Date: October 11, 2008 07:09 pm Title: Bring on the Deep Fried Alligator
Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhh I hope you continue this, because it was so good.
10 [Report This]Date: March 12, 2008 12:32 am Title: Bring on the Deep Fried Alligator
Please continue this!! It's so different, coming from the moms' point of view. I am really enjoying it and was quite discombobulated that I couldn't find out how it ended!!! ;)
10 [Report This]Date: January 29, 2008 03:19 pm Title: Bring on the Deep Fried Alligator
Too bad this is unfinished .. so unique. I really liked it.
Date: May 07, 2007 08:45 pm Title: Bring on the Deep Fried Alligator
I really liked this scene; it felt very plausible and I would hope that Jim is actually talking to his mom about all of this craziness. Otherwise, I think he would explode.
Date: April 22, 2007 05:48 pm Title: Bring on the Deep Fried Alligator
I loved them talking in person- it works really well b/c Jim can be very physically expressive, and you really have to see him to know what he's thinking.
“I think I’ve been spoiled,” Jim said suddenly.
“I don’t know what impression you’re under,” Mrs. Halpert answered, “but you’re not even our favorite child, so I doubt it.”
Hehe! Awesome. I can't wait for Larissa and Pam to meet.
Date: April 19, 2007 08:05 am Title: Bring on the Deep Fried Alligator
Silly Gravity Defier. "They're really something" is good. If it weren't good, I wouldn't even say it, because I learned from my muddah "if you can't say anything nice, don't say anything at all" thing. Tough words to live by, but I try.
And I'd never review something in a snarky "well, that was something" way! I just wouldn't review in that case!
Date: April 18, 2007 05:05 pm Title: Bring on the Deep Fried Alligator
I think it worked very well to have them talking in person! I think this was actually my favorite chapter, though I can't tell if it was because of the face to face contact or the content of the conversation. In any case, it's beautiful and sad, and those last two lines hit hard!
Date: April 18, 2007 02:43 pm Title: Bring on the Deep Fried Alligator
ooh I hope Larissa tells Jim how silly he's being and that boy wises up! I did like having them talk in person, it works very well. Continue soon please!! :)
Date: April 18, 2007 01:53 pm Title: Bring on the Deep Fried Alligator
It definitely worked to have them talking in person. I think Jim is probably somewhat close to his folks. I know in an earlier chapter you had him not seeing them very often, but particularly if he's back in the same town, I expect he'd swing by often enough.
The last 2 sentences are really something. Let's hope it doesn't really go this way (Jim faking his way through life and a relationship)!
Author's Response: They're really something? I hope that's good. Either way, thanks for the review.
Date: April 18, 2007 12:51 pm Title: Bring on the Deep Fried Alligator
i loved it. it worked perfectly. in fact, i think sometimes her seeing the looks on his face worked even better.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading. I'm thinking about doing something similar with Pam in an upcoming chapter, where the two Beesley woman are finally face to face.