Date: January 05, 2009 10:39 am Title: The Hull
Ooh, I love the description of The Captain in the first paragraph. And the entire confrontation between him and Jim was spectacular. I like that you have Pam working with Harold while Jim is working with his guardian. Nice paralleling.
Date: November 18, 2008 02:27 pm Title: The Hull
Your original characters are really interesting... as is the story between Jim/Pam ;)
I like how there are a few relationships all developing in the story, but they are all so different.
10 [Report This]Date: November 18, 2008 01:03 pm Title: The Hull
Yay! I'm so glad you've come back to this. There is something dream-like here, despite the very realistic details you breathe into every line. Beautiful, beautiful.
Date: November 18, 2008 10:59 am Title: The Hull
My goodness, what a mood and a feeling this creates, SG. I'm seeing the heat and the haze of summer and the dust on the infield so vividly. I can almost smell the gloves. I don't know why I almost have a pre-war (WWII that is) feeling here. I know it's not AU, but it's such a throwback in a way to a simpler time with Jim coaching baseball at the B&G club.
Love. Can't wait to see what happens over chili and what goes on with Pam and Harold.
10 [Report This]Date: November 18, 2008 10:32 am Title: The Hull
I really like this! I hope your writers block is gone!
10 [Report This]Date: November 18, 2008 06:21 am Title: The Hull
Let me set the scene. I come to work like any other Tuesday. I make my breakfast in the kitchen, enter my office, and log in to my computer. After very minimal effort at checking my work e-mail, I log on to my home account. "Update to one of your favorites," said the e-mail. "Hmmm...wonder which one?" I replied. I click on the link. "HAROLD MORAN! GET THE F*CK OUT," was my reaction. So, yeah, I was pretty happy.
Stablergirl, I am beyond thrilled that you've continued with this, because it's that good. Needless to say, I haven't forgotten this story at all. So glad you were moved to update. I hope your writer's block is gone, because I am so into this.
The interaction between The Captain and Jim and then the interaction between Pam and Harold are just perfect. I just can't wait to see what happens next. Thanks for starting my day on a happy (euphoric? ecstatic?) note.