Date: August 03, 2008 03:49 pm Title: Chapter 4
Is this the end? It works as an ending, optimistically looking into the future. But I'd love more as well because I really enjoyed this.
Date: August 03, 2008 07:10 am Title: Chapter 4
This is the most amazingly real and well written drunk dialing I have ever read. Seriously. You handled Jim perfectly- he has to get angry SOMETIME and you having it come out of being hurt was a very good reason.
Also, Jim having the guts to call her back (almost too late!) was brave, but keeping him a little reticent was a good call because Pam held all the cards as far as knowing what had been said- he really would have been aware of the disadvantage.
Great ending- realistic I think.
Also, Call and Answer? I've seen BNL live several times (helps that I'm Canadian) and it's always dead quiet in the crowd when this one is sung. It's great.
7 [Report This]Date: August 02, 2008 10:55 pm Title: Chapter 4
yay! this was really wonderful. angsty, yes, but the good kind - the right kind. nothing too specific to say, but i really enjoyed the read.
10 [Report This]Date: August 01, 2008 07:50 pm Title: Chapter 4
This was a amazing, as was the rest of this story. You carried though the awkwardness and hopefulness of the phone call perfectly. They were both so cautious, yet each willed themselves to be just courageous enough to say what they needed to and figure out what the other was thinking. I really, really love what you did with this story and I'm sad to see it go. Looking forward to your next story. Thank you, again, for sharing this lovely story.
Date: August 01, 2008 03:26 pm Title: Chapter 4
Great AU story!
10 [Report This]Date: July 31, 2008 08:04 pm Title: Chapter 4
See, kids, that wasn't so hard, right? I think you struck just right the balance here, with them making progress but not getting past all their issues in one fell swoop. Also, a tremendous job writing the conversation...very, very real and well paced. I will look forward to the epilogue.
Author's Response: Well truthfully this could go on and on, but I will refrain from that. Perhaps just what we were discussing for the epilogue. However I did buy the books for my class today, so....I may be busy (yea!). Thanks for listening to all my childish rants.
10 [Report This]Date: July 31, 2008 11:43 am Title: Chapter 4
I felt a bit let down at the end of this chapter, so I waited a while and read it again. I realized my feelings were not from anything lacking, but simply because it was over! I really think you captured them both so well that I don't want to leave this little universe - I want to know what happens next!! Well done, uncgirl. :-)
Author's Response: I'm so grateful for this review moxie. I was really sort of flummoxed by the lack of response to this chapter, but at the same time I worried that people wouldn't really like the "end" from the get-go. But I cannot tell you how much I appreciate the fact that you really told me your initial and secondary responses to it. I'm happy that you liked it better on second read and really I love this little universe too. We never get a full conversation on film with them, and I really enjoyed being able to just "listen" to them. Weird? I hope not. Thank you for all the kind words. I really value your opinion highly.
10 [Report This]Date: July 31, 2008 10:02 am Title: Chapter 4
Oh, PLEASE don't mark the story complete!!! PLEASE write more than an epilogue! Take your time, by all means but ADD MORE! It's a really good story.
Author's Response: I'm so glad you took the time to review. I'm a push over and I probably will, but as I said, it will take time. I'm SLOOOOW. Speaking of updates and time, it's time for an update on yours don't you think? ;-)
9 [Report This]Date: July 31, 2008 06:46 am Title: Chapter 4
Write an epilogue. I haven't even read this chapter yet, but I know there has to be more. Why you ask? Because I say so!
I think this work could double as a anti-drinking piece. Halfway. It got some things said that needed to be said. But the not remembering... thats kind of bad.
"comfiest sweatpants and his favorite Death Cab t-shirt"
Nice /Kevin
“I’m so sorry, I didn’t mean to…do that.”
Very Jimmy
But they did need to yell. Yelling is healthy. Not fun. But, one of those sucky necessary parts of relationships. Disagreements. Talking it out. Screaming until you are blue in the face. Making up.
Mad about Roy. And the what he did to Pam. How he broke her in some ways.
So cute (and in character) how they never really know what to say.
“Oh yeah, I’m sure if you were Stanley he would have done the exact same thing.”
Stanley and Michael = OTP.
"“…best friend, I know.” He sighed, right back to same place they started months ago. "
*sigh* But no. I mean, yes, she misses you as a best friend, but more than that Jim. I miss my best friends when they disappear for a day, heck, even an hour. But I never miss them in the way that Pam misses you. Never.
"“Because you were right.”"
BEST LINE EVER! YOU ARE SO NOT EVIL! LIKE, A MILLION TIMES OVER NOT EVIL!
Man, that next part kind of brings back the pain of he secret all over again. I remember in the commentary how one time, Jenna walked back to her desk and cried, and with your interpretation, I could totally see why!
“So…where to from here?”
Hmm, "where do we go from here...where do we go from here.... the battle's done, and we kind of won.." what, you aren't singing buffy right now? Just me... *shuts up*
Its never too late Pam.
write the epilogue lady! I want more. Like now.
Author's Response: Hey, thanks so much.... I probably will, but it will take time. I'm glad you liked it, I worried people wouldn't, it isn't flashy or anything, but I liked the dance they did with each other. And I'll glad you loved "the line" because I have to say, I thought that was GOOD. ;-) And I'm very glad I'm not evil anymore.
9 [Report This]Date: July 31, 2008 03:47 am Title: Chapter 4
While I'm hoping you can muster up an epilogue, this ends quite nicely just as it is. Great job, uncgirl. Thanks for the happy : )
Author's Response: Thanks for the reviews! Really it's been so fun with this fic. I'm not saying that the epilogue won't happen, I just don't want people constantly checking for updates at this point because as we both know, I can take a long time to draft and update. I figured it was best to be upfront. Thanks for sticking with me the whole way!
Date: July 30, 2008 10:32 pm Title: Chapter 4
Aww....sweet. I wish it would of ended with a kiss however....so an epilogue would be reall nice!! If you're up to it!
Author's Response: Well I hear ya about the kiss. Oddly enough I had that exactly conversation with xoxoxo saying that I thought I should do an epi with a smooch. But for sure I couldn't quite figure out how to work it into this chapter without one of them doing kissy noises in the phone and really we both know that's no good. :-)
9 [Report This]Date: July 30, 2008 10:27 pm Title: Chapter 4
This has been a wonderful read. Very difficult at times because of the raw emotion but real all the more for that. I've been enjoying it. Will there be more chapters? I hope so.
Author's Response: There may be. I didn't want people to feel that there wasn't a real resolution here. But it did take me two months to write this, so I just wanted to be sure people knew that if there is more, it will take time. I'm so happy you liked it, and I've had such fun watching people's responses to it. Thank you for taking a moment to review.