1 [Report This]Date: March 15, 2024 02:11 pm Title: can I ask you a question?
Full of all the classic longing and frustration that we love in Jim and Pam! A great piece!
Date: October 03, 2022 05:27 pm Title: can I ask you a question?
Love this!
1 [Report This]Date: March 31, 2021 02:43 pm Title: can I ask you a question?
Oh, man. Again, I love the dialogue here. Awkward and stammering and uncertain and incomplete and so, so telling. Very them.
Date: October 27, 2017 06:57 am Title: can I ask you a question?
Very in character! Loved it:)
Date: April 06, 2017 07:58 pm Title: can I ask you a question?
Oh how sweet. How much easier it would have been!
Date: April 12, 2012 11:56 am Title: can I ask you a question?
I'm so sorry that I missed this the first time around. I love stories that continue after an episode -- and the question from the Dundees needed an answer -- and I loved your answer -- simple -- natural -- and believable -- wonderful writing! That's exactly how it could have happened! (But we had to go through S3 :-) )
Date: June 21, 2011 09:01 am Title: can I ask you a question?
What a gem...just so verrrrry [/Jim] well done. It brought me back to that time when we all just wanted to grab Jim and Pam by the shoulder and shake some sense into both of them. Well, isn't that what we all wanted after watching them at The Dundies? Great Job!
Author's Response: Thanks Mr Bill. Season 2 is full of those shake some sense into them moments, isn't it? I love exploring what might have happened if they'd had a moment of truth before Casino Night. Glad you enjoyed it, thanks for letting me know. :)
10 [Report This]Date: June 19, 2011 07:14 pm Title: can I ask you a question?
*thud*
That's you just killing me with this piece of awesome. read this entire store with a pathetic grin on my face. Are you continuing, or was t his a one piece? Whatever, it was freaking excellnt. And Jim's, '“For the record, I don’t have anything to think about,"' had me melting!
Author's Response: Just a one-shot, but I'm glad you liked it. I think we all know what happens when they figure out that they want to be together! :) Thanks for the review!
10 [Report This]Date: June 19, 2011 06:59 pm Title: can I ask you a question?
Oh, I love this! I love what if scenarios, and this one is about one of the few that are actually believable to me. The hesitation, the talking but not really talking, I like so much about this, but what I really LOVED was that it felt real, like it could be a real possibility - no jumping in anyone's bed, no breaking up with Roy in an hour, no screaming matches, just easy gentle honest conversation, and she's going to think about things. I'd love it if you continued, but I love the open endedness of this. Don't stay away too long!
Author's Response: Believable is nice, thank you! That's exactly what I was going for-- what would happen if she did ask something deep and personal, would it have sped things up a bit? I think so. I'm going to leave it as is. We all know what happens once they decide to be together. :) Glad you enjoyed, and thank you for letting me know. :)
10 [Report This]Date: June 19, 2011 06:40 pm Title: can I ask you a question?
Oh my goodness. That just left me needing to read more - I haven't felt this strong of an urge to read more of a story in so long. It's exciting, actually! I love the coyness of Pam and the desire but hesitancy of Jim. Please continue, this was wondeful!
Author's Response: Aw, this is just a one-shot, but I'm glad you liked it! I just like exploring the what-if scenario... we all know what happens once they come to the decision that they want to be together. :) Thanks for the review!
Date: June 18, 2011 07:04 pm Title: can I ask you a question?
Guh. Brilliant.
I loved this little trip back to when Jim had his barn jacket and Pam had that frizzy hair and the bangs in her face. And all they had was those looks, and wondering 'what if'.
“I’d like to make you happy all the time.” I can hear it in my head and it makes my heart skip a beat. It's so what Jim would have said. You know, if he ever said anything.
"Look back, look back". Oh man, how deliciously anxious, waiting for that look back, the tiniest sign that there was something there.
Nicely done, Callisto. ;o)
Author's Response: Thanks, lisa. Always nice to know when something comes across as something you could hear/see happening. Glad you enjoyed, and thanks for letting me know!
10 [Report This]Date: June 18, 2011 12:23 pm Title: can I ask you a question?
Perfect characterizations, tension, sweetness--thank you for this gorgeous second drink, callisto :)
Author's Response: Aw, thanks, Nan. I appreciate it. :)
Date: June 18, 2011 05:18 am Title: can I ask you a question?
Thanks for this lovely gem. Especially love how Jim wills her to look back as she walks away, and she does...then that final smile between them - such a subtle but auspicious note to end on. Also liked the traffic light that's never green, yet suddenly is - nice little metaphor there, my friend.
Author's Response: Thanks, Colette. Metaphors are fun. :) I worked on that careful conversation for an eternity, but the looking back was how I planned on it to end right from the start. Glad you liked it.
10 [Report This]Date: June 17, 2011 08:25 pm Title: can I ask you a question?
Thank you, thank you for giving us something new before another hiatus. This was a warm look into what could have been, without the unneeded smut that often appears in the Dundies AU. I hope you return to write again before too long!
Author's Response: My pleasure! Yeah, I did not see this being a scenario that could plausibly wander into smut (fun as that might be). Glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for letting me know!
10 [Report This]Date: June 17, 2011 07:44 pm Title: can I ask you a question?
My friend, what a lovely story. It was a pleasure to read and a blast to brainstorm. Your characterization is fantastic. You've writing of Pam and her shy nervousness is spot-on, as well as Jim, who is treading carefully but unwilling to let the moment go. Wonderful, wonderful, wonderful. Maybe I can convince you to write some more... hmm... brainstorming...
Author's Response: Hmm... there's gotta be something we can dissect... think about it. ;)
I'm glad you liked how this came out. Thanks for the conversation! ::hugs::
Date: June 17, 2011 07:30 pm Title: can I ask you a question?
Great story. a real joy to read. I would love to see your take on other episodes where they were close to revealing their feelings for each other.
Author's Response: Thanks, Pyrofanity. I'm glad you enjoyed it; this is my favorite type of story to write. Maybe there's more in me somewhere. Thanks for the review!
10 [Report This]Date: June 17, 2011 06:47 pm Title: can I ask you a question?
'mazing as usual. I think you should skimp on creative titles and just call every story "AWESOMENESS." do it. i dare you. :)
Author's Response: kaat, you're sweet. Thanks. :) Glad you liked it! Thanks for letting me know.
10 [Report This]Date: June 17, 2011 05:10 pm Title: can I ask you a question?
I'm a big fan of 'what if' scenarios too, Callisto and I have to tell you that this hit the spot. Just perfect - the tension in the car, Jim trying to carefully pull it out of her, and this:
It was gentle, but firm. His eyes drifted shut as her lips softened under his, accepting his kiss for a moment before returning it. Her grip on his shirt tightened; his fingers tangled into her hair. Her lips parted and when the tip of her tongue ventured out shyly to touch his he felt a jolt of pure desire deep in his belly. She broke away first, her eyes wide with an expression he couldn’t identify as she released his shirt and sat back. But she didn’t look upset, and she didn’t look sorry. More than anything, she looked like she wanted to kiss him again. He smiled, feeling bold. “Sometimes?” he asked, softly.
That part made my toes curl :) Good stuff!!
Author's Response: Thanks, kells! I'm glad you liked it. All that quiet tension is really hard to write but it's what makes the show-- especially back then-- so great. Glad you enjoyed, thanks for letting me know. :)
Date: June 17, 2011 11:03 am Title: can I ask you a question?
I hadn't been here in forever, and I just happened in during lunch and what should await me but this little gem? Perfect. This is exactly how it should have happened. I could just see their hesitation, feeling their way slowly, drawn out and the little grin at the end was so perfectly in character. Masterfully written. Thanks for this!
Author's Response: Thanks, jazzy. :) That conversation was brutal to write, I'll admit. I'm glad it felt authentic. Thanks for the review! I appreciate your time.