Date: November 16, 2007 03:42 pm Title: Chapter 1
OMG This story is one of the best I've ever read. I love the emotions that are coming into play with all characters. It's sad but so real. I LOVE IT.
9 [Report This]Date: November 16, 2007 08:03 am Title: Chapter 1
This is really fascinating.
10 [Report This]Date: November 16, 2007 06:08 am Title: Chapter 1
Uh-oh. I have a bad feeling about Pam's dad. :(
7 [Report This]Date: November 15, 2007 04:22 pm Title: Chapter 1
I love your attention to detail here. Not sure what's going on but I'm intrigued!
Author's Response: Thanks Kaystar! That's been a huge part of the fun here...the detail. I'm glad you are enjoying reading it as much as I'm enjoying writing it!
Date: November 14, 2007 08:08 pm Title: Chapter 1
A little confused, but a lot intrigued.
And a little sad to read no fluff.
But I'll keep reading, because you sucked me in!
Author's Response: Aw, Starshine...sorry for no fluff, but I can't say I'm sorry that I sucked you in! Yay! I hope you enjoy!
10 [Report This]Date: November 14, 2007 07:42 pm Title: Chapter 1
Hmm, intriguing. Loving the first person. Having fun pretending to be Mr. Halpert? Not quite sure where you're headed with it but I'm anxious to find out.
Author's Response: Hey Brokenloon!!!! Long time no talk! YES, I am really enjoying pretending to be Mr. Halpert. It is a lot of fun! Thanks for being willing to go along for the ride! :-)
Date: November 14, 2007 03:43 pm Title: Chapter 1
I thought it was going to be fluffy! It will get fluffy, right?
Besides that, I loved the tension. Good work.
Author's Response: Hi Pamcakes....well, I'm sorry to say that my summary/description was meant to read sarcastically, but I think I may have missed the mark! Sorry about that...wasn't my intention to mislead. There will definitely be sort of funny moments, but really not fluffy AT ALL. So you may want to turn back now if you're waiting for the fluff because I wouldn't want you to be disappointed. Thanks for reviewing though! I'm glad you enjoyed the tension!
Date: November 14, 2007 03:22 pm Title: Chapter 1
Very well done. I'm so glad that there is another writer on this site being inspired by Ingrid's music. I think I've got a few more coming too. As for Breakable, I think it's hilarious how we both portrayed Pam's family, how we both have moments of awkward tension...but, I have to say, I love your version better. So simple and sweet. Very well done!
Author's Response: I know! Crazy, right? That we both set that song to family events...weird. Obviously we both have very good taste in music! Thanks so much for the feedback BeckySue!
10 [Report This]Date: November 14, 2007 10:47 am Title: Chapter 1
I can't tell you how excited I was to see this isn't finished. I think it would be great as a one-shot, but you're going to give us more! You captured that awkward feeling of being the "outsider" at the family table perfectly...listening to conversations about people you don't know or know very much about, not being clued in to histories and dynamics. And the writing? It's you, I know, but this seems different, and I can't put my finger on it, but I LOVE it. Yeah, Jim needs a beer and you need a bunch of gold stars.
Author's Response: Well I'll tell ya what's different...it's this crazy ass 1st person I'm trying out! lol. Which, as I was telling Colette -- we will see how it goes. Not something I usually do at all...eek. I'm so glad you picked up on that "outsider" feeling...definitely what I was going for with Jim. Thanks for beering me those stars! :-)
Date: November 14, 2007 07:46 am Title: Chapter 1
Okay...1st person - very interesting and a challenge to write; Jim focusing on all Pam's little idiosyncracies - Unfinished sentences, half eaten snacks...she was a walking cliffhanger this week, and I found myself a little bit afraid of the next episode...great thought, and intriguing. As usual, your writing style pulls me in and makes me want to know where this is going....not that I'm impatient or anything ;-)
Author's Response: Oh man, so this is really my first foray (sp?) into the 1st person...so we'll see how it goes! It could be a bumpy ride! <Michael>. But something about this story just kept begging me to be in the first person...so again - we'll see. I'm glad it's pulled you in though! The next chapter should be out soon.
Date: November 14, 2007 05:49 am Title: Chapter 1
Wait a second... this isn't a one shot. It will be extrapolated. I get it now. :) I'm excited for the rest of this!
Author's Response: haha...yes it will be extrapolated soon! :-) Thanks for the feedback.
Date: November 14, 2007 05:48 am Title: Chapter 1
Hmm, this was a little hard to follow. Was it a continuation of something?