Date: July 30, 2008 06:07 pm Title: Chapter 3
I'm really enjoying this story, even though that phone convo from the last chapter was so painful. But it was also quite realistic, and I could easily see Jim saying a few things he normally wouldn't while under the influence.
Nice to see Pam taking the lead again in an attempt to salvage their relationship. Good for FNB. Don't let him get away this time!
Author's Response: So happy you are liking it EH! I was trying for realism, I guess I've been trying to make a point of what could really happy the last few fics I've done. It's something that I work hard on, so it means so much that it does seem real to you, the reader. Thanks the review, and I think she'll do her best, don't you?
Date: July 30, 2008 11:28 am Title: Chapter 3
Outstanding! Please makeit all better now.
B
Author's Response: I will! Thank again for reviewing! And I'm so very happy you're enjoying it.
Date: July 29, 2008 09:26 pm Title: Chapter 3
Very Pam-ish to be assertive enough to call him, but do it with the safety of doing it at work... and then leaving it up to him to call her that evening.
Oh for the love of humanity do not leave us hanging too long!
:)
Author's Response:
I think that's very them, put it out there, take it back, put it out there, take it back. I'm so happy you liked it, and thank you for taking the time to review. I won't leave you hanging much longer.
Date: July 29, 2008 02:03 pm Title: Chapter 3
ARRGHGghghh..oh curse you and your cliff-hanging chapter. No. No. Love you. Write more please! Love seeing your take on drunk/hurtin' Jim. Love Pam and her courage. Rock on, uncgirl and I'll try to rein in the hysteria.
(NOT a weak chapter, plenty happened...)
Author's Response: HAHAHA.....okay so this may be my favorite review ever! I won't leave you hanging much longer....and I'm so happy you love it. May I say I think we are a match made in heaven, Mint Choc Chip is my favorite.
Date: July 29, 2008 12:34 pm Title: Chapter 3
She didn't sleep at all? Thats.... not a lot of sleep.
" so alone and so broken"
Man, that just hurts.
Crying in the shower .... its like, its.... well, I've probably cried in the shower more times than I should admit, but also, in the rain, those two places are like, it sort of adds to the sadness factor. It always seems to be a better place to cry. Maybe its just more pathetic and alone and so, you cry. But... is this making any more sense. But, there was a point, but I think I lost it quite a while ago.
Pam, Jim loves you so much, he would be in pain for the rest of his life if... well, everyhing that happened never happened. I would hope he would evetually be able to maybe move on. But I think if, in 10 years, he ran into you again, it would still be painful.
Just admit it Pam. You are amazing, and Jim is totally, completely, 100% in love with you. And you are with him.
And that kind of rocks.
Wait? What? Jim is real and... not perfect? Not that knight in shining armor?
Damn, that kind of sucks. Because he is still fictional!
" piece him back together"
:O..... Jim is Humpty Dumpty?
Jim, that is like... the waking place of shame, dude.
Oh, nothing happened last night. Just the most painful drunken conversation EVER. Nothing big Jim. Its okay you forgot!
Pam got me addicted to Sudoku. True story.
"Man, I'm so in love with you. I look like an old fart." Yeah, it doesn't really flow as well as the real love songs, does it?
Pam, if you are going to hide from the world, its so much better to just stay home. The bathroom is gross. Home is nice.
Yay! Pam in a ponytail!
Much friendlier start than last night. Thas a start right?
:( You and the evil cliffhangers. You are evil. Like, with devil horns.
Oh, fine, I guess since you are having a crappy work sitatuion maybe I won't call you evil. Or at least I'll take away the devil horns comment. So evil. Without devil horns.
Author's Response:
Ok, seriously, I am NOT EVIL. I am a tease, I thought we cleared that up.
I will post, work drama is over now. But it's been one of those come home and curl up on the couch and want to do nothing weeks. Again, i love your review, it's like reading with you. And yes, something about the ponytail made me happy to. Like watch out world, I am putting my hair up!
Date: July 29, 2008 11:37 am Title: Chapter 3
This is really good so far. I think by the time they got together they'd both resolved a lot of this hurt by themselves. If they'd gotten to it earlier, they really may have needed a good cathartic shouting match. I like how you let them start to resume a little of their normal banter in this chapter, while still showing the strain. I'm interested in what's next!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing. I do think that in S3 I felt like they really needed to get it out, and I do think this would have happened, especially with the addition of alcohol. But you are right, by now, and by the time that they did get together, I think that so much time had passed that perhaps they could be more rational. Some times I wonder if they have ever really addressed it all, they do seem to be a couple that would prefer to let something go instead of talk too much about it if it is painful, especially Jim. But anyway, I'm glad you're still liking it.
Date: July 29, 2008 11:11 am Title: Chapter 3
The morning after… I think it’s very enlightening to Pam she finally realized how hurt Jim was after Casino Night. Unfortunately, Pam realized the truth only after the harshness and honesty of her conversation w/ Jim the previous night. The visual of Pam in the break room suddenly looking old was a great visual of the physical toll Jim’s absence and words took on Pam. I like that this story is a realistic approach about how Pam and Jim where at that time in their “love story.” Both still hurt and angry with each other for what happened and for what did not happen. (Sidebar: congratulations on taking the first step to a possible life change… if you love it, it will be a perfect fit for you.)
Author's Response:
I think that the whole thing with Pam in this chapter was something I really learned about her by writing this. I'll admit I don't ponder on internal motivation that much with the show outside of when I read good fic or if I'm writing. So I hadn't thought that deeply about whether or not she understood his scars. Especially in light of her actions in S3. But in writing it, I thought about how he would suddenly seems so complex in the morning whereas she had always seen him lighthearted and happy. I'm thrilled that it turned out and read well, and I actually I love that it gave me the chance to learn more about Pam.
Thanks for the encouraging words. I was thinking today, I mean worst case scenario, I make a change and come back to law when I'm not so burnt out. I think I would love it though. I hope that you are also doing well. As I said, you live in a state with one of the hardest tests EVER. I'll be rooting for you, you're going to do it!
8 [Report This]Date: July 29, 2008 06:51 am Title: Chapter 3
Not a weak chapter at all! So sorry to hear that you're having a hard time at work. I hope that turns around soon. Still loving this story. I look forward to their talk.
Author's Response:
I think I feel that this is weak because it is a bridge between two BIG conversations between them and it seems a little ho-hum knowing what came before and what comes after. I couldn't tell if it could stand alone....but I'm really happy people liked it. At work? Well, I can't give details, but it was just a bad emotionally draining situation. But it is over now, I hope, and the weekend is close. Thanks for all your support and kind words.
Date: July 29, 2008 06:07 am Title: Chapter 3
Oo good plot!
Author's Response: Thank you so much!
Date: July 29, 2008 04:59 am Title: Chapter 3
I'm glad that writing this is give you a pick me up ... 'cause I'm certainly enjoying it! So glad your Pam is fighting for what she wants! I hope you post the phone call soon.
Author's Response: I really meant to post it yesterday, but life is getting in the way. But really it should be up tonight or tomorrow. I've been bad with reviewing lately, but I'm still reading and enjoying Cardiac Care. So, something that would pick me up would be an update from YOU. :-)
Date: July 29, 2008 04:44 am Title: Chapter 3
Still really enjoying this - I especially like Pam's reaction to hearing Jim say the things he never would sober. This was very apt: Since he had left, he had become this almost mythical person for her, her fairy tale knight in shining armor, but hearing him last night made her realize that he was very real and hurting. It was almost like she was seeing him for the first time without all the games they used to play to hide from each other.
I think that's precisely how she saw him - like he was somehow in suspended animation, there for her once she sorted herself out - hence her profound disappointment in TM when he actually returned, but...not. But I digress...you've written this the way I wish it had happened, and made it so in character that it feels like it actually could have.
Author's Response:
Exactly. I think Pam never got the depth of the feelings he had for her. I'm certain that she thought they would pick up where they left off.....and then when the timing was better they would get together. I'm glad you're still enjoying it. I've been so surprised at the response to this fic, but I couldn't be happier that people like it and that it makes sense to you. Thanks for taking a moment to review!
10 [Report This]Date: July 29, 2008 03:24 am Title: Chapter 3
Whoa! (That is a very good "whoa") I have sort of been reduced to that after reading this. I do not see the weakness you see in this chapter at all. It packed quite a punch. I especially love that Jim knew the pain additional risk would cause him, but he had to let himself take that chance anyhow. Awesome job, once again.
Author's Response:
Thanks so much. I think that I know which chapters this chapter is a bridge between and I'm much more proud of the other two. But I'll admit to liking the Pam in the bathroom scene. Okay that sounded wrong....
I'm so happy that you like it and I really appreciate the review.
10 [Report This]Date: July 28, 2008 10:58 pm Title: Chapter 3
I honestly don't know how she didn't just drive right down to Stamford, but maybe that's just me. ;-)
Not a weak chapter, uncgirl - just over too soon!
Author's Response: Ha Ha Ha, I KNOW. Thanks for the kind words moxie, when I posted it last night I thought, "man people are going to hate this". So glad that you didn't hate it! Thanks for the review!
Date: July 28, 2008 10:30 pm Title: Chapter 3
Oh, I like Pam taking the initiative to call Jim at work and try to talk to him again. I'm curious to see how their conversation goes that night when Pam remembers what happened the night before and Jim really doesn't. Good job!
Author's Response: Thanks Jenn. I noticed that it's a theme with me that Pam takes initiative. Don't know why. I wanted to show just how drunk Jim really was, and I thought that if he didn't remember it would show that he was indeed really drunk. Plus it's kinda a reset on all that pain from the night before. Glad you're still liking it.
Date: July 28, 2008 10:27 pm Title: Chapter 3
You can't just end a chapter like that. It's just mean. Please update soon! Like really really soon. Now would be good.
Author's Response: You know, that's twice someone has called me mean....I promise I'm not. I am however a bit of a tease with my cliffhangers. I would update NOW, but I need to tweak a bit of the ending. Thanks for the review, I will not leave you hanging too long.
Date: July 28, 2008 09:42 pm Title: Chapter 3
More please! SOON!! Love this story!
Author's Response: Thank you so much, I will update as soon as I can. Hopefully today. That was my plan.