10 [Report This]Date: December 04, 2006 10:18 am Title: Realizations
He's not there for the jellybeans. Hell, yeah!
I don't mind the idea that Karen figures it out first- but I hope that when she does, she realizes that it is time to flee, not fight.
All three of these are so good. What a triangle.
Author's Response:
Oh lis. I hope so too.
I'm glad you liked them. :)
8 [Report This]Date: November 24, 2006 01:11 pm Title: Realizations
wonderful.
Author's Response: Thanks gotkona!
10 [Report This]Date: November 23, 2006 06:42 am Title: Realizations
Lovely. You have so many beautiful lines in there! :)
It's just like her, a series of straight lines, no twists or turns. He wonders why he can't be satisfied with simple. She's a smart girl, who won't be fooled. He's not there for the jellybeans. There's an invisible line, an electric current that runs from his desk to well - not hers.
Very lyrical and I thought you've really been able to capture the essence of the current lives of these three people.
Author's Response: Trying to stay within 100 words was the thing that did the trick. I had to get to the point. It was fun - I'm glad you liked it!
10 [Report This]Date: November 22, 2006 04:07 pm Title: Realizations
"He's not there for the jellybeans." - it's a comon though that Karen will just *know* what's (still) between Jim and Pam, and one that I love seeing addressed.
"It surprises her - empowers her - the strength she finds now that she's alone. " - this line sumarizes wonderfully how I feel about Single!Pam.
Author's Response:
I think that little interview on nbc.com w/RJ spurred that part. She was saying that Karen knows what she wants and I think she'll also be the type to know what she can't have.
And Single!Pam. Dear God save me from having to watch her backslide. Pretty, pretty please??
I'm glad you liked it Luna. Thanks - as always - for taking the time to review.
10 [Report This]Date: November 22, 2006 01:45 pm Title: Realizations
"He's not there for the jellybeans." - Damned straight!
This is fantastic, really, great job.
Author's Response:
Well c'mon now. He never was. :)
Thanks lano!!!
10 [Report This]Date: November 22, 2006 01:39 pm Title: Realizations
She's surprised she's kept from tripping over it - or from feeling the shock - for as long as she has.
Oh, kudos, Hugs! These are excellent.
Author's Response: Thanks LL! I love that you think so!
10 [Report This]Date: November 22, 2006 01:24 pm Title: Realizations
I loved every part of each of these 3, but the line I think I loved the most was "He's not there for the jellybeans." That really resonated with me. And this line, too - "She's surprised she's kept from tripping over it - or from feeling the shock - for as long as she has." And I can't forget this - "His life becomes a puzzle. He struggles to find the last piece.
Though he tries, he can't make her fit."
Author's Response: Thanks so much kaystar! I'm so glad you liked it.
10 [Report This]Date: November 22, 2006 12:51 pm Title: Realizations
Her hair is a stark contrast to the linens covering the pillow as it fans out behind her. It's just like her, a series of straight lines, no twists or turns. He wonders why he can't be satisfied with simple.
She's a smart girl, who won't be fooled. He's not there for the jellybeans.
Love both those parts. So good.
I really enjoyed this.
Author's Response: Penguin_jammies - you might win for cutest name ever. I'm very glad you liked it.
9 [Report This]Date: November 22, 2006 12:50 pm Title: Realizations
Awesome, darlin'! Love that Jim equates Karen's straight lines with her directness.
There's an invisible line, an electric current that runs from his desk to well - not hers.
She's surprised she's kept from tripping over it - or from feeling the shock - for as long as she has.
Great image.
Author's Response:
I'm still not sure that this wasn't just an exercise in avoidance. ;)
But thank you. I'm so glad you thought so.
10 [Report This]Date: November 22, 2006 11:08 am Title: Realizations
Instead, he continues to crave complications - exactly, but it's gotten too complicated, too many obstacles...when it could be as simple as saying what they really felt. Just the two (NOT three) of them. Oh, don't get me started!
It really was the two of them against the insanity. Karen is v. nice (much as I feel I even know her), but she doesn't seem likely to own the insanity the way Pam and Jim did, and to find the life in it. Too many straight, simple lines, as you say.
Luckily, I do think Karen is clued in enough to see the wires before she trips too badly...and to know that no one needs to eat that many jellybeans.
Well said, xoxox. Please, m'am...could you make some more?
Author's Response:
EXACTLY Colette. It'd be sooooo easy if they'd just talk for God's sake. I mean she couldn't stand a day not talking to him once upon a time. How did she manage MONTHS???
Pam's ingenuity is her best weapon at this point. Jim loves all the things about her - and knew enough to go after her (IMO) even after she said no on CN - knowing she was just chicken. He's too hurt to see it now but if he takes a minute he might see the light.
I do think Karen will figure it out...unless as I believe in my dream world - Jim spills his guts at Cooper's and now she knows so she's going to team up with Jim to help him get Pam back.
Yeah. I know. But I still believe in Santa too. :)
10 [Report This]Date: November 22, 2006 10:51 am Title: Realizations
I love these. You're awesome.
Author's Response: Yeah. You know - now that you mention it - I'm thinking I'm not so bad. :) LOL! Thank you. I'm glad to hear it.
Date: November 22, 2006 10:17 am Title: Realizations
This is really lovely.
the strength she finds now that she's alone.
Very nice. Go, Pam!
Author's Response: Do you think if I keep making her strong here she'll mimick it on the show? 'Cause that's my goal. :)
Author's Response: eta: have no clue why I decided to add a "k" onto mimic. But wanted y'all to know I noticed. :)
10 [Report This]Date: November 22, 2006 10:16 am Title: Realizations
"Afterwards he watches her sleep" NOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!! That's definitely not the way it goes! Love the "series of straight lines" in comparison to you-know-who's wavy lines.
Determined Pam - yes, thank you. Let's start implementation of that singular strategy. ASAP.
Karen? Lovely to meet you, dear, and if you're so smart, I'm sure you can find your own way out! Fantastic image of the electric current being a palpable thing.
Lovely, xoxoxo, just lovely! But I'm still required to kick your ass. I'm like the Terminator. I'll never sleep, never die, never waver in my quest to make you finish NaNo! Get typing!
Author's Response:
Yeah. I know, I know. But he's not a monk - and if I have anything to say about it they'll be someone else he's watching as she sleeps tout de suite.
Oh I can't tell you how much I want to see Pam regroup and go for it. Oh GD & Co. please make Pam determined. Please, please, PLEASE.
And Karen? I see her potential. She has so much to offer Cumberland Mills. She might like Baltimore alot. Maybe I should post her resume for her. LOL!
I'm doing well NaNo wise. Came up with a whole other concept that's going to get me closer to goal in no time. So you and your only 6617 words left can put your yardstick away and detract your claws. ;) j/k I know it's only a sign that you care!
10 [Report This]Date: November 22, 2006 10:15 am Title: Realizations
He's not there for the jellybeans.
Exactly, Karen. Talk to you later! Ha, kidding. I really enjoyed this. In so few word you're able to convey what's so complicated about this relationship. And go empowered!Pam! I hope we see her get the strength to do something soon.
Author's Response:
If only I could wish it into existence.
Trust me - I'm trying. ;)