Date: May 13, 2007 02:16 pm Title: Mother's Day
"While you were in those final minutes of labor and I was doing...well nothing" - while this is very funny, let me speak up in favor of the Dads, who are normally holding a foot or a knee in those final minutes of labor. Actually, a really important job, as the moms are trying to push out a bowling ball, Dads (and another assistant on the other side) are providing leverage. That's what my husband was doing anyway, and thank goodness for him. But the line was very, very funny.
This is all so extremely good, I can't even tell you. Probably this chapter, the No-Jill list, and the letters to Jill are my favorite chapters. I really like how you put little things from the other chapters into this one. You've created such a nice little place for us here.
Thank you for the Mother's Day gift and wishes. I was thinking this morning that I should go over to TWoP and ask for a fic about Mother's Day, and here this is!
Date: May 13, 2007 11:05 am Title: Mother's Day
IT's official. i can't love this fic any more. i just don't have the capacity. it's that or start withdrawing my love from my family so i have more to give to this story, but i'm afraid of the consequences. it could be bad.
Date: May 11, 2007 09:17 pm Title: Mother's Day
So many great little moments in this chapter! It's fabulous how you referenced other chapters in the entries. And it sounds so very Jim. Great voice in the entries.
This was so Jim: "Yesterday I tried to entertain Jill with my watch." Hee.
Love the redacted breastfeeding entry, the pregnancy scare entry, all the entries referring to sex--because, yay, sex!
Great chapter. This story is da bomb.
Author's Response: ROFLMAO. Yay sex! Indeed. Even just a reference to it from one of these two is fabulous! lol. Thanks so much for reading and telling me which parts you enjoyed! Awesome.
Date: May 11, 2007 06:05 pm Title: Mother's Day
Dear LoveFool -
I want to marry this story.
And subsequently - Jim Halpert.
Love, xoxoxo
Seriously just exactly what I needed to read today. I can hear Jim's voice so loud and clear in every entry I can't even take it.
LOVED THIS....
That was the best wedding ever,
Jim
P.S. Aside from ours...calm down.
Author's Response: hehehe. He knows his Pam and what could potentially tick her off! lol. So, so, so, so glad you're enjoying the story Hugs! I'm afraid you're gonna have to get in line over marrying Jim though. ;-)
Date: May 11, 2007 04:13 pm Title: Mother's Day
i envy you and your wit. This is why I can't write Jim because I'm not a funny person...you just capture his voice so perfectly, I love it.
I love you
I'm not even kidding
Author's Response: well I love you too!!! What an awesomely nice review! Honestly, I'm not quite as quick on my feet as Jim is. I'm not nearly as witty, but I'm glad I've got ya fooled! It takes me awhile to figure out what he'd say in each sitch. I'm much "wittier" when I can mull it over for a few hours. lol. So thanks again!
Date: May 11, 2007 02:27 pm Title: Mother's Day
Lovely, lovely, lovely. My favorite lines are easily: "Stop snorting cocaine and read to your child once in awhile ok? Jeez. So tired of this." and "Let's make out." I love all your little lines for Jim to use in place of "sincerely." I think you're doing a fine job here and, frankly, you should fastforward a year or two so they can have another baby and start the story all over again!
Great work! -CH
Author's Response: haha, start the story all over again huh? lol. Obviously from that one entry where they had a bit of a pregnancy scare, I thought about it. lol. But I think I will have to start thinking soon about what else I can write about their little family...what moment in time, etc. SO glad to hear what your favorite lines are - I LOVE when people tell me exactly what parts they dug. Thanks so much for the review Becky215!
Date: May 11, 2007 01:57 pm Title: Mother's Day
I freaking LOVE this story. You've got Jim nailed (TWSS). I was freaking grinning the entire time reading this chapter. Sooooo good.
Author's Response: Hmm...I WISH I had Jim nailed. teehee ::snicker:: I'm so glad you're still enjoying this story Starry. Thanks so much for reviewing!!!
Date: May 11, 2007 01:47 pm Title: Mother's Day
This chapter just took this story across the line from great to phenomenal. This IS Jim as Dad (and what sweeter thought is there?) If I started quoting lines, my review would be as long as the story. And, were you a fly on the wall when I had my first? Because you nail every watershed moment of that time...just a joy.
Author's Response: Wow! Colette you are so awesome. Thank you so much for this review, it meant a lot to me to read this. I especially love when i hear from parents that the story rings true for them. Thank you, thank you, thank you! There's something about the way Jim would write down his thoughts and feelings that just intrigues me so I'm so glad people have enjoyed this format so much!
Date: May 11, 2007 01:46 pm Title: Mother's Day
You're ruining me, I hope you know that. Because when I do eventually get married, and my husband does none of these things, I'll be thinking "What the hell? You mean no one is like the Jim Halpert that Lovefool writes? Screw it, I'm becoming a nun."
Still amazing. Still loving this story. Still waiting for an update (already) :)
Author's Response: ROFL. Well we're both in the same boat, because the Jim Halpert in my head is not the man I'm going to marry either! But we can dream ::sigh:: (probably not healthy though - you're right) Thanks for reviewing!!!
Date: May 11, 2007 01:40 pm Title: Mother's Day
This series never disappoints! Always in character and always happy!
Thanks!
Author's Response: Thanks Desert Island! So glad you're enjoying it!
Date: May 11, 2007 01:34 pm Title: Mother's Day
Loved it, as always. Brilliant. It's so funny, I thought the breast milk thing was over the top and then I saw that he redacted it...so clever. How you do this without hitting false notes is a wonder. Great stuff.
Author's Response: Thank you, thank you...you can repay me with more Newlywed Game! ;-) Thanks for the feedback Broken. I too thought the breast milk thing was crossing the line, especially the last "toast" to Michael and Pam. lol. There was no way to salvage it except to redact. lol. Glad you enjoyed!
Date: May 03, 2007 07:10 am Title: In The Still of the Night
You're right, this is different from the other chapters, but I love the consistency of the characterizations (as in, no matter what's happening, they are CLEARLY still Jim and Pam), and the fluff with a shot of reality (as someone said on the TWoP boards). Another great chapter!
Date: May 02, 2007 10:10 pm Title: In The Still of the Night
Awww, what an emotional chapter! I'm glad you expanded the incident into a whole chapter of its own. The letter from Jim gave a really sharp image of what it must have felt like, but this in-depth POV from both his side and Pam's really worked to help us understand the huge impact this had on them.
Date: May 02, 2007 06:33 pm Title: In The Still of the Night
I was just recommended this story today and I'm sorry I missed it all along. You really, truly capture the characters perfectly. I feel like I am reading Jim and Pam and their experiences with their first baby. Its totally them in your story, which is amazing and wonderful. And I think you did a fantastic job balancing their relationship with what it would be like to have a newborn baby as a first time parent. Fantastic job.
Date: May 02, 2007 11:52 am Title: In The Still of the Night
Scary!
Date: May 02, 2007 10:39 am Title: In The Still of the Night
I'm glad you made this incident into a whole chapter...so touching and, as usual, the characterization is incredibly accurate. And when Melissa said:
Go home to your wife and baby
Just having them referred to that way, so incidentally, actually gave me a little thrill. How far gone am I, LOL? And also, loved when Jim comes into the bedroom and Pam's nursing Jill - such a sweet intimate moment. Really felt like they're a family. Lovely.
Date: May 02, 2007 09:47 am Title: In The Still of the Night
Another excellent chapter. I don't think I've reviewed this story yet, so let me just take the time to gush about how awesome it is. i uually don't read Jam baby-fics b/c they're often overly cutesy, but this is just the right amount of adorable without it being too much, b/c there's so much more mixed in- humor, real worries/challenges involved in being a parent, great characterizations for everyone, all of it is just amazing. Can't wait to read more!
Date: May 02, 2007 09:04 am Title: In The Still of the Night
May I please tell you that I LOVE this story? Every bit! I happen to adore baby fic, and you are one of the best. Loved that we saw Pam's interaction with Jill. Now please give the people what they want-- a Pam and Jill chapter!
Date: May 02, 2007 08:08 am Title: In The Still of the Night
Eeeeep! Scary! If you hadn't referenced this in the previous chapter, I would've been scared outta my mind reading it. But I knew it would turn out okay. And Protective!Jim is always a crowd pleaser. :)
Love this story.
Date: May 02, 2007 06:22 am Title: In The Still of the Night
When I was a teenager, someone tried to break into the house I was babysitting at. You captured Pam really well, I thought. Her train of thought regarding Jill not waking up, putting her in the closet, etc... was very right on. Good chapter.
9 [Report This]Date: May 02, 2007 04:49 am Title: In The Still of the Night
Oh LoveFool. Sigh.
You have this really wonderful knack for capturing the mundane. Wait. That sounds weird - but it's really what I feel. Maybe I'm not expressing myself well.
Of course Pam wanted Jim and OF COURSE she couldn't call him because she'd lose it. The way she acted with Jill - wanting her to have what she wanted even though through it all the baby was probably oblivious - rang so very true.
And Jim - feeling overly guilty and like a total ass for going out just one night? So realistic and so well done.
And Dwight? Oh Dwight.
I'd like to request that you never, ever stop updating this story. I know you might have other things to do with your life - but it would make me very sad to see it end. :(
Date: May 01, 2007 11:39 pm Title: In The Still of the Night
I think this was perfect. I think the language was perfectly warranted if thats what you were worried about. I was so scared with Pam I just needed Jim to come home. I'm pretty sure my own face lit up when he came through the door...
i'm silly
10 [Report This]Date: May 01, 2007 10:36 pm Title: In The Still of the Night
When I saw what this chapter was about, I squealed like a 8-year-old girl. This was an awesome chapter. Before, in my other review, I MEANT to say that this is one of the best stories on this site. Wow. First off, I loved how you were able to deflect the drama with humor. . .from Dwight of all people. I could really see him doing that.
I also loved how tender Jim and Pam were with each other. This chapter was perfect. I love this story, and it's very well written.
Date: May 01, 2007 10:13 pm Title: In The Still of the Night
Awww I'm glad that you told that story...not everything can be super fluffy and this was really well written and you could just see how much Jim and Pam love each other and their little family. I'm glad everything worked out in the end for them :o)
Date: May 01, 2007 09:38 pm Title: In The Still of the Night
Wow, I love this story. :) Although, throughout the whole chapter I kept waiting for it to be revealed that it was Roy for some reason, not sure why.
Keep the adorableness of this little family coming!