9 [Report This]Date: January 11, 2007 08:08 am Title: Chapter 1
Oh gosh, I'm such a sucker for stories with no speaking. It seems to make it all the more intimate because they're able to communicate without using any words... sigh. This was lovely. Having no dialogue really allowed you to describe things more fully and it's left me feeling even more in tune with the story. I love all your imagery and your repitition of the line, "And it's all she could do..." not to just jump Jim's bones, etc. :P
My favorite line was probably this: "The air is thick between them, and if she hadn't looked outside, she would have thought there was a thunderstorm brewing above them and in the space between their arms and their joined palms." What a charged image to bring forward -- I love it. This is so nicely written. Thank you so much for your review on my story and for sharing this lovely story with us.
Author's Response: Wow, thanks so much for your detailed feedback! I really appreciate it, and I'm glad you liked the story!
Date: December 18, 2006 08:05 pm Title: Chapter 1
So beautifully romantic. Sigh....
Author's Response: Thank you!
Date: December 15, 2006 06:25 pm Title: Chapter 1
I will go with everyone and say that the part about linking hands and the mittens was wonderful. There was something so intimate about it. I love the choice of snow because it is closely linked for me to the feeling of silence and peacefulness you were trying to convey. Well done!
Author's Response: Thanks so much!!
Date: December 15, 2006 11:40 am Title: Chapter 1
The hands and the mittens...and...just...sigh.
Simply beautiful.
Suddenly I'm wishing for snow.
Author's Response: Thank you soi much! I'm so glad everyone loved the mitten thing.
10 [Report This]Date: December 14, 2006 01:54 pm Title: Chapter 1
oooo how LOVELY. Jim and Pam on the roof in the snow. I need a snowglobe with this scene in it! I love Jim and Pam on the roof any time, and I love Jim and Pam not speaking. Wow. Just. So. Right. Thank you!
10 [Report This]Date: December 14, 2006 01:28 pm Title: Chapter 1
Loved it. It's such a beautiful portrait of the playfulness that Pam has only when she's around Jim. It perfectly proves the point that she can truly be herself around him. Snow+Jim+Pam=Happy!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! That's what I always try to convey in my stories- how Jim seems to always bring out the best side of Pam henever they're together.
9 [Report This]Date: December 14, 2006 06:53 am Title: Chapter 1
What a beautifully sweet interlude between them. (I'll just assume Karen's already packed up and left!) Thanks for this.
Author's Response: Thank you!
9 [Report This]Date: December 14, 2006 06:16 am Title: Chapter 1
Oh, this is beautiful. The image of him trying to put on his coat while still holding her hand is just..perfect. And, of course, the mittens. And the dreamlike quality flows so well - excellent.
Author's Response: Thanks so much!
8 [Report This]Date: December 14, 2006 04:00 am Title: Chapter 1
Oh, so pretty! There's lots of beautiful, vivid imagery here, and I love all the little details: the mittens, the electricity between them, him struggling to put on his coat one handed but not caring enough to let go, their cloud of breath at the end. Loved this!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I really apppreciate the specific feedback!
10 [Report This]Date: December 14, 2006 03:15 am Title: Chapter 1
So many lovely, eloquent details in this - Pam's giddiness at being with him, Jim's not wanting to let go of her hand, even to put on her coat; his natural protectiveness of her as she climbs the ladder...and, of course, the mitten/finger intertwining metaphor - so his being hopeful, persistent/patient beyond obstacles to be with her. And this last bit is absolutely gorgeous: their breaths mingle and form one cloud above their heads. Just a beautiful thing.
Author's Response: Aww, thanks so much for the detailed feedback! I'm glad that you and so many others liked the thing with him trying to weave his fingers with her through her mittens. It was just one of those things that just came out without me even thinking about it as I was typing, and I really am proud of it. :o)
9 [Report This]Date: December 13, 2006 09:09 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oh, wow, this was beautifully done. I'm so glad you decided to try doing this style again. Just gorgeous...and Pam's feeling when she saw it snowing was such an excellent description. This made me warm all over.
Author's Response: Thanks so much! It's so weird that I haven't really been able to write "Office" fic in this style at all, and I really wanted to do it, and I'm so glad I gave it a try.
I'm glad you liked it! :o)
9 [Report This]Date: December 13, 2006 09:08 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow. I love how much you've captured here without either of them saying a word. The static electricity you describe when she realizes that it's snowing makes me wish I liked snow.
The image I loved most, though, was the one of him trying to weave his fingers with hers, right through the mittens. Made my heart skip a beat, it did.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the detailed feedback! I hadn't started out intending for them to not really speak through the whole thing, and I didn't realize it until almost the end that that was what I'd done! I'm glad it was effective. And I'm glad that you and others liked the mittens/hand-holding thing, too!
10 [Report This]Date: December 13, 2006 08:11 pm Title: Chapter 1
Very nice! And I could just as easily picture this as a future event, which makes it extra delicious. :-)
Author's Response: Thanks so much! It is true that it could be a future event, too, and I thought of setting it during next winter or something, but for some reasons, I liked feeling the tension of having the thought in the back of my mind that Pam is still with Roy while all of this incredible electricity, and connection, and secret meetings in snow are going on with Jim.
10 [Report This]Date: December 13, 2006 07:43 pm Title: Chapter 1
It's gorgeous. And so ... yea. I know you'll probably hear this a bajillion times, but the detail about the mittens? Was perfect. It was just perfect and so intimate and lovely. *sigh*
Author's Response: Aww, thanks so much! And I'm glad you and others liked the mitten thing!
Date: December 13, 2006 07:42 pm Title: Chapter 1
This was like a wonderful dream. Beautifully written.
Author's Response: Thanks so much! The dreamlike quality was something I was going for, so I'm glad it came across!