10 [Report This]Date: July 16, 2009 09:22 pm Title: Part 1
Wow how have I missed this fic? One of the best first date fics I have ever read =)
Date: October 16, 2008 10:39 pm Title: Part 1
Hey, now...they're calling a taxi, right? She's so little, though; it's a wonder she's still upright.
Author's Response: Yep, there's a taxi ride home. (Pam suggested it when Jim brought up the fact that he couldn't get drunk because he drove them there.) And they did have a full meal before they started drinking, so I'm figuring it would take quite a few to get her as wasted as I wanted her to be by the end. Thanks for your review!
10 [Report This]Date: October 15, 2008 10:24 am Title: Part 1
I was just draw back to this fic, Blanca. It's so good. Loved this paragraph in particular: They've gone somewhere intimate now, to a place where no one else exists but the two of them. They've built this place together, brick by brick, over the years, without even realizing it. It has stood empty for the last year, shuttered and locked, awaiting their return like summer vacationers. It feels like they're finally ready to come back, open up the windows, dust off the furniture and settle in for good. So pretty.
Author's Response: More reviews! You rock, NanReg. You're one of the best reviewers here and I'm honored that you came back to say such nice things Thank you.
Date: September 22, 2008 06:31 pm Title: Part 1
I'm so glad I have power again...
and I wanted to tell you as a bartender that shot names get really really filthy. Like, when people order them I blush. Nice of you to pick tamer ones... (also, sex on the beach is probably the best shot ever)
onto chapter two...
Author's Response: Oh, yeah, I know about some of those filthy shot names! I just wanted to keep the T rating. Also, I am a fan of sex on the beach (TWSS!). ;-)
10 [Report This]Date: September 21, 2008 06:10 am Title: Part 1
They've gone somewhere intimate now, to a place where no one else exists but the two of them. They've built this place together, brick by brick, over the years, without even realizing it. It has stood empty for the last year, shuttered and locked, awaiting their return like summer vacationers. It feels like they're finally ready to come back, open up the windows, dust off the furniture and settle in for good.
That is a beautiful image. Really nicely crafted.
10 [Report This]Date: September 20, 2008 10:12 pm Title: Part 1
This is poetry.
Drunken poetry, but poetry nonetheless.
7 [Report This]Date: September 20, 2008 07:30 pm Title: Part 1
"And, um," she hesitates. The next part is not coming as easy as she thought it would. "What you said... that night? Are you still..."
"I am still."
I loved those lines. Actually, I loved the whole thing! And you've done such a great job keeping them in character - it all sounds so them.
And the last paragraph was perfectly awesome.
10 [Report This]Date: September 20, 2008 06:32 pm Title: Part 1
Beautiful! Wow, that closing paragraph is amazing! I love the image of "their place" awaiting their return, like summer vacationers.
They've gone somewhere intimate now, to a place where no one else exists but the two of them. They've built this place together, brick by brick, over the years, without even realizing it. It has stood empty for the last year, shuttered and locked, awaiting their return like summer vacationers. It feels like they're finally ready to come back, open up the windows, dust off the furniture and settle in for good.
Date: September 20, 2008 06:35 am Title: Part 1
I love this. It was sweet, perfectly in character and unique in a quiet little way. I love that you have Pam get emotional - but not overly so. Early on I tended to leave her a weeping mess and though I think she could get there - it was nice for her to regain composure so quickly.
or I could have just said ditto to Colette's sentiments. :) Impeccable taste - that one has. Really wonderful job.
Author's Response: And another comment from a writer I admire! I'm very flattered. Thank you so much. I tried really hard to strike the balance between emotional and overly emotional. It wasn't easy, I'll tell ya. I'm glad you thought it worked.
Date: September 20, 2008 05:47 am Title: Part 1
This is very, very good. Great dialogue - their particular humor and understanding and their nervousness come through so clearly and naturally. Your insight into how they must have felt together that first night is just as I imagine them - and I like how you say just enough to express that, without over-writing or belaboring it. I really love your last paragraph - what a perfect metaphor to describe their history. On to the next chapter...
Author's Response: Wow, thanks so much for those kind words, Colette. Coming from one of my favorite authors, that really means a lot.