10 [Report This]Date: November 30, 2008 12:21 am Title: Chapter 7: Whole Circles
OH PLEASE UPDATE!
this is wonderful
11 outta 10!!!
10 [Report This]Date: October 25, 2008 08:03 pm Title: Chapter 7: Whole Circles
*shoots brain rays at ISayOye* good luck on all those tests :) you have done such as good job at keeping this a mystery, without making it feel contrived or ridiculously circular! I can't wait for the epilogue, but put your grades first ;)
Date: October 25, 2008 12:55 pm Title: Chapter 1: Tubs for Two
I've got to admit, when the first chapter of this story was posted, I read it and I was turned off, because a) I thought Pam was dead/Jim had killed her and I did not want to read THAT story and b) because I usually avoid suspenseful stories like the plague because...well I've never seen suspense done well in fanfic. The other night, though, I was desperate for something new to read and this one was the only thing on the most recent list I hadn't checked out yet. I read like 6 chapters in one night. I can't stop! I need more! This is so...I love it! Which I never thought I'd be saying about a suspense piece, but it really is quite awesome. My money is on the neighbor. (But is his name Jacob or Scott? I got a little confused in this last chapter about that)
Author's Response: Wow. Good catch. His name is Jacob. Thanks you, I've gone back and fixed it. I have no idea why I thought his name was Scott when I was writing. I'm glad you gave the story a second chance.
Date: October 25, 2008 09:34 am Title: Chapter 7: Whole Circles
Great job I'm going to keep who I think did it to myself until the end.
Author's Response: I'd love to hear your theories.
10 [Report This]Date: October 25, 2008 09:18 am Title: Chapter 7: Whole Circles
Well, it was the beginning of the story, and immediately when something is happening to Pam and Jim isn't around my mind flashes ROYROYROY. I just didn't have any other suspects at that time, ha. I didn't really think it was Roy, and I still don't.
Now . . . holy god, do we have suspects. It wasn't Jim, definitely not Jim, wasn't Roy, and I'm not leaning towards Toby anymore. Unless it was Jim. Oh, my god. "You still haven't learned your lesson"? Wasn't that what he said to her? Oh dear god. Please don't let it be Jim. Anxiously awaiting the epilogue. (Wow, my reviews get ramblier every time, eh?)
Author's Response: I think you more than anyone will be interested in the next chapter. The epilogue will clear it all up but I really can't wait to read what you think of the next chapter. Be sure to check back tonight. :D
10 [Report This]Date: October 25, 2008 07:09 am Title: Chapter 7: Whole Circles
I love the fact that Pam is starting to feel a little bit closer to Jim again (physically, at least). It seems like she's taking very small steps to recovery and that's exactly how I would imagine her handling something like this. I also like that she still keeps in contact with Roy. I'm glad that you make him seem like an okay guy, because I really think that he is.
And good luck with the three tests! Especially algebra (ick).
Author's Response: Thank you. I think Roy is a good guy...he just wasn't the right one or very smart.
10 [Report This]Date: October 23, 2008 04:54 pm Title: Chapter 6: Outer Limits
This is truly one of the best stories I've read. I'm not usually one for angst, but you balance angst with just a little bit of fluff, and I really like that. The format is very interesting as well... I've never read anything like it.
And (I should have said this earlier, but I couldn't stop reading!), I really like the idea of having Pam's brother be a part of this. I'm a little surprised that Pam's mom would leave that type of a message, because they seem so close to each other, but I'm still curious to see if Patrick twists into the future plot at all.
Was Patrick the one that hurt Pam? I know you can't tell me and that I'm probably way off, but I can't help but wonder!
Okay, that was a long review, and I'll end it with: please update soon!
Author's Response: I'm planning to update after I'm done responding to all these lovely reviews. Thank you so much.
9 [Report This]Date: October 23, 2008 12:50 pm Title: Chapter 6: Outer Limits
Roy, eh?
There's one theory.
My first thought when I started reading this, of course, was Roy. Then Toby, who is still a possibility (I don't care if he seems too nice). Then there's the interviewer, who more than came on to her, but that's too obvious. (Here's where you start realizing I've read way too many mysteries in my life.) I'm thinking Patrick at the moment, although with every chapter that seems more obvious too. But that may just be the story wrapping up. It does seem, though, when Pam yelled at her mother, "You did this to me!"...she's blaming her mother for her brother ever existing...? and then she's standoffy to Patrick...although maybe not enough considering he raped her. It's almost literally killing me not to know, please continue soon. It's a mark of a good mystery if you can stump me ^__^
Author's Response: Why "of course, Roy"? A couple of people have said they thought it was Roy but he's not in the story yet...until after I post this next chapter. I'm very curious.
Date: October 23, 2008 09:54 am Title: Chapter 6: Outer Limits
Can it get any worse- now ROY!!!
Author's Response: Can it get worse?...probably not. I'm not sure how much more I can put poor Pam through. Roy...well...I can't say anything without giving it away. I hope you like the next chapter.
10 [Report This]Date: October 22, 2008 09:16 pm Title: Chapter 6: Outer Limits
wow. this story is so creepy and cool :) So glad to hear there is more coming! I have no idea who did it, which is probably good...but thank you for not killing Jim or Pam
Author's Response: You know...I couldn't kill Jim. I thought about it but lasted for a whole four seconds. Thank you for reviewing. :D
Date: October 22, 2008 05:52 pm Title: Chapter 6: Outer Limits
This is fantastic! Please post ASAP! Flood the site all you want because this story is awesome and Sunday is too far away for an update!
Author's Response: Thanks, Doctor. Ended up picking up b12 and Calcium like you suggested. Thanks again for the lovely betaing you did on the next chapter.
Date: September 23, 2008 10:38 pm Title: Chapter 1: Tubs for Two
This is a wonderfully interesting and suspenseful story. I am loving every word! I really like the way you have mixed up the timeline - I've never seen "Damages", so I imagine you have modelled the format off of it. It really adds to the anxiety that's being built up, and it is very unique. I am looking forward to finding out what happened to Pam, who did it, and where Jim has been. I hope you can update soon!
10 [Report This]Date: August 29, 2008 07:21 am Title: Chapter 5: Ninty Degrees
so so so so fantastic!
im dying for more!
10 [Report This]Date: August 29, 2008 07:16 am Title: Chapter 4: By the Numbers
this is so suspenseful!!
i cant decide who it was!
...maybe toby??
ahhhh its so good!
10 [Report This]Date: August 29, 2008 07:05 am Title: Chapter 1: Tubs for Two
oh my gosh!!!
im on the edge of my seat!
this is crazy good!!!
Date: August 28, 2008 09:36 pm Title: Chapter 1: Tubs for Two
Solid chapter. Even though you've decided to keep the confusing timeline, I think I can wade through the story. Anxiously awaiting the next chapter.
Author's Response: If I didn't keep mixing up the timeline I would be changing the entire format of the story. It's meant to be a puzzle just like the show Damages. A wonderful show I highly recommend. Thank you for reading and reviewing. The next chapter is coming real soon.:)
Date: August 28, 2008 07:56 pm Title: Chapter 5: Ninty Degrees
Definitely exciting! Concrit: there are many misspelled and misused words (i.e. 'they're' instead of 'their') and grammatical errors that interrupt the flow of the story... internet problems are annoying, I've had a lot of them myself lately, but getting someone to beta for you would probably solve the problem. There's a list on the fanfic home page I think of people willing to beta. This fic is fantastic, so the mechanical errors are more annoying than anything else.
I don't know how I am going to wait for the next part- well, I guess I don't have a choice! I really like how you have mixed up the chronological order of the story; definitely adds to the suspense, and makes the plot seem more complex. Awesome chapters so far :)
Author's Response: I appreciate your advice but I'm hardly new to this site. I actually am a beta for a few other writers and sometimes it's harder to notice mistakes when it's my own writing. However, a friend did look for this story for me after seeing this review and there was one misspelled word according to him. You definitely have me paying special close attention to what I'm currently working on so I can only thank you for that. In the serious way and not the rude way.rnThank you for taking time to read and review my story.
Date: August 28, 2008 08:26 am Title: Chapter 1: Tubs for Two
Okay, I'm hooked. Please keep writing. It's disturbing, and a little hard to follow sometimes, but I can't wait to read the next chapter.
Author's Response: :D Thank you. New chapter coming soon.
9 [Report This]Date: August 27, 2008 09:40 pm Title: Chapter 5: Ninty Degrees
yay! I am so glad there is an update!! I was worried you wouldnt finish it and we would be left wondering forever! I am really intrigued as to where this is going. I also have no idea wth is going on LOL. I can't wait to see where Jim has been (NOT DEAD). Unique tale.
Author's Response: Thank you. I promise I will finish this story. Even I need to see it play out till the end. If you like how confusing the story is you should really check out the show "Damages." It's as confusing, more intense, and just so wonderful. As far as Jim...the new chapter will be coming soon.
Date: August 27, 2008 11:00 am Title: Chapter 1: Tubs for Two
This was exhausting...and that's a compliment. I'm having a hard time keeping track of everyone in this story, but that corresponds very well to the "mystery" of what happened. The format you've chosen fits very well to the plot.
Update soon please :)
Author's Response: Thank you very much.
Date: August 27, 2008 10:31 am Title: Chapter 5: Ninty Degrees
I am so glad you are back and updating! I really enjoy this story and I am excited to see where you take it.
Oh and I figured you were joking around about not showing Jim if people didn't review. You are so NOT a review grubber! Besides this story is too good for you to need to beg for reviews :)
Author's Response: Hey Doctor. I've been worried about you. Thank you for taking time away for your busy schedule and Jubjub to read and review my latest chapter. I hope everyone is doing okay and please don't forget to drink lots of water. Thank you :) :)
Date: August 27, 2008 07:42 am Title: Chapter 5: Ninty Degrees
I have to vehemently disagree with Schrutelover18's review. Your story is great on many levels and so far Jim hasn't even "behaved" so we can't judge him yet. I started this story this morning and can't wait for more. Please hurry. It's a doozie! But dead Jim might be too much for me so I am hoping that "tall figure" is a good sign!
Author's Response: Thank you so much. There is so much I want to say but I think it might make me a bad author to just go ahead and give everything away now so what I will say about Jim is that you'll know something about Jim's fate in the next chapter... :D :D :D Stay tuned.
Author's Response: Thank you so much. There is so much I want to say but I think it might make me a bad author to just go ahead and give everything away now. So what I will say about Jim is that you'll know something about Jim's fate in the next chapter... :D :D :D Stay tuned.
Date: August 25, 2008 09:02 pm Title: Chapter 4: By the Numbers
Not to be rude or anything, but this can't be considered fanfiction since this is taking the concept of one show and applying it to two characters on another show. I can't seem to buy this story because it's so out there and all of the periphery characters seem really dull and fake. I don't really feel this is a story; mostly a look at everyone around Jim and Pam and the summary is incredibly vague. I'm surprised Jim hasn't come to see about Pam yet. The only way I would be able to forgive this portrayal of Jim is if he's dead. Other than that, there's no excuse for his behaviour in this story. I also didn't like the threat of the only way we get to see Jim is if we review but I guess it's working...either you were going to do it or you weren't. Reviews shouldn't have anything to do with that. The flashbacks are really confusing. I would stick with one chapter being in the future and then the next chapter being in the past or vice versa. But if you feel you need a beta, feel free to contact me through the archive and I'll be glad to help you flesh out the story. :)
Author's Response: I actually have the story fleshed out already but thank you for your offer and advice. Reviews don't really have anything to do with Jim coming back. It was a joke and I'm sorry that didn't come across for you. My story has been outlined and as far as Jim's behavior...you have no idea what's happened with him or why he's not there if he's alive.rnAlso, fanfiction is fiction of a show written by a fan. That's it. There's no rules or regulations to it. I can think of many other really good stories that are based of other shows or movies. War of the Worlds is a good one.rnThank you for your interest.
Date: August 05, 2008 10:11 pm Title: Chapter 1: Tubs for Two
OMG. I am absolutely loving this. I'm big into thinking outside the box and you definitely peaked my interest. I BEG you to update soon, I am dying to know more about this. I have some many freaking questions! haha.
=]
Author's Response: If you get on AIM or Yahoo I'll answer all the questions you like. :) I'm glad you're enjoying the story and lucky for you I just submitted my latest chapter.
Date: August 04, 2008 03:51 pm Title: Chapter 4: By the Numbers
This is a good piece of fanfic, I am nervous and really need to know what the hell happened and Where is JIM?
Author's Response: Thank you. All in good time. :D Just keep reading.