Date: May 12, 2007 08:57 pm Title: LUNCH THEFT - ACT ONE
finally! this fic was much more realistic than any. it was like another episode.
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked it!
10 [Report This]Date: May 01, 2007 11:14 am Title: LUNCH THEFT - ACT ONE
oh, and can't wait till the rest!
8 [Report This]Date: April 30, 2007 07:31 pm Title: LUNCH THEFT - ACT ONE
This totally sounded like it could be on the show! You really have everyone's voices down so perfectly. I cracked up in several places - but this was my favorite -
"PAM
So, um… tell me… do they still have
roaming teenaged gangs that sing
and dance and fight with switchblades?"
What a great line! Your Jim and Pam banter is so real. It makes me homesick for S2!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm glad you like it! I was just about to put up Act II. I hope you like it as much! Thanks again!
Date: April 25, 2007 02:14 am Title: LUNCH THEFT - ACT ONE
BWAH HA HA HA HA HA HA! Okay, I'm officially a Jet all the way. Love this story!
This is fab:
Jim is leaning over the reception area watching
Pam fawn over her bear.
PAM
Oh, look at that little face. His hair is
so fuzzy and he is so cute!
Jim smiles.
PAM (looking down)
And the bear isn’t so bad, either…
And this? LOL!
Jim is looking at his monitor and then,
apparently, gets a psychic signal from Pam.
He looks over and Pam is looking directly
at him with a cute smile. Slowly the teddy bear’s
head rises from behind the reception counter. Jim
laughs quietly. Then Pam makes the little bear wave.
Jim smiles and the two share an enormously sweet
moment looking at each other. Just then Michael
comes out of his office and the moment is gone.
And I love toward the beginning where Jim gets the biggest smile on Earth. Hee! So much fun!
Author's Response: lol.... I'm glad you liked it! I hope the next two acts don't let you down! Thanks!
10 [Report This]Date: April 25, 2007 12:06 am Title: LUNCH THEFT - ACT ONE
This is great -- very very natural sounding dialog. Keep it up.
10 [Report This]Date: April 24, 2007 02:55 pm Title: LUNCH THEFT - ACT ONE
Weee! More please!
9 [Report This]Date: April 24, 2007 02:23 pm Title: LUNCH THEFT - ACT ONE
This was really good, and absolutely hilarious teaser! I can definitely see that happening in the show. I have a soft spot for fics written in this form, I really enjoyed your other story as well! :) But I really like this and can't wait to see act two. You really have a talent with writing functioning and believable dialogue!
Author's Response: Wow, thank you! I really try to get these character's voices down. I'm glad you like it!
Date: April 24, 2007 02:03 pm Title: LUNCH THEFT - ACT ONE
As soooon as i got your email, i came and read this! Thank you SO MUCH for letting me know~!
"No, you wouldn’t have. It doesn’t
have your recommended daily allowances
of baby brains and rat ass, does it?"
And the speech with all the presidents steeling lunch!OMFG! I rolled! I love your writeing so much! MORE.
Author's Response: lol..you're the best! Thanks!! I'll get cracking on Act Two!
10 [Report This]Date: April 24, 2007 12:50 pm Title: LUNCH THEFT - ACT ONE
Yay! I heart script-stories and they're really hard to come by, so I'm glad someone else is writing them, too. :) Keep it up!
Date: April 24, 2007 11:50 am Title: LUNCH THEFT - ACT ONE
Happy, funny stuff with good characterization. I look forward to Act 2.
Author's Response: Thanks! I appreciate the good words!