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Reviewer: yippee Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: September 01, 2006 10:16 am Title: Light of Day

really liked this chapter too :) continues to feel so true to life.

Reviewer: gotkona Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: September 01, 2006 10:13 am Title: Light of Day

Jim got his confidence back it seems.

Reviewer: gotkona Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: September 01, 2006 10:11 am Title: Sara's Smile

Sounds like a fiesty lady.

Reviewer: gotkona Signed [Report This]
Date: September 01, 2006 10:09 am Title: Dinner with an Old Friend

Sounds interesting.

Reviewer: nqllisi Signed [Report This]
Date: September 01, 2006 09:05 am Title: Light of Day

Very realistic morning after.

Reviewer: Token Anonymous 8 [Report This]
Date: September 01, 2006 08:43 am Title: Sara's Smile

I ache for Jim but could absolutely feel the relief he's getting through Sara. Normally I'm not a fan of introducing new characters (too many Mary Sues), but this one has real character. I look forward to reading more!

Author's Response: Totally agree about characters from left field...which is why I hesitated to write this. But, I liked the idea of a little history to fill in some of Jim's blanks, and as you'll see soon, a chance for Pam to get some perspective on Jim's wonderfulness, so...glad it's working for you so far!

Reviewer: yippee Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: September 01, 2006 06:31 am Title: Sara's Smile

Great second chapter--the whole thing felt so comfortable and real and it's really fun to read about Jim interacting in a non-anguished way with someone who isn't Pam. Can't wait for chapter 3 :)

Author's Response: Thanks!!!

Reviewer: Par5 Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: September 01, 2006 06:07 am Title: Sara's Smile

Very realistic! It is so easy to fall into old patterns with exes even if you don't intend to. And Jim finally has someone to talk to so hopefully he won't be going to the shrink or worse (I'm thinking of the very depressing fanfic from fanfiction.net). Now bring on the Jam!!!

Author's Response: JAM is on the way, fear not.

Reviewer: TV_Buffy Anonymous 8 [Report This]
Date: September 01, 2006 04:15 am Title: Sara's Smile

Great second chapter. I ike Jim and Sara's attraction and mutual understanding of their respective situations. Very well done - this pairing could have gone horribly awry, but you made it enjoyable!

Author's Response:

Glad it's working for you...I really think our boy deserves a break! And maybe Pam will get the wake-up call she needs (either that or someone will tap her on the head with a very large mallet - Sara perhaps?)

Reviewer: proposals Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: September 01, 2006 12:51 am Title: Sara's Smile

Aw. I like seeing Jim relatively happy, even if it's with someone else. The fact that I know he's going to return to Pam helps, of course. But at this point in the story I'm mad at her, so go Jim and Sara!

This is wonderful, and so well written. I hope the update isn't too far away,.



Author's Response: As always, thanks for the great review. Writing parts 3 & 4 feverishly...

Reviewer: Em Anonymous 8 [Report This]
Date: August 31, 2006 10:19 pm Title: Sara's Smile

I really like this. It's very realistic and Sara is really likeable - even though Jim is obviously supposed to be with Pam, this is written so that the idea of Jim and Sara isn't unappealing. Looking forward to the next chapter.

Author's Response:

Glad you like it...and trust me - Pam will not be foresaken - I'm too much of a hopeless romantic to let that happen.

Reviewer: kaystar Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: August 31, 2006 10:17 pm Title: Sara's Smile

So that's why Sara was smiling.... plus now we know who the "friend" was that Jim had sex with after Katy and before Pam.  (Or am I mixing in another fan fic?) Either way, awesome story.

Author's Response:

What warm blooded woman would be able to wipe the grin off her face? (But, the other fic you're thinking of must have been someone elses...mine have all been hopelessly JAM-centric.)

Reviewer: halfbaked Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: August 31, 2006 07:07 pm Title: Dinner with an Old Friend

You’ve really captured Jim’s emotional pain. “That he’d rub raw the fragile scab covering the wound of what he’d never have with Pam.”

I’m hoping that Sara will continue to be a sympathetic character. Jim needs a friend to talk to.

Author's Response: Thanks...and yes, she's going to be very sympathetic...very.

Reviewer: Lissa_Maylee Signed 8 [Report This]
Date: August 31, 2006 07:02 pm Title: Dinner with an Old Friend

Interesting idea...can't wait for more!

Author's Response: Stay tuned....

Reviewer: kaystar Signed [Report This]
Date: August 31, 2006 06:57 pm Title: Dinner with an Old Friend

I really enjoyed this chapter - sounds like it will be a great story. I can't wait to read more.



Author's Response: A few more chapters coming. Hope you still like it.

Reviewer: TV_Buffy Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: August 31, 2006 06:06 pm Title: Dinner with an Old Friend

Great story idea and first chapter. I love Jim backstory and that he has someone to spill his guts to. Can't wait to read future updates.


Author's Response:

I guess we all invent our own backstories for the characters...glad this one is working for you.

Reviewer: nqllisi Signed 8 [Report This]
Date: August 31, 2006 05:24 pm Title: Dinner with an Old Friend

A lovely beginning. Jim really does need someone to spill this all to, doesn't he?

Author's Response: He sooo deserves it. Far be it from me not to give it to him.

Reviewer: yippee Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: August 31, 2006 05:14 pm Title: Dinner with an Old Friend

Loved this first chapter--and I'm really looking forward to the rest of it. I like Sara :)

Author's Response: Thanks! More to come soon....

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