10 [Report This]Date: May 21, 2007 09:49 pm Title: Chapter 1
Yeah, this story is awesome! I like how Jim is the ultimate gentleman on the first date!
9 [Report This]Date: May 21, 2007 06:19 pm Title: Chapter 1
Do I love this story? Absolutely I do.
BTW, yeah you for the speedy updates. We better get the next date soon.
Date: May 21, 2007 05:08 pm Title: Chapter 1
Great story! I haven't been back to MTT for a while, but this story will keep me coming back. You've really got a good idea here. Keep up the good work.
8 [Report This]Date: May 21, 2007 03:47 pm Title: Chapter 1
Great story. You did an awesome job with the conversation between Jim and Karen - it sounded so much like them. Poor Karen - planning a future and having sex the night before, and then getting dumped the next day. And I have to comment on the lines that everyone else seems to like too: "Karen, I can't just leave you here."
She turned and said, "You already have."
Awesome dialogue!
Date: May 21, 2007 11:54 am Title: Chapter 1
Well we can only hope that is how it went. I guess we have to wait 4 months to really find out.
Date: May 21, 2007 10:55 am Title: Chapter 1
I really like your explanation for Jim returning alone to Scranton:
She laughed bitterly and replied, "If you think that I am going to sit in a car with you for two and a half hours, you are... Just go, Jim. I'll find my own way back to Scranton."
"Karen, I can't just leave you here."
She turned and said, "You already have."
I think it is totally plausible she wanted nothing to do with him and she knew the whole drive would turn into a giant fight that would not resolve anything. Good job!
Date: May 21, 2007 09:40 am Title: Chapter 1
Ooh -- I really liked this 'you already have'. Excellent!
Date: May 21, 2007 09:33 am Title: Chapter 1
I'm loving these fics that show us what might have happened to the two of them- because I refuse to believe the just abandoned her there! Hee.
Great job- you capture her voice particularly well, and I think that's hard because we barely got to know her.
Date: May 21, 2007 09:29 am Title: Chapter 1
Good job. I definitely can see things going like this. I'm not sure why,but this line particularly struck me: Jim stood up. "I'm sorry. This is going to sound really weird, but... I have to take myself out of the running for this job. I don't belong here. At least... not... yet."