Date: December 05, 2016 08:41 pm Title: Chapter 1
Love this alternative take! Could have definitely seen Jim confessing in that moment. Would love to see what happens next!
Date: October 13, 2011 08:27 am Title: Chapter 1
What a great premise! I love stories that explore the idea of Jim telling Pam sooner than Casino Night and without the burden of the impending transfer. I'm excited that Pam seems to be acknowledging her own feeling for Jim rather quickly. Can't wait to read more.
Date: October 09, 2011 03:34 am Title: Chapter 1
Ooooh, this is good! One of my all-time favourite episodes - can't wait to see where you take it.
More please :-)
Date: September 25, 2011 05:13 pm Title: Chapter 1
Lol, love the beginning. Please continue!
Date: September 23, 2011 06:48 pm Title: Chapter 1
Really enjoyed this, Blue. Nice pacing. Looking forward to that promised update...
Date: September 23, 2011 05:29 pm Title: Chapter 1
Ooooooooooooh not what I was expecting, but very very goood :)
Date: September 22, 2011 07:30 pm Title: Chapter 1
No garbage from me! I'm a fan of cliffhangers! I can't wait to read the next chapter of this and see where you take us. I love the glimpse of their golf outing, nice touch. I love Drug Testing, it's one of my top 5 favorites. I really can't wait to see where you go with this, since Jim telling her how he felt is exactly what I wished would have happened instead of him chickening out once again.
Date: September 22, 2011 05:09 pm Title: Chapter 1
Ha! I agree with Callisto about the "don't retell the episode" but I'm dying to see where this leads. Please continue.
Date: September 22, 2011 05:00 pm Title: Chapter 1
Ha! Well played. I think that's actually an interesting place to leave it-- Casino Night a few months earlier. Let's see where you go. :)
Constructive criticism (if you want it... :) - "show don't tell," as they say-- don't dwell too much on episode details or telling us what he's thinking-- your expert audience is already well aware. ;)
Date: September 22, 2011 01:08 pm Title: Chapter 1
I really enjoyed this first chapter and can't wait to read more. I have always wanted to see a story where Jim tells Pam during that conversation. I hope you don't keep us waiting for the next update for too long.