1 [Report This]Date: October 24, 2021 02:34 am Title: red delicious
That last line - “ When I got home I licked the Snickers wrapper clean, folded it in half, and tucked it into my wallet.”. That’s *exactly what she would do. And there is no way you’d do that for someone who wasn’t someone you love.
1 [Report This]Date: March 31, 2021 11:09 am Title: red delicious
Oh, man. This is so them.
Date: March 01, 2009 05:16 pm Title: red delicious
It's so wrong that I find Jim and Pam grocery shopping super sexy....
Date: September 04, 2008 09:39 pm Title: red delicious
That ending felt like a warm blanket. So cozy and so very them. Thanks for such a sweet, well-written story.
Author's Response: Thank you, LoveFool. I appreciate all your support throughout this story. Reviewers like you have made me fall in love with writing again. :)
9 [Report This]Date: September 01, 2008 10:03 pm Title: red delicious
haha this was so cute, but I have to laugh at the end because my sister actually did save a Snicker's wrapper from her boyfriend (now husband). :P Very nicely done, I'm off to read the rest!
Author's Response: Aw, that's sweet. Snickers even? What a coincidence! Glad you liked it. Thanks for reading :)
9 [Report This]Date: September 01, 2008 08:50 pm Title: red delicious
Callisto, I love your voices for Jim and Pam. So nice to find this story in near entirety after being away from fanfic for the summer. You really have a talent for writing these two. The forgiveness conversation seemed very real and not melodramatic at all. Great job!
Author's Response: Thank you again, rabid! Nice to hear that I've got the voices right, and I'm glad you're enjoying this. And I'm happy to hear it sounded real, that's important to me. Thanks for reading and leaving your thoughts. :)
9 [Report This]Date: August 26, 2008 09:32 pm Title: red delicious
Callisto, I've been meaning to come over here and review and just haven't been very good about it lately. But I truly love this story. Really nice idea, beautiful writing. Just great. Hopefully I can give you more specifics as I read future chapters, but I just wanted you to know that I like it a lot!
Author's Response: Hey wendolf, nice to see you! I know you've been pretty busy with your own stuff lately, so no worries. But I'm glad you like it. Specifics are always welcome, as you know! I love your writing and would definitely appreciate that. Thanks for taking time out to read :)
10 [Report This]Date: August 26, 2008 07:01 pm Title: red delicious
Wow so I totally wrote a review earlier today and it didn't work. WTF.
So, in short.. I looved this. It was simple and cute and them and the bickering and car antics (you should write an entire MA fic about that, I say)... it was all very gorgeous
Author's Response: So I totally went through and did my responses and just noticed I missed yours! WTF. hahaha. Thanks, flonkerton, I'm glad to feel the love. I like these kinds of bits the most--the banter and the joking and the antics. Which is probably why I write so many of them. As for an MA fic... I prefer to read those rather than write them *blushes* but maybe one of these days, I'll get up the nerve, eh?
10 [Report This]Date: August 26, 2008 12:05 pm Title: red delicious
Sigh. I wanted to leave you a nice little review about how I've been really enjoying this story as I do everything you write but I don't have words for it. You're amazing, honestly. And I want to be you when I grow up. That's probably weird but hey, you're giving me something to shoot for. ;)
Author's Response: That is weird. Just kidding :) Thank you, what a compliment! I'm really honored that you'd say that. I'm glad you like my stories. In theory, I'll finish something that uses my own characters one of these days...but in the meantime, this is really fun, and it's very, very nice to get such supportive feedback. So, thank you! You made me day. :)
Date: August 22, 2008 03:38 am Title: red delicious
Another perfect chapter. I think you capture the characters so well. It feels like Jim and Pam. It's not too dramatic and not too shallow, it feels real. I loved the paragraph that started with: "Roy's not Jim, and that's....." I've never really understood how she could go back to him, but this felt convincing. Great work.
Author's Response: Thanks Pisa! I hope I was able to capture their real motives and emotions. I wondered a lot about why she'd do that, too. Glad it rang true to you. Thanks for reading and for the review!
Date: August 21, 2008 12:59 pm Title: red delicious
Oh, Pam. Such a dangerous game she's playing with herself. People could get hurt. Seriously, you capture that time, that sense that everything was about to bubble over, very, very well here. I'm hooked!
Author's Response: Hey nqllisi. I'm glad you saw it that way too-- a dangerous game. Glad you're enjoying it!
10 [Report This]Date: August 20, 2008 05:01 pm Title: red delicious
I love this story so far :) I hope you update soon.. This story is fantastic. I totally feel Jim and Pam through your words and I want to keep reading!
Author's Response: Thank you dasani! Chapter four is in the works. I hope to get it up tonight. Glad you're enjoying this, thanks for letting me know!
10 [Report This]Date: August 16, 2008 11:42 am Title: red delicious
Beautiful. I loved Jim's inner thought repeating "I'm in love with you." I can imagine he had so many moments like this one where you know he just wanted to tell her. But you were able to illustrate beautifully that he did tell her, just in a different way.
I love this. More, please ;)
Author's Response: Thank you kells! That's what I was hoping to convey. I'm glad you liked it! More coming. :)
10 [Report This]Date: August 16, 2008 07:48 am Title: red delicious
Wow- I absolutely love this dialog! You're filling in the gaps along the way just perfectly, and it's so rewarding to see snippets of Pam and Jim's relationship away from the office. I too love Pam's reaction, and how it's so obvious she's feeling something, too. All around this is an amazing fic- can't wait for more!
Author's Response: Thanks honeypioneer! I've always liked to think about what happens after work, away from cameras, on the weekends, etc. And I've always been certain that Pam was aware of, if not necessarily admitting to, her feelings. I'm glad you're enjoying it. Thanks for reading! :)
10 [Report This]Date: August 15, 2008 06:41 am Title: red delicious
Oh I love this, callisto. I swear it's like you filled in a gap in S2 somewhere. You have their voices down perfectly, and it's nice to see Pam crushing on Jim. And the visual of him with scruff, and a short sleeve tee over a thermal? Yummy. So thanks for that ;) Can't wait for more.
Author's Response: Thanks kells! I love exploring the after-the-episode possibilities. Hope you like the rest! Thanks for reading. :)
Date: August 14, 2008 08:09 pm Title: red delicious
Absolutely lovely. You write Jim/Pam interaction very well! Can't wait for more :)
Author's Response: Thank you! I hope you like the rest. :)
10 [Report This]Date: August 14, 2008 05:22 pm Title: red delicious
Callisto! My God, your dialog is PITCH PERFECT here! I especially liked the whole sequence as they start looking at the apples. I like the fleeting moments of melancholy they both experience, how they tease each other, that Pam fakes that she needs cereal to get Jim to reach up. That she shares the Snickers bar with Jim and then saves the wrapper.
I will be interested to see why you shift from present tense to past after the * * *
Can't wait for Orange Monday!!
Author's Response: Thanks VB! I like finding who they are in the little moments the best, and it doesn't get much more cozy than shopping together. I do have to say-- I am not doing the colors in order of the spectrum, though I will use them all. (I tried--it just wasn't working.) I'll give you a sneak peek when it's close :)
Date: August 14, 2008 04:24 pm Title: red delicious
Very sweet. I'm looking forward to reading more!
You've really nailed "the dance" that these two did for those first two years!
Author's Response: Thanks jkfan! I'm glad you liked it. :)
Date: August 14, 2008 11:29 am Title: red delicious
Callisto you have absolutely one of the best Jim/Pam voices around. It is so true and authentic. Your ear for their intonation and just the things they would ACTUALLY say is pretty damn fabulous. Add to that -- you alluded to one of all time fave episodes Email Surveillance (here's hoping that's what your next chapter is about). I, like Pam was always so curious about Jim's life outside the office, so I adore that first venture into the unknown. I'm really going to enjoy this series. Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Thank you LoveFool! I'm glad to hear the voices ring true. I sometimes just get bits of imagined dialogue in my head and have to write it down and stuff like this comes out of it. Thanks for reading :) Hope you like the rest of it!
10 [Report This]Date: August 14, 2008 10:43 am Title: red delicious
Callisto! So happy to see you at the top of the "most recent" list. This is box-of-kittens adorable. First person is a tricky, tricky thing and you do it so wonderfully here. The entire opening section, with Pam telling us about the Dundies, is great. I can't wait for more.
Author's Response: Hey Talkative! I love writing first person, so thanks for that. And I almost left out that whole prologue bit about the Dundies, so I'm glad it worked. I hope you like the rest of it. Thanks for reading :)
9 [Report This]Date: August 14, 2008 10:22 am Title: red delicious
You have this amazing talent to always get me to smile and warmly think, "Awwww." Very sweet
Author's Response: That is a really nice thing to say. Thanks, flonkerton!
Date: August 14, 2008 10:19 am Title: red delicious
Jim + chocolate = WIN!
But seriously, there is something so intimate about grocery shopping together -- the ways in which these two connect are really lovely.
Author's Response: Thanks lisahoo! Yeah, couldn't resist the gratuitous chocolate-thumb shot. And you learn an awful lot about a person when you go shopping with them.
Date: August 14, 2008 09:48 am Title: red delicious
This was really sweet! I love their interaction here. You have their hesitant yet flirty vibe down. Makes me nostalgic for S2. I can't wait to see what you do with the other days of the week/colors. Sounds like it's going to be quite a ride.
Author's Response: I've been missing season two awkwardness, for some reason. The always leaving things unsaid. Thanks for reading! I hope you like the rest of it. :)
10 [Report This]Date: August 14, 2008 09:05 am Title: red delicious
Very nice. Oh yeah, I'm sure Pam felt this way about kissing Jim at the Dundies. Love the description of weekend Jim. And this:
“Roy doesn’t like getting his truck scratched up with this stuff,” I explained. Jim didn’t say anything. He never did. Still, the look on his face made me feel weird. Defensive, ashamed, embarrassed.
So sad. But we saw it all too often in season 2. Looking forward to more.
Author's Response: Thanks Cheeb! Yeah, I always figured she knew what she was doing at the Dundies. Thanks for reading! I'm glad you liked it.
Date: August 14, 2008 08:55 am Title: red delicious
Callisto, so happy to hear from you! You're off to a promising start. Love this: “As you wish.” He arched a teasing eyebrow at me. There were a few boxes missing, and he had to stretch up a little to get one, his layered shirts riding up a bit to reveal a thin white strip of stomach above his jeans. I caught a glimpse of dark hair, a contour of abdominal muscle, for just an instant before he was turning back around to me. “Here you go.” He set the box in my cart with a flourish, regarding me quizzically as he looked into my face. Princess Bride reference, treasure trail, stomach muscles...resistance is futile. And this perfect ending:
When I got home I licked the Snickers wrapper clean, folded it in half, and tucked it into my wallet. Nice touch : )
Author's Response: Happy to hear from you, NanReg! I'll admit I wondered about adding that whole cereal-aisle scene, but a little superfluous Jim-adoration never hurt anybody, right? And thanks for that about the ending :)