! I'm glad you liked it! I'm currently writing the next chapter, it's almost done. =)
PS I'm glad you like the mcdreamy reference too =)
10 [Report This]Date: September 17, 2010 08:57 pm Title: Chapter 3
Oh my goodness, is she awake? I just love the way you wrote Pam in this chapter, Dani. She can hear, but can't respond; she has emotions and senses, yet they are known only to her brain, not someone else. What a powerful and different way of writing a coma. I've never seen anything like this, I'm really impressed! Also, I wanted to say that you're writing has improved so much since I read your work for the first time. It wasn't bad to begin with, but I feel that you have a better sense of how to make it flow, and use words in a way that is powerful. I'm really impressed! Great job, and this was a beautiful chapter. I'm really looking forwards to the next update, I want to see if she's actually up and if she'll have her current situation come back to her - the fact that she's never said she loves Jim out loud before, and she'd been driving to see him when she had the accident. Send me an email if you want some beta'ing help! But I think you've got it covered w/ the lovely Danielle and Jess!
Author's Response: Aw thank you so much Claire! I really appreciate the review, it definitely means alot! I think my writing had defintely improved more than any of my stories, the reader's reviews, the suggestions and the comments really gives me a sense of push to improve more of my writing. I wouldn't have done this story without Danielle, Jess, and you! You guys have been such a great help! =) I'm really glad that you enjoyed this chapter! The next chapter is now being written at the moment and is almost done.
10 [Report This]Date: September 17, 2010 11:52 am Title: Chapter 3
I really love the intensity at the end of this chapter, not knowing for a second if she was walking toward the bright light or back to Jim. I felt so bad for him and got a really good sense of his desperation. I also liked how we got to see that Pam really could hear him. Good touch with the iPod, I liked that he's still sentimental after what he went through on Casino Night. Looking forward to the next chapter :)
Author's Response: Thanks so much Danielle for your help! I'm glad this chapter turned out to be okay after all the struggle I had due to writer's block for this chapter, thought more ideas but then it wouldn't work, and fixed the chapter around more so the story can flow a little bit easier and have a little bit of suspense or intensity like Pam's dream during the coma. I thought of an idea with Jim's Ipod, instead of Jim talking to Pam or praying for her to wake up because one, I didn't think that Jim's a religious kind of person and two, I thought-- how should I say this? That was an "old fashion" way by talking or praying, if that makes sense to you (if not you can PM me or email me). I tried to come up with new another way to wake her up by Jim putting the iPod earbud right next to her ear so she could find her way back by listening to the music.
Date: August 12, 2010 11:07 am Title: Chapter 2
Just read this and your first chap, Dani. Normally I'm a little squeamish about this type of story where Jim or Pam is seriously injured. Despite that, I really wanted to give this a go. I like it, especially the involvement of Pam's family. One of my favorite things is reading about what others observe or have to say about Jim and Pam's relationship and how it appears to them. I'm glad Pam's dad is in the dark here, because I'll look forward to hearing what her mom has to say.
Author's Response: Thanks for reading NanReg, I'm glad you like it. You will see what Jim and Pam's father's interaction will be like in the next chapter. Stay tuned!
Date: August 12, 2010 08:44 am Title: Chapter 1
Really enjoying this one. I'm sure Pam can hear Jim!
Author's Response: Thanks khand3stooges! I'm glad you're enjoying this story!! =)
10 [Report This]Date: August 12, 2010 07:58 am Title: Chapter 2
you perfectly captured the feeling of when someone you love is in the ICU. my sister's been in critical condition several times, and it's really hard every time.
Author's Response: With this story, I've been researching medical information about traumatic brain injury, what's like to be in a coma, and even asking my brother what was it like the aftermath of his head injury accident (two years ago) in his point of view to help me to understand. I only saw what it was like: the side effects of the head injury and the slow process of healing. My brother is doing very well, he's going to be a senior in high school and is going off to college next year.
10 [Report This]Date: August 11, 2010 11:43 pm Title: Chapter 2
This is such a great chapter! As I said to you in my email earlier today, I think this is your best writing yet. Great job, and I look forwards to chapter three. Send it over when you're ready!
Author's Response: Thank you so much Claire, I'm glad you liked this chapter! =) I'm writing chapter three at the moment and will sent it over when it's done.
Date: August 11, 2010 08:42 pm Title: Chapter 1
Hey girl! I was so happy to see you posting a fic! I secretly love these kinds of fics where Jim and Pam have to find their way back to each other! Sorry I wasn't much help on your last fic... But keep on writing!
Luvs,
-D
Author's Response: Hey!! I haven't seen you around much! I hope everything is well. =) I decided to write these kind of stories where they find their way back together. It's interesting and fun to make an idea and think of an another way to put them together instead of the tv writer's way in the episodes. Anyway, I'm glad you're enjoy reading my story. More to come soon!!
Date: August 11, 2010 07:41 pm Title: Chapter 1
Looking forward to what happens next! I love seeing Jim and Pam interact with each others family. I'm especially interested in how he's going to fare with her father. I'm also looking forward to seeing if any of Pam's subconscious thoughts will be a part of the story.
Author's Response: Thanks andtheivy, you will see more of that interaction between Jim and her father in the next chapter. I've been thinking about writing about Pam's thoughts and hearing Jim while being in a coma. I'm not quite sure yet where that's going to fit in. But *shrugs* we'll see where this writing will lead me to.
Date: August 11, 2010 07:13 pm Title: Chapter 2
I liked the way this turned out, I'm so sad for Jim and for Pam. And I like what you've done with the suggestions I made. :)
Author's Response: Thank you for helping me with this chapter! Your suggestions helped me to make it more clearer and more understandable for the readers.
10 [Report This]Date: August 07, 2010 11:52 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow, Dani - I wasn't expecting this! I'm so sorry that I didn't say that I was going to be away this week and I was out of touch for a while. I wish I had been around to beta this. Let me know if you want me to help out with chapter two, I'm really excited to see where this is going. Great job with the descriptions and dialog, this was very realistic. Keep going and send me an email!
10 [Report This]Date: August 05, 2010 05:44 am Title: Chapter 1
Hey you posted! I'm looking forward to finding out what happened to Pam before the car accident with the headache and if she's going to be okay.
Author's Response: I finally did! =) I will be writing about that in the 4th or the 5th chapter about why she's having headaches and etc, I don't know yet because I'm still currently writing the third chapter. I hope that I'm keeping everyone on their toes and wondering if she'll be okay once she gets out of coma or not.
Date: August 04, 2010 09:56 pm Title: Chapter 1
Good hook to start! I'm looking forward to seeing what happens when Jim and Pam are reunited, and I'm very interested to see the interaction between Jim and Pam's family members. Update soon.
Author's Response: Thanks andtheivy, you will eventually see more of the interaction with Jim and Pam's family in few chapters. I will be updating the next chapter soon. Writing the third chapter at the moment!
10 [Report This]Date: August 04, 2010 09:34 pm Title: Chapter 1
I really love the last line of this chapter--it's just so simple and real and something I can picture. Hope she's okay! :o
Author's Response: Thank you! You will see in the next chapter which will be up soon, I just sent to the betas.