1 [Report This]Date: August 22, 2022 11:09 am Title: Chapter 1
This actually had the perfect combination of smut and fluff (and you can never do any wrong by portraying Jim as a dad ;-)).
1 [Report This]Date: September 13, 2021 03:12 am Title: Chapter 1
This. Is. ADORABLE.
10 [Report This]Date: August 18, 2011 04:37 pm Title: Chapter 1
Re-reading your fics, and i forgot how awesome this one was :)
10 [Report This]Date: October 15, 2010 01:19 pm Title: Chapter 1
A big welcome back to you, stjoe! This was just...awesome. Can't think of another word. Awesome. Loved it. Stay around, won't you?
Author's Response: Thanks for the review NanReg :) I'll try to stick around for a while - I've got a lot of fluff that needs to be shared haha
9 [Report This]Date: October 15, 2010 10:11 am Title: Chapter 1
Nicely done! I like the rhythm of it. Sexy part was well-written, graphic w/o being crass ... the way you presented their mutual frustration was both cute & in character ... you have wonderfully visual details throughout. The shapes of the sunlight splattered on Jim's back, the visual of him throwing himself back in frustration as Cece's cries come over the monitor, the milk bubbles around Cece's mouth when she finishes nursing. You include so many details that could have come out sounding stilted but your writing is fluid throughout.
I'm running through the text, looking for my favorite passages to pick out. But I'd end up pasting the whole thing up to the last two paragraphs. I didn't like the close as much. I felt like the last two paragraphs became a bit more formulaic and began to tell instead of show. All the rest of the piece felt very fresh and real.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review Vampiric! I totally understand about the last 2 - I def got a little preachy. Glad the visuals were up to par, and I'm looking forward to reading more "Cardiac Care"!!
Date: October 15, 2010 08:57 am Title: Chapter 1
I really liked this. So sweet!
Author's Response: Thanks Dedeen :) I appreciate the review!!
10 [Report This]Date: October 15, 2010 12:30 am Title: Chapter 1
This was AMAZING. Firstly, welcome back. Now you have joined us again, you are not allowed to leave - it's lie... you agreed to writing for us forever when you posted this, mmkay?
I love the mixture of smut and CUTE, sounds weird and you'd think that wouldn't work, but it did. Pam telling Jim not to refer to them as Mommy and Daddy in any type of sexy talk had me in stitches. This really was great. Feel free to you know, venture more in to the fluffy smut field whenever you like ;)
Encoreeeeee ;)
Author's Response: Thanks Hannah :) And I'll try to stick around... I just got back from visiting Scranton last weekend so I've got a lot of inspiration up in the ol' head for some fluffy JAM
Date: October 14, 2010 04:53 pm Title: Chapter 1
I actually could have done with more smut, but that's just because I'm a perv ;-P. Very sweet/sexy/funny. I liked the realism of Cece interrupting them, but then there was a different kind of intimacy with the three of them. The detail of the freckles on Jim's shoulder and Cece's thigh was great, it provided a really nice visual. And yes, I agree that using Mommy and Daddy in any sexy context is a huge mood killer.
My one critique is that I don't recall Jim ever actually calling Pam "Bees" as opposed to "Beesly." However, that is greatly overshadowed by my joy to see someone actually use the word suckle correctly. So yay. Oh, and the line about 'you need to be breastfed?' make me crack up.
If you should be inspired to keep going, I'd love to read more.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review andtheivy!
In re: the "Bees" vs "Beesly", I actually tried them both... I don't remember Pam ever calling Jim "baby", so I figured I could give them a little slack since it took place so early in the morning haha. Glad I could also have given you some joy in my usage of suckle lol
10 [Report This]Date: October 14, 2010 10:55 am Title: Chapter 1
Aww this was such a sweet moment of Jim and Pam with Cecelia in early morning! I really like it, keep on writing more of your stories. =)
Author's Response: Thanks for the review adampascalfan12! :)