Date: March 31, 2007 12:25 pm Title: The Desk
Good Luck on your exams... so far the story is excellent...
Date: March 31, 2007 11:31 am Title: The Desk
I love this. It's great how everything is coming out in the open. Cannot wait for more!
Date: March 28, 2007 05:03 pm Title: The Desk
You really have me hooked on this! It's nice to see that they are all acting a little nicer to one another..I really like this.
9 [Report This]Date: March 24, 2007 08:56 pm Title: The Desk
This is intriguing. I would really like to read more.
Date: March 24, 2007 12:52 pm Title: The Desk
I'm think it's either Dwight or Creed - you officially have me hooked. I would think that Pam would be more broken up about Dwight...but then I don't think Jim would refer to Creed as his friend. Hmmm...I'm intrigued! More please!
9 [Report This]Date: March 23, 2007 07:40 pm Title: The Desk
*tear* You killed someone off! I love Pam & Jim realizing they would want the other to know how they felt...hum...could this finally urge one of them to say something?
Date: March 23, 2007 06:08 pm Title: The Desk
nonononononononononoNONONONONO!!!!!!
Tell me you did not just kill off Dwight.
It's Ryan, right? Please let it be Ryan. Or Stanley.
Seriously, I'm on the verge of hyperventilating.
thanks.
cheers.
--Lex
Date: March 23, 2007 05:35 pm Title: The Desk
Dwight??? Oh stab me in the heart... hehe, in other words, continue please!
10 [Report This]Date: March 23, 2007 01:21 pm Title: The Desk
Oh. My. Goodness! More please!!!
Date: March 23, 2007 11:28 am Title: The Desk
Oh interesting concept, I'm totally interested. Keep on posting! I totally want to know who it is and what they have to say (via journal or whatnot).
Date: March 23, 2007 11:13 am Title: The Desk
This is an interesting start. You've set it up so that it would appear that the deathee (is that a word?) is Dwight, but it also seems you've made it deliberately a mystery because you want to keep us guessing (or thinking it's Dwight. Or Creed. Actually, either one would be relevant.) I like the premise, but I don't know if the "surprise, who died?" is necessary.
Two comments: 1) you might want to check your word use; read over the story again. I caught a couple words that were used improperly, i.e., "slowly" instead of "slow." (That wasn't it, but that's what I mean. And 2), I really wonder whether Jim would hope that whomever it was kept a journal. I doubt that - it seems too obvious and sets up the fact that they are going to find a journal. I think he'll just be curious what he's going to find, not really knowing what to expect.
I don't know if you've used or are interested in using a beta, but the couple little things like this could and/or would be easily caught by using one.
Don't let my wordy review overwhelm you -- I am definitely interested to see where this goes ...
Date: March 23, 2007 10:55 am Title: The Desk
i want more. it is interesting... and a death its somber, but happpyjam.
Date: March 23, 2007 10:27 am Title: The Desk
oh wow. This is so sad, but I LOVE the plot!! I can't wait for coming chapters! good job i'm excited
Date: March 23, 2007 06:01 am Title: The Desk
Hmm. You've got me intrigued! Who could it be. Dwight? Stanley? Creed? (I'm not sure about the exact seating layout of the office. so I don't know who it could be.)
I'm loving the Jim/Pam interaction too. Maybe soon they'll be able to confess their feelings aloud.
More, please!
6 [Report This]Date: March 23, 2007 05:59 am Title: The Desk
So is it Dwight or Creed?? You have me stumped! Everytime I think I know, I change my mind!! Can't wait to see where this goes!
Date: March 23, 2007 05:31 am Title: The Desk
Okay, I'm hooked. I think this has the potential to really be a great one.