Date: June 15, 2009 07:52 pm Title: Act Three
this chapter made me laugh...and a mention of pushing daisies =] huzzah to that
10 [Report This]Date: November 10, 2007 09:45 pm Title: Act Three
this is excellent - the way you have written it and have the characters so spot on, it really does seem like an episode. i can picture every action, beat, smile, and line.
and i was cracking up at the whole andy/jim/the closer part. excellent job, i love this so far.
Author's Response: I'm glad that you can envision the pacing of the lines and the story in general. I can hear and see it, but I'm really happy that is coming through to the reader as well. I'm glad that you liked the Andy/Jim bit, I liked the idea of Andy bragging about something, and then forgetting that Jim knew that he was lying. Thanks for the review waltisafox.
Date: November 09, 2007 09:42 am Title: Act Three
The only thing I'm not looking forward to is the end of this story. You're doing a great job with the character, dialog and script format. Me thinks you should get a Dundie for this one or, at the very least, some Schrute Bucks.
Author's Response: I could really use an extra five minutes of lunch, so I would definitely appreciate the Schrute bucks. I'm glad that you liked the script format (or at least could read it), I've never written in that style before. Thanks for the review House Calls.
10 [Report This]Date: November 08, 2007 09:07 pm Title: Act Three
Just read this whole thing, thoroughly enjoyed it. I like it-I mean what's not to like? Everything is clicking-you have all the voices down, even the rhythim and the pacing. And there are pletny of laughs. Great stuff.
Author's Response: I appreciate your kind words. I've never written a script-based story before so I just try to think of my ideas like an episode, and go with it. I'm glad that you've liked it so far, thanks for reading and reviewing brokenloon.