Date: April 24, 2020 07:53 pm Title: Home Is Where the Heart Is
Nice to see some forward progress with Pam here. I like that she has this support system in the immediate Post-Roy days. She's going through a big change in her life so it helps to have people behind her. I also like that she's getting set up for her. Not jumping right into another relationship. Take some time to get herself figured out. Hopefully not to much time mind you, cause we of course love seeing Jim and Pam go from friends to more than friends.
Author's Response:
Well, the chapter title here was not an accident. Rest assured that I will get them together as soon as I can, because Pam's heart is now a block and a half from Jim ;)
Thanks for reviewing, and I'm glad you enjoyed the progress on the homefront.
1 [Report This]Date: April 24, 2020 11:35 am Title: Scar Tissue
No wonder that Pam's mom heard a lot about Jim. But Pam's dad? Meeting with parents could be awkward, but here it happened so smoothly... very nice!
Also, it would be lovely to see Pam as a pet owner :)
Author's Response:
In my mind Pam's parents are usually in the same room when she's talking to her mom on the phone, so he must have heard somethings. I'm glad you enjoyed the encounter regardless!
I am also looking forward to Pam as a pet owner.
Thanks for reviewing!
1 [Report This]Date: April 24, 2020 07:29 am Title: Scar Tissue
This story is great so far! I like that Pam is getting her life together without the added pressure of beginning a relationship with Jim. But I hope that’s not too far away.
And I can only imagine that it’s not easy to turn out a new chapter daily. But your audience certainly appreciates it. Great story!!
Author's Response:
Thank you, it means a lot to me that you're enjoying the story. I am trying to shift the interactions towards a more romantic vibe, but seeing as that's something I've never written before, I am using fluff as my crutch.
Thank you for reviewing, I hope to see you next time!
1 [Report This]Date: April 23, 2020 10:12 pm Title: Scar Tissue
Another lovely update - you’re doing a great job on the daily updates too. I’m impressed with anyone who manages it!
Nice to have Jim meet Pam’s dad. They’re still very much in the friend zone here, but it’s great to see Pam relying on Jim for support in so many ways.
Author's Response:
Thank you, I am impressed with anyone who manages it as well, seeing as I'm laid off and don't leave the house all day!
Jim is certainly in the friendzone, and I'll be honest I've been churning through ideas of how to change that, but romance is not something I've ever written before, ergo, not my strong suit. I'm hoping to change the tone of the relationship in the next 2-3 chapters.
Thanks for reviewing, see you after the next one!
Date: April 23, 2020 09:21 pm Title: Scar Tissue
Seems like a bit of a filler chapter. Needed info to get out of the way so that's good. Nice to see Jim and Pam still getting on good. Also good to see Jim getting on well with Will. Nice job.
Author's Response:
Yeah it was a bit of a filler. I'm trying to move things forward, I don't want to get stuck in the same week for the rest of the story. I'm glad you liked the meeting with Will.
Thanks for reviewing, I really appreciate the time you take to provide feedback on every chapter. See you next time!
1 [Report This]Date: April 23, 2020 08:29 pm Title: Scar Tissue
Aww, very nice! I really enjoyed Jim meeting Will and I hope she finds an apartment she likes (or you know Mark could move out... ;) )
Author's Response:
Thanks, I'm glad meeting Will came across well! I was worried that it felt a little forced or stilted.
Honestly I'm forgot about Mark, but I can't help but feeling that would be a little too contrived for all the work I made fictional Pam do to find a suitable apartment.
Thanks for reviewing, I hope to see you next time!
1 [Report This]Date: April 23, 2020 07:45 pm Title: The Homefront
Came back to catch up on this one and I'm rewarded with 3 new chapters!
The dialogue between Jim and Pam flows nicely and is in character.
I'm surprised how much more I like a quiet, understanding break up between Roy and Pam than the tumultuous, jerk face break up... puts them on the same page being honest with themselves and each other that it's not really working and they both want something different.
And now that Roy is out of the picture, what's next?!
Thanks for writing!
Author's Response:
I hope to make that 4 if I have anything to say. An hour until bedtime and I'm almost done the next one!
Thanks, I always doubt the dialogue when I'm reading it back, so it's nice to have this affirmed.
I'm glad you liked the breakup, I was worried it wouldn't live up to the expectations I set in the first chapter.
We'll have to wait and see what the picture shapes up to be, stay tuned!
You're welcome, and thank you for reviewing!
1 [Report This]Date: April 23, 2020 01:13 am Title: The Homefront
Fairly smooth re-break up. Kinda in keeping that Roy wouldn't get it at first. However this time he does seem to come to an acceptance about it quicker. Interesting choice there. Good for Pam to stick to her guns though. Writing the actual break-up can be difficult so good on you for writing it out.
Jim's still doing great by being the friend right now. Looking forward to seeing how the rest will all pan out.
Author's Response:
In my head, it seems to me that the breakup was a long time in coming, they just needed an event to break them out of the holding pattern they were in. I'm not sure if I should have had Roy fight for it more, but I feel by this point that they've probably had fights over the wedding date before and he's finally ready to let go when Pam drops this on him. And plus, this means he can "get on" Katy (Ok, no, that was not actually in my thought process for him, but boy would that have made him look like an even larger oaf).
Writing the breakup was indeed difficult, so thank you for reviewing it!
Jim is indeed still in the friend-zone, we'll see if he can do anything about that.
1 [Report This]Date: April 23, 2020 12:14 am Title: The Homefront
Oh, I love this version of Pam and Roy breaking up. It felt so realistic. I really, really liked that you had Roy just kind of getting it, and being on the same page as Pam. To have him understand that the spark isn’t really there anymore, and accept that instead of arcing up and becoming aggressive was a nice change in the fic world. I enjoyed this chapter, it captured the break up playing out very well.
Author's Response:
Thank you! I was trying to get in their heads, and when you think about it once Roy gets on the same page as he can't really blame her for being upset that she's three years into an engagement to be married, with no end in sight. I'm more of a fan of a sympathetic Roy in situations like this because I feel it gives some depth to the character, as opposed to the angry brute that we so often see him portrayed as.
In all honesty though I was really worried about the reception of this chapter, so again, thank you for reviewing!
1 [Report This]Date: April 22, 2020 11:29 pm Title: The Homefront
I really loved how you handled the break up! I like how you portrayed Roy, having the same fears as Pam about breaking up.
Can’t wait to read what happens next!
Author's Response: Thank you, I'm glad you like the portrayal! Now that the hardest part is over, I am excited to see where it goes next as well.
1 [Report This]Date: April 22, 2020 11:11 pm Title: The Homefront
I don't know what I expected from Pam and Roy's confrontation, but... God, that was so, so good! Seriously, I like that they told to each other like adults and sorted things out as much as they could. And the fact that Roy lost the ring - just a little perfection!
Looking forward to the next chapter!
Author's Response: Thank you! The confrontation was really hard to write for me, I was concerned it wouldn't come across well. I tried to portray it as best I could and I'm glad you enjoyed it! And the ring... that was a fun moment of me going back and re-reading and realising I never had Roy pick it up, imagine that!
1 [Report This]Date: April 22, 2020 08:14 pm Title: The Homefront
Aww. The "no you hang up" is adorable. I'm glad things with Roy were relatively...OK. For a breakup like that.
Author's Response: Thanks, I'm glad that you enjoyed the chapter! I'm just happy to be done the hardest part, I was really sweating writing the breakup.
1 [Report This]Date: April 22, 2020 01:19 am Title: The Last Mile
I think this is a very reasonable way for things to progress during the day. Apartments are hard to find! Good luck, Pam.
Author's Response:
Thank you, I always hope my writing comes off as plausible!
Thanks for reviewing, see you next time!
1 [Report This]Date: April 21, 2020 11:10 pm Title: The Last Mile
Lovely job of intertwining some of those canon moments (i.e. Michael) into this. Pam is not in for an easy evening...
Author's Response:
Thanks, not much more of that to do seeing as in canon this was the last episode of the easson, so whatever happens next I'll have to improvise!
Appreciate you reviewing, see you next chapter!
Date: April 21, 2020 09:16 pm Title: The Last Mile
Yeah, she's going to need some steel in her spine. Fortunately for her she's got an anchor in Jim and it seems to be working out well. One thing I did notice here was that Roy didn't come up and tickle an apology out of Pam at Jim's desk like we saw in canon. I could see him trying something like that when she and Roy get back to the apartment which gives Pam the fire to get it through his head that she's done. Or if you have another way, I'm sure that'll work too.
Nice job getting into her head as well as characterizing the craziness that is the DM Scranton office.
Author's Response:
I do have some fire on tap for Pam, in the form of a plot hole that I created inadvertently that may come back to bite Roy in the butt.
My thinking is that Roy was hoping to leave Pam alone long enough for her to "realize what and overreaction" she was having, and as such avoided her for the rest of the day.
Thanks for taking the time to give feedback, I hope to see you next time!
Date: April 21, 2020 06:29 pm Title: The Last Mile
I really like this story. I wish the chapter was longer, but that’s just me being greedy. I really want to read what happens next!
Author's Response: I'm glad you're enjoying it! Sorry I couldn't get a longer chapter out today, I got done what I could before a prior commitment.
1 [Report This]Date: April 21, 2020 08:46 am Title: Fog of War
Such a great update!
The way Roy reacted here is both hilarious (seriously, did he think that Pam just overreacted?) and sad (was he so insensitive in their relationships as he showed it in this scene?).
And the exchange between Pam and Jim was so nice! I like that even in the darkest hours, they still could joke and laugh. It's lovely!
Author's Response:
Thanks, I'm glad that you like how Roy is potrayed! As far as Jim and Pam having a laugh, I don't know what I'd do with myself if they weren't allowed to. Thankfully I'm the writer, so I make the rules here.
Thanks for reviewing!
1 [Report This]Date: April 21, 2020 01:13 am Title: Fog of War
It feels weird to say because it goes against the grain, but I loved your Roy here. He’s so well written. Just the right amount of cluelessness. Jim and Pam were very sweet too!
Author's Response:
Well, I don't think it's weird to say that you love Roy for being an oaf. Anything that get's Pam out of that relationship, right?
I'm glad you enjoyed it, thanks for reviewing!
1 [Report This]Date: April 20, 2020 07:06 pm Title: Fog of War
Aww...I love that seeing eye dog thing. And 10/10 for Jim delivering Roy's message without actually trying to patch things up between Pam and Roy.
Also I really hope this doesn't go into a Pam-dates-OC situation, but I'm excited to see whatever else you decide to put them through.
Author's Response:
Well, I for one think Pam needs a dog now. Who would've thought that would become one of the goals of this fic?
I promise you that I am too lazy to invent an OC to sweep Pam off her feet, let alone figure out how that would work.
Thanks for your review, see you next time!
Date: April 20, 2020 05:34 pm Title: Fog of War
Dense Roy being dense is such a great way to characterize him here. I mean he's a walking stereotype of guys not getting a hint.
Loved Jim doing his best to not only stave off invasive questions from the film crew, but also to go find Pam. I love that he just knows that what she needs right now is a friend and support.
Lovely banter between the two of them as well. Really looking forward to seeing how this all pans out.
Author's Response:
Well, admittedly I am not a Roy fan. S3 Roy was kinda alright, bit looking back at S1 and 2 Roy reminds me that his baseline in the relationship is pretty abysmal.
The thing I love about Jam is that they are best friends first, so I like to imagine that Jim knows how to help pam with Roy problems by now, especially after that talking head to the effect that he has before.
Thanks for your feedback! I look forward to writing more for you folks.
1 [Report This]Date: April 20, 2020 02:55 pm Title: Fog of War
I spent most of this chapter with a smile on my face and thinking, "awwww". I love how you're setting this story up. You can still go so many different directions, but I love it regardless!
Author's Response: Thanks, I'm glad I could make you smile!
1 [Report This]Date: April 19, 2020 11:54 pm Title: The Tipping Point
This is great! I feel like you’ve balanced the dialogue and Pam’s thoughts well. I love this reaction! I so wish it had really gone down like this...
Author's Response: Thank you, I appreciate the technical feedback! And thanks for enjoying the story too!
1 [Report This]Date: April 19, 2020 09:54 pm Title: The Tipping Point
Yay! Amazing to see Pam snapped, and I'll be excited with any direction you choose (except with Pam going back to Roy, but I hope that ship is sailed).
Can't wait for the continuation :)
Author's Response: Thanks for your feedback! I too always wanted Pam to snap at some point, and that is why we write fanfic!
1 [Report This]Date: April 19, 2020 08:55 pm Title: The Tipping Point
Another direction would have been for her to take that ring and shove it... well, never mind...
I've always had a hard time relating to Pam in this scene with her level of self control (or self esteem). It would have been a breaking point for me, so I'm excited to see where you take this! I forget to consider that the doc crew is filming and how that adds another element to their behavior and choices (and that there is so much we never see). Glad you brought that up here with Pam's reaction.
Thanks for writing!
Author's Response:
... and shove it up your butt?
Stanley's great, I loved that gag.
Thanks for your feedback!
I always thought it had to be especially humiliating in scenes like this where it could theoretically end up on national television at some point in the future. I'm glad you like where I'm headed with this, and I hope not to disappoint!
1 [Report This]Date: April 19, 2020 08:03 pm Title: The Tipping Point
Great premise!! Can’t wait to read what happens next
Author's Response: Thank you!