Date: September 13, 2007 09:14 pm Title: Chapter 1
yep, these are some awesome hiakus. i don't know which one i like the best so i say the last one cause that is the best one cause she has jim!
did i just contradict myself and say i don't know which one is the best and then say the last one is the best?
Date: May 08, 2007 12:42 am Title: Chapter 1
These are great! I especially love the first one, but they're all wonderful. I'm a sucker for the short ones. Er, I mean the average ones. Average! ;)
Date: February 16, 2007 06:38 pm Title: Chapter 1
This was a great piece,
Moxie's endings are the best.
Her haikus need work.
:-P kidding of course! I am a big fan of the haiku, just because it makes you say so much in so little. Happy endings do indeed rock Moxie, keep it up.
10 [Report This]Date: October 27, 2006 04:11 pm Title: Chapter 1
I am particularly fond of #4 and #5. "Best dollar spent - EVER." and "Left Roy. Grew up. Won back Jim." are such great lines!
10 [Report This]Date: October 27, 2006 03:49 pm Title: Chapter 1
This was great! So much said with so few words! The last one was my favorite - like the Readers Digest version of what happened.
10 [Report This]Date: October 26, 2006 04:56 pm Title: Chapter 1
This is so charming - I love it. I particularly love the second stanza - it just occurred to me as I read that that it'll be an added bit of awkwardness, I would imagine, for Pam to know (on some level) that he left because of her and that he's not back by choice. Hmmm.
Great job here -
7 [Report This]Date: October 26, 2006 04:11 pm Title: Chapter 1
Hee! So cute. I love the last lines in the second, fourth, and fifth ones - lots of energy and determination in them. And happy endings DO rock!
10 [Report This]Date: October 26, 2006 03:29 pm Title: Chapter 1
I love Haikus! And these are awesome!
Too cute!
10 [Report This]Date: October 26, 2006 03:19 pm Title: Chapter 1
These are great (I have a weak spot for haikus, and actually write them occasionally when inspiration strikes.) I love the haiku form - structure juxtaposed with emotion - just lovely. Can't help it, must ask...didn't you mention something about a haiku praising JK's forearms? (Wait, that may have been girl7).
Author's Response:
That would be the lovely Par5 :-)
Thanks for the comments!
10 [Report This]Date: October 26, 2006 01:37 pm Title: Chapter 1
Liking this haiku bender you all are on. Love your opening line: Dream remains the same. And 'his green eyes'...oh yeah. They certainly are. Well done!
Author's Response: Thanks, Colette - I feel more confident about a piece if you've given me praise. (Seriously - I really admire how well you can turn a phrase.) :-)
8 [Report This]Date: October 26, 2006 12:51 pm Title: Chapter 1
I never would have thought haiku would be a viable form for jamfic, but here I am surprised! Lovely and evocative.
8 [Report This]Date: October 26, 2006 12:37 pm Title: Chapter 1
Very nice! Love love love #s 2 and 4, especially the line:
Like jinx, but for keeps.
Date: October 26, 2006 12:23 pm Title: Chapter 1
Happy endings rock.
Oh yeah, they freaking do. You have said so much with so little -- nicely done.
Date: October 26, 2006 11:28 am Title: Chapter 1
Lemming! But seriously, isn't imitation the sincerest form of flattery? Thanks! Hee! Thank you for adding Pam's POV and of course even though they all have their charms (mmmm...green eyes), the last one says it all. Hope you're feeling better!