5 [Report This]Date: October 09, 2006 11:05 am Title: The Wedding
Ooops. Hit "enter" too quickly on that last review. Sorry.
I wanted to say that I almost didn't finish this. Pam is basically panicking because her own decisions have led her to a place she didn't want to be; I can't work up a lot of sympathy for someone so spineless she can't even recognize her own feelings. However, the last line of this section had me almost ROFL! I love it! It's so DWIGHT.
If I were to rewrite this, I would seriously shorten the introspection on Pam's part and give us a really good reason for her continuing the engagement right up to the wedding itself, something better than mere inertia.
Good luck!
9 [Report This]Date: September 19, 2006 04:20 pm Title: The Wedding
Tee hee! I've never read any stories where Pam fakes fainting before! The last line of the chapter is hilarious.
Also, Jim will laugh so hard when she tells him about this!
7 [Report This]Date: September 19, 2006 02:30 pm Title: The Wedding
Oooh, this is intriguing! Can't wait to read the next chapter. And the last line was so funny!
10 [Report This]Date: September 19, 2006 01:30 pm Title: The Wedding
Hahahaha. Oh please tell me that there's going to be more. So, so awesome and very original.
8 [Report This]Date: September 19, 2006 12:39 pm Title: The Wedding
LOL, that last sentence is perfect!
10 [Report This]Date: September 19, 2006 12:00 pm Title: The Wedding
My head started to spin when Pam's did.
So in other words...well done. :)
Anxiously awaiting parts II and III.
10 [Report This]Date: September 19, 2006 11:24 am Title: The Wedding
praying that someone would stop Dwight before he was able to attempt mouth-to-mouth resuscitation.
That was perfect. I could just see Dwight running up to her too.
9 [Report This]Date: September 19, 2006 11:22 am Title: The Wedding
Still love that first line. I wasn't sure how you would break this into chapters, but this is a great choice. Again, nicely agitated Pam POV!
9 [Report This]Date: September 19, 2006 09:37 am Title: The Wedding
Oh, Pam. PAM. Stupid, stupid girl. At least she did something- finally! This has a really great tone- tense and realistic but somehow still light and comedic. Great job!