1 [Report This]Date: November 09, 2020 02:39 am Title: Sunshine
There could not possibly be a more JAM way for them to get engaged. I love your writing. :)
Date: April 12, 2009 09:21 am Title: Sunshine
beautiful!!!! i love this!
Date: January 17, 2007 02:57 am Title: Snow
oh my god why do I love the idea of them having sex in the office park parking lot so much??
I really really do
Author's Response: If you want some backstory, check out the sequel to this: Celestial Bodies: http: //mtt.just-once.net/fanfiction/viewstory.php?sid=890&warning=4 Thanks for reading!
Date: January 16, 2007 08:16 pm Title: Sunshine
well-written and believable. i really liked it!
Author's Response: Thanks!
Date: December 27, 2006 01:33 pm Title: Sunshine
aww. love. i love all of your stuff. good goodness.
Author's Response: Aw, thank you!
9 [Report This]Date: December 14, 2006 08:36 am Title: Fog
How did you make this so funny and so painful all at once? Bloody glove? Convincing Dwight he's forgotten due to PSD? Standing weekly appoinment with Toby? Jim in pain *sigh, again*? Pure gold.
Author's Response:
Thanks, Par5!
9 [Report This]Date: December 13, 2006 09:24 pm Title: Sunshine
Awwwww! The ending is so adorable! And the rest of these were just lovely...angsty in a good way.You definitely captured how they're such good friends, playing tricks on Dwight and able to read each other's faces and thoughts.
Author's Response: Thanks, mixedberries!
9 [Report This]Date: December 13, 2006 06:53 pm Title: Sunshine
Oh, this was just so good. I finally had time to go back and read Color Wheel and Language Barrier (I hope it's ok, this review is technically for all three), and this just continued the amazing-ness. I know that there was much love for that one particular line from the last chapter over at TWoP, and let me tell you...it is something. No wonder you blushed.:)
I am currently crossing my fingers that you will continue these with another installment....(hint hint hint)
Author's Response: Oh, Bennie. I suppose I will forgive you for only one review ;) since it's a very nice one. Another installment, huh? It's certainly possible, if I stumble across another theme that inspires.
8 [Report This]Date: December 13, 2006 06:25 pm Title: Sunshine
Yay! Oh, so cute. I love unconventional proposals. This whole story made me extremely happy :)
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it! Thanks for reading!
8 [Report This]Date: December 13, 2006 06:21 pm Title: Snow
I'm dead again! Jim's low and teasing voice could do it for me if he was talking about wallpaper, and when he uses it to say something like that, I'm helpless. Very cute chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks!
9 [Report This]Date: December 13, 2006 06:12 pm Title: Wind
Like the feeling she gets when Jim touches her arm, it arrived with no warning.
And I am dead. Amazing. Loving this so far!
Author's Response: Don't die! Thank you!
10 [Report This]Date: December 13, 2006 04:16 pm Title: Sunshine
As with your other two stories, I really, really enjoyed reading this. Beginnings, middle despair, and a happy ending are all I really need, and you provided them nicely.
Author's Response: Thank you, Luna!
10 [Report This]Date: December 13, 2006 01:52 pm Title: Sunshine
It's really nice to think that despite all this angst, the two of them could end up like these last two chapters - what a satisfying read!
Author's Response: Thank you for reading!
10 [Report This]Date: December 13, 2006 12:52 pm Title: Sunshine
I adored Color Wheel and Language Barrier and I love your style of writing in all three of these stories.
And I love your references to the pranks in Conflict Resolution which is one of my favorite episodes.
I think I liked "Thunderstorm" and "Sunshine" the best. "Thunderstorm" because of the heat, and we never really see Jim and Pam in the summertime and I loved the crayons. "Sunshine", obviously because of It turns out she can. And because of the proposal. Loved, loved, loved this.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! Summertime happened because I was trying to shoehorn my stuff into the canon timeline, and I thought "Hey! There's five months of unknown! Nice!"
10 [Report This]Date: December 13, 2006 12:46 pm Title: Sunshine
Love!!! These were delightful, each and every one.
Author's Response: Thank you!
10 [Report This]Date: December 13, 2006 12:43 pm Title: Snow
"Look at it this way. Now you can stop worrying that people will find out about the time we had sex in my car on our lunch break."
So I'm readin', readin' enjoying these, and thinking "Oh, I can read these at work," and then BAM! You hit me with that?!? Oh, Paper Jam, you vixen.
Author's Response: Yay! I'm a vixen! Thanks for reading!
10 [Report This]Date: December 13, 2006 12:17 pm Title: Sunshine
it's pretty amazing to make her come ten feet from where she'd said I can't. It turns out she can.
What an AMAZING line. Wonderful. Genius. So evocative, teasing the imagination without revealing too much.
It's indicative of how far you have brought Pam from her normally conflicted, passive self that when she asks Jim to marry her, my immediate reaction was "Of course!" and my second was "Why the hell didn't I think of that?" It only works because you not only know Pam so well, you show us the more "assertive" side of her, the prankster side, that we don't get to see much of. That assertive side makes it believable that she would be the one to ask Jim.
And of course, his answer is completely Jim. Short of embedding an engagement ring in Jello, nothing else could say "Jim" so well.
What a wonderful story. Thanks for sharing it. After all the angst of this season, I think I like your universe better.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for taking the time to review each chapter so thoughtfully! It means a lot and it's something I really need to get better at. You rock, NEJ!
Date: December 13, 2006 12:12 pm Title: Snow
Uh. Did I miss something? We went from Jim pining to Jim and Pam being a couple? I guess I dropped a stitch somewhere. Quite a surprise.
this is love, not business
Heh heh heh. Wanna bet the wedding napkins are printed with a 10 percent off coupon for VR? Gotta love that Bob.
She's distracted by his long finger twirling around in the candy dish
Who doesn't love that?
he's just really, really happy he doesn't have to deny how he feels about her any more, doesn't care who notices that she loves him back
I want to see this Jim so bad I can taste it. Sooo tired of lovelorn Jim and clueless Pam. Thanks for giving us these two being happy together.
Author's Response:
You didn't miss anything, except for the part where I forget no one else but me has all the stories available in order of date (because I am a nerd). This chapter takes place after they hook up in Language Barrier and before Christmas in Color Wheel.
10 [Report This]Date: December 13, 2006 12:09 pm Title: Lightning
He's going to have to say something, soon, or learn to live with nothing, for good.
I can't add anything to what everyone else has already said, except to reiterate that this line is just sheer genius. Genius. I'm jealous.
Author's Response: I actually re-wrote that line about twenty times, because I'd already used "for good" in Both Sides Now. It's okay to steal from yourself, right?
5 [Report This]Date: December 13, 2006 12:07 pm Title: Hurricane
How typical and sweet of Pam to want to trash the video that embarrassed Michael. She protects him better than his own mother.
The picture of Jim making a paper airplane with Sasha, and Sasha gifting him with toys stolen from Michael's desk, so SO sweet without being treacly. Genius. And completely in character for all the characters, even Sasha.
Somehow that paper airplane left next to her phone is so, so sad. Little touches like this are why I love to read your stuff.
Author's Response: Thank you!
5 [Report This]Date: December 13, 2006 12:04 pm Title: Wind
Love the beginning, where Pam stops just short of realizing what "best friend, times a thousand" would imply.
So much pain in so few words. Jim's mouth is pink from drinking too much? How would she know? But she does. And her attempts to get him to smile, his moroseness...all of it written so well. This chapter just hurts to read, in a curl-up-on-the-couch-with-chocolate way.
Author's Response:
Pam stops short of realizing a lot of things, doesn't she?
6 [Report This]Date: December 13, 2006 12:02 pm Title: Thunderstorm
The air conditioning's broken.
My immediate reaction to this was, "Somebody call Bob Vance, Vance Refrigeration!" Seriously, though, just as a matter of professional pride, I don't see Bob Vance letting the AC go out in the building his refrigeration business is housed in. :) But otherwise, the idea of sweaty Jim and sweaty Pam is all kinds of erotic, so I like it.
Go away, Beesley. I'm dead
This whole exchange is perfect. I can hear their voices in my head. Dead-on Jim and Pam.
The last paragraph, with Jim placing the drawing next to his heart, just made me melt. So, so sweet.
Author's Response: Melt! Hee hee.
Date: December 13, 2006 11:59 am Title: Fog
Roy steers Pam towards the door with a controlling push
Ooo. Controlling push. Good description of what he did. You are so observant!
realizes for the first time that he's in over his head.
I had not thought of that moment (one of my favorites) as Jim suddenly realizing how deep he's gotten, but you're right. That explains his despairing look better than anything else. Well done. Good insight.
I have the mind of a Jedi. Completely focused
I love it that you captured Dwight's voice so well.
Author's Response: Observant/Obsessed. It's a very fine line, you know. Thank you for being polite and choosing the first.
10 [Report This]Date: December 13, 2006 11:30 am Title: Sunshine
This was so amazing. You've captured that Jim/Pam balance of playfulness and tension so well in each of these.
And the subtle way you work in the weather is fantastic. Like in the chapter called Hurricane, it just felt that way. Pam and Jim's interaction felt like they were sort of like blown over houses or trees or something, trying to pull themselves back up, back together. And I think you only use the word "hurricane" once in the entire chapter, but they way you wrote it really created that sense of being in the aftermath of a storm, that tense stillness, you know?
And this: "The parking lot doesn't count, because it's pretty amazing to make her come ten feet from where she'd said I can't. It turns out she can." Oh, man. Brilliant.
And I'm such a sucker for cute Pam/Jim proposals like this. They make me feel all warm inside.
Author's Response:
I love this review because I can tell that you were actually paying attention to the subtext, which is more of a compliment to me than "amazing". I'm glad you liked the line about the parking lot. It popped into my head while washing dishes and I just had to include it.
Thanks for taking the time.
10 [Report This]Date: December 13, 2006 11:02 am Title: Sunshine
I must reiterate how lovely this story is. And this is one of my favourite exchanges:
"Are we in junior high, Beesley? I already have your phone number."
"Shut up and don't look." Hee.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the beta and the kind words!