Date: February 28, 2007 07:27 am Title: Mosquitoes
If I bit my nails they would be nubs by the end, way to build the suspense! you're killing me, more please. time to break karen's heart!
Author's Response: Yay! I wrote suspense! I've never done that before! Just wait until the next chapter...
Date: February 28, 2007 06:45 am Title: Mosquitoes
Seriously, shan, you just amaze me! The mosquito and I LOVE the monogrammed relationship better than monogamous.... brilliant! I'm glad you changed it ;)
I can't wait to read the next part!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for all your awesomeness! The monogrammed thing is all you :) (As is the part where Jim tells Michael to ask Dwight for help... shameless thievery on my part...) You should get chapter two in the next couple of days!
Date: February 28, 2007 05:50 am Title: Mosquitoes
ooh this is interesting :) I love the mosquito thing throughout the entire story. I'm really looking forward to the rest of this
Author's Response: Thanks Jess! Aren't mosquitoes just awful? It's all I could think of when I was trying to figure out what to compare those nagging anxious doubts to.
Date: February 28, 2007 05:13 am Title: Mosquitoes
This is really good. Great dialogue - especially Michael, which isn't easy. And I like how you got Karen without belaboring it. Another perfect detail: how Karen knows Jim's just doesn't ring true...one word (like, ahem, Yes) on this show carries so much weight. Really looking forward to more!
Author's Response: Thanks Colette! I had tons of fun writing the dialogue, although you're right- Michael isn't easy. I have betas to thank for helping me with it. And I just feel like Karen has to realize that Jim can't quite pull off "just." She's a smart lady, even though I think she's making stupid choices.
Date: February 28, 2007 04:38 am Title: Mosquitoes
LOVING this!! Seriously, the interactions between Jim and Karen were so great, and I loved the mosquito metaphor. Also "monogrammed relationship"?? Hahahah.
I cant wait for the next chapter--finally someone tackling the Jim/Roy confrontation!!
Author's Response:
Yay! Thanks! I thought for a while about what metaphor I wanted to use (because I can't seem to write a fic without one) so I'm glad the mosquito stuff worked. And the idea to have Michael trip over monogamous was all WildBerryJam's. I was sitting in my room like a weirdo sounding it out and thinking, "What could Michael confuse monogamous with?..."
And I'm really nervous about writing the Jim/Roy confrontation, but no worries. It will happen. It will be a little scary. I just wrote my first draft of it (when I should have been taking notes in my Public Policy class).
Date: February 28, 2007 04:30 am Title: Mosquitoes
you've written karen perfectly! she's likeable, but she's perfectly capable of doing something catty like that. i really liked this, please update soon!
Author's Response: Exactly. Karen really is likeable (which bugs me, by the way. Couldn't she make it easier for everyone and just be a terrible person?) but she's definitely insecure enough to do some catty stuff. Thanks for reviewing!
Date: February 28, 2007 04:22 am Title: Mosquitoes
Eeeee! More, more, more! Please, I have to know what happens next!
I love lots about this story, but particularly your treatment of Karen as somebody who's being a little irrational because she's not used to being the insecure one in a relationship. I really liked the detail about the gasoline game, and your Michael voice was cringe-inducingly accurate.
Hurry! I need more!
Author's Response: Thanks! I like the way you put the Karen situation. And the gasoline game is something that my dad and brother do because they're special like that. Oh, and WildBerryJam helped me with the Michael stuff because she's brilliant at writing him.
Date: February 28, 2007 12:36 am Title: Mosquitoes
Oh my gosh. This is very exciting. I would actually like to be there, because I would totally have Jim's back. Well, maybe I'd run into the apartment and shove furniture against the door, (making sure Jim came in also) and then call the police.
I am anxiously awaiting more. I like your details, like the disgust Michael shows when Jim suggests going to Dwight.
Thanks for this.
Author's Response: Ha! Definitely make sure that Jim is inside first. Otherwise--badness. I'm glad it's exciting! I'm writing chapter 2 right now and I'm really trying to maintain the suspense.
Date: February 27, 2007 11:56 pm Title: Mosquitoes
Yay! I don't even know how to express how much I love this story! I love the mosquito metaphor you carry throughout. I thought that did a great job of showing us Karen's mindset, or her view on the situation.
How's part 2 coming? I'm dying over here!
Author's Response:
Hahaha! Don't lie--you just wanted me to have him dump her. You were very subtle about your dislike for Karen, but I was somehow able to pick up on it.
Part 2 is coming. Slowly but surely. I have the rough framework. Hee!