1 [Report This]Date: October 26, 2020 12:31 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oooof. This feels so true to the much-maligned S3 Jim - his exhaustion and his sense that no matter what he does, he can't quite escape the trap of being into Pam.
I like the choice of having his interior monologue being addressed to Pam (because she's just that central to his thoughts). And there are some GREAT lines here - "making you smile is the only miracle I've ever been good at." "I think I ran right over Karen." Brutal.
Really good work on this one!
Author's Response:
Thank you! I liked the way this one turned out. Jim was wearing himself out, trying to fight the essence of who he is (Pam's soulmate) and pretending to be the Right Guy for Karen. But he really did end up exactly where he started, in every way.
I never really thought about it, but it is funny that his inner monologue is actually a dialogue with invisible Pam. Ha, my brain works in weird ways.
10 [Report This]Date: July 16, 2008 07:09 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow. So, I kind of love this. I mean, it just, ga, I know when TheReturn aired, I was all, wow, JAM love, it can't be long. But alas. Didn't happen. But still, this, awesome. Um, yeah. That whole suck with words thing still exist (for me, obviously) so awesome is the best I've got!
Author's Response: Yeah, I think we were all expecting it to happen sooner after that ep. I still think I caught Jim's emotions pretty well here, though. This one wasn't half bad!
Date: January 20, 2007 06:28 am Title: Chapter 1
As always - you're able to convey so much so succinctly. Poor Jim. My heart goes out to him. Now we just have to get Ms Beesly to be as truthful. :)
Author's Response: :) Twice as nice!
Date: January 20, 2007 06:27 am Title: Chapter 1
As always - you're able to convey so much so succinctly. Poor Jim. My heart goes out to him. Now we just have to get Ms Beesly to be as truthful. :)
Author's Response: Thank you. Yes, we really do!
Date: January 20, 2007 02:10 am Title: Chapter 1
Oh my goodness. That was fantastic! The last line gave me goosebumps! Thank you for this!
Author's Response: Oh, thank you!
Date: January 19, 2007 09:13 pm Title: Chapter 1
That ending made. me. die. Ack Jim! I really loved it though. It felt introspective but still like Jim. Sometimes writers make him wax poetic a little to much.
Author's Response: Thank you! Sorry about the dying- hope you get over that before the next new episode!
Date: January 19, 2007 03:19 pm Title: Chapter 1
Nice analogy, Lis!
I may have giggled at the Karen line, just a little.
...all I could do was try to catch my breath.
Poignant. :)
Author's Response: Thank you! Hee, no sympathy for poor Karen, eh?
Date: January 19, 2007 07:54 am Title: Chapter 1
Oh, the running -- such an apt metaphor for Pam & Jim....
Love this: I think I ran right over Karen. Ouch.
And this: the echo of poker chips and promises. Yay!
Author's Response: Thank you. Yeah, poor Karen. It's a good day for the good ship Jam, but Karen has been damaged in the wake.
Date: January 19, 2007 07:32 am Title: Chapter 1
Poetry! Sigh.
Author's Response: Thank you! Sigh is right.
Date: January 19, 2007 06:59 am Title: Chapter 1
Loved how you wrote this, especially ending with the fact that he has been running in place all along. He really has hasn't he. Lovely.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I think we were both living in his brain today! :)
Date: January 19, 2007 06:24 am Title: Chapter 1
Ta da! You've done it again. Captured Jim's angst and summed up his history with Pam in a succinct and beautiful way. Great piece, lis!
Author's Response: Thank you! I honestly don't know where these snippets come from. If they were any longer, I think they would break my brain. :)
10 [Report This]Date: January 19, 2007 05:53 am Title: Chapter 1
I needed some good Jim insight this morning after all that - you could tell the wheels had been churning for some time.
Awesome, ms. nqllisi - just wonderful!
Author's Response: Thank you, ma'am. I felt sorry for both Jim and Karen. But not Pam- sparkly, smiley, beautiful Pam. We haven't seen that smile since Casino Night.
Date: January 19, 2007 05:37 am Title: Chapter 1
lovely lovely metaphor
nice job
Author's Response: Thank you very much.
Date: January 19, 2007 05:20 am Title: Chapter 1
Wow, this is like one laser sharp, incisive line after another. Perfect metaphor. He really has run around in a big circle hasn't he? And this:....making you smile is the only miracle I've ever been good at. So poignant. I like the way you ended with a glimmer (an echo) of hope. Really beautiful.
Author's Response: Oh, thank you. He just looked so tired in his scene with Karen, and he's right back where he started, isn't he?
Date: January 19, 2007 04:44 am Title: Chapter 1
that was beautiful
Author's Response: Thank you! I was inspired.
Date: January 19, 2007 04:41 am Title: Chapter 1
This is so, so beautiful. I would quote the whole thing back as my favourite part if I could, but I will pick I think I ran right over Karen because it's so simple (your special talent) and so true (and so unfair to Karen).
Um, also, you have the word "you" twice in a row. I'm sure it's a typo, but I wanted to let you know in case it was something that needed fixing. Love.
Author's Response:
Ack! Thanks for pointing it out. I was working from home without my fancy spell check! Will fix right away.
Thank you for the lovely comment, too!