Good development chapter for Pam here. I like that this time she takes Jim's advice and takes a chance. Great to see her stand up like that. As cathartic as it was to see Pam slap Dwight, it also felt a little out ofye character for me. At least in this stage in her life. Still this is a completely different character than canon Pam so changing things up a bit is ok.

I'm not sure Dwight would have that kind of reaction after getting slapped though. He just got hit in the face and the next things he's doing is looking at her butt and saying how she's a good breader?

Also Pam, be careful with acts of workplace violence like that. In canon Roy didn't even land the punch and he got fired. Something to think about is all.

Even with all that, I'm still really looking forward to more updates. Keep 'em coming.

Author's Response:

Thanks, I was concerned it would be out of character, but I went for it anyway. Admittedly I flip/flopped on it a few times before deciding to leave it in. My thought process behind it was this was a very hurtful comment and still a fresh wound for Pam, so she smacked him. Dwight's reaction was inspired by how he responds to authority, and with such a display from Pam she might show up on his radar as it were, given some comments we see in other episodes of the series. 

I'm glad that you were still able to enjoy the chapter with these events though, thanks for reviewing! 

"I have a dog that I love much more than you to take care of already, I don't need another."
Ouch. Ouch, ouch, ouch. I have no sympathy for Roy (okay, okay, a very-very liiiiittle sympathy for him), but that was harsh. And Pam, realizing it at the end of the night and wishing to be better than that... oh, so relatable, girl, so relatable.
And the fact that Pam didn't invite Jim... it's nice, in fact. For me, at least. I'd like to see things go as slow as possible, especially if that means that there will be more and more chapters ;)

Author's Response:

I'm glad you enjoyed that line, I wrote it down and said my myself "Oh bur~rn".

We'll see how much further we can string along the Jim-Pam dynamic before we have a revolt on our hands ;)

Thanks for reviewing, glad you enjoyed the chapter! 

Pam should‘ve invited Jim inside!

I guess it’s for the better. I like that Pam is taking it slow.

As for Roy, a DUI is good enough in my opinion. Or maybe he starts dating someone else and just leaves Pam alone

Author's Response:

I'm glad you like Pam taking it slow, I didn't want their first romantic moment to be drunk Pam. 

Thanks for reviewing! 

Oh, I enjoy this awkwardness and cuteness so much! My only regret is that I'm out of jellybeans now :(

Author's Response:

Well I don't need jellybeans if you're reviewing, it means so much more to me in written form!

Thanks for your feedback, I'm glad you're still enjoying it. 

So cute. So sweet. So dumb, both of them.

But then again, that's canon. So, lovely.

Author's Response:

I'm asssuming you're referring to the what your friendship means to me line? I was hoping it was in a good way this time as opposed to canon! Maybe I didn't set the tone right for that.

Thanks for reviewing! 

I'll just leave another note here if you don't mind to much. The whole verb tense thing was only a couple times now that I go back and look. Here's what I found.

“Well, she is cuter than you,” Pam says with a giggle as she watches Jim struggle to get up after sitting for so long." Should probably be 'Pam said with a giggle as she watched Jim struggle to get up...'

"Yeah, I’d really like to,” Pam says with a smile and nods." Again, change it to 'Pam said with a smile...'

"They continue (should be 'continued') in companionable silence for a few minutes before Pam asks (asked), “What are the next steps?”

“Well,” Jim says (said) as they round (rounded) the last corner and start (started) walking towards her house, “I get the kennel, dogfood, and bowls from my car, place them in your house, and take the leash off her, how’s that sound?”

Hope I'm not coming across as to nitpicky. I assure you I'm still very much enjoying this story. Just trying to help out a fellow writer is all.

Author's Response: No, definitely not nit-picky, I am always looking to improve my writing, that's what this is all about. Thank you for pointing these out for me.

Oh, yes, I definitely want to see how Dwight would protect Pam from Jim!
Also - I grinned like an idiot when I read the whole moving-in scene (except for the part where Pam was crying; but it was needed tears).
And I enjoy so much the subtlety of the way Jim and Pam getting closer. All these hugs, and kisses on the cheek, and planning of spending time together... I'm a sucker for these things, I guess :)

Author's Response:

Oops, I may have yadda yadda'd that bit. I'll see if we can cover the Dwight saves Pam prank in a later chapter, as to be honest I forgot about that bit while writing the next one.

I'm glad the move-in got a smile from you, that's what most of my writing is all about!

Thanks for reviewing, glad to hear you're enjoying things! 

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Very nice chapter all around. Seems like the talk with Mom did Pam a lot of good there. Lovely to see her start down a path of who she wants to be. Great to see.

Well done on the prank too. I love the image of Dwight fuming while Pam is sitting at her desk acting as if nothing's wrong and all the while Jim is in awe of her. Just lovely.

One last thing though, Jim's last line to her. Have you been watching "The Princess Bride," of late? If so, there is of course a double meaning there and if that's what you intend, bravo for a great use of that line.

Author's Response:

Watching of late? No. Every visit to my grandparents ever in my childhood? Yes. Will Pam catch on to this? We'll have to wait and see.

I'm glad you liked the Dwight prank seen, that was what I was going for.

And yeah, Pam's mom with the truth bombs was a hard one to write, but I felt like she needed a push.

Glad you enjoyed, thanks for reviewing! I always look forward to your feedback. 

Multiple POVs are nice!
I'm glad Pam had that final conversation with Roy (also felt bad for him, but... well, it's kind of his fault that the engagement and relationships ended that way) and even more glad that Pam is moving on in all meaning! The kiss in the cheek was adorable, and her own reaction on it was priceless! Thank you for writing!

Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing! I'm glad you enjoyed it, writing this has been a lot of fun in an otherwise usually uneventful life nowadays.

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I do like how you handled both POV.

Author's Response:

Thanks, I'm glad you appreciated it.

Thanks for reviewing! 

Not bad with the multiple POV's. They were different enough to know who was thinking what so that's good.

Loved Pam's excitedness and her little trick in parking in Dwight's spot. Just a little bit of mayhem to keep things fun. Roy is still the clueless kind of oaf here. Thinking they're still together like that. Kinda feel bad for him, but on second thought, no I don't. Saying you'll try to do better rather than saying I will do better shows that even now he's just not committed to the relationship and Pam's right to dump him.

Looking forward to seeing how Jim interacts with everything.

Author's Response:

Thanks, I tried to lead off every paragraph with a clear shift if that's what was happening and I'm glad it worked out.

I'm glad you enjoyed Pam's brand of pranking. Roy is committed to the idea of Pam: A live in maid - not Pam herself. I'm sure he'll find someone who wants to fill that mold eventually. 

Thanks for your review! 

Will has strong dad vibes, which you know, works well what with him being Pam’s dad and all. I love him. He’s a sweetheart. I’m glad Pam’s finding her way on her own - but, being so well supported by her parents as she does it. I think you’ve definitely made it reasonable for Pam to get a dog! I love that she’s going to be around the corner from Jim.

Author's Response:

I'm glad that you enjoyed Will, that was the vibe that I was going for. I feel like Pam's parents would be supportive of getting their daughter out of a relationship that doesn't seem to be going anywhere fast and was making Pam unhappy. As well, they don't have to keep anything set aside for the Soon(TM) wedding. As far as living by Jim, well they will definitely have an excuse to see each-other outside of work now, so looking forward to that. And Pam with a dog has become like 50% of my motivation for this story now, not gonna lie. It will be a very cute hijacking at the very least hopefully.

Thanks for reviewing!