10 [Report This]Date: January 14, 2007 09:35 pm Title: Chapter 1
This is so wonderful. I love how you use her sketching to draw you into the story. It really leads you through just like watching someone draw, and it allowed you to include so many details, using the body parts as segways into explanations... just lovely. Everything about this is fabulous.
8 [Report This]Date: October 30, 2006 11:06 am Title: Chapter 1
drawing a perfect rendition of the one who broke her in two.
GREAT line.
I love this image of Pam in mourning, so to speak, and finding solace in the one thing that is distinctly hers--her art. And of course her focus would be Jim. Perfect. Well done.
10 [Report This]Date: October 29, 2006 07:59 pm Title: Chapter 1
Loved this. It had just the right mix of angsty goodness and hope for the future. And as an art major, I cannot tell you how many times I've felt like this: "So she would stare yet again at the model, trying to correct the mistakes, trying not to feel inadequate." Great job!
10 [Report This]Date: October 29, 2006 07:55 pm Title: Chapter 1
This was so beautiful. Your experience as an artist really lent itself to the story. Loved the imagery and really loved the last line. Hope to see more from you!
9 [Report This]Date: October 29, 2006 07:19 pm Title: Chapter 1
I thought you really captured Pam's state of mind and the various emotions attached to different parts of Jim. Beautiful.
9 [Report This]Date: October 29, 2006 01:38 pm Title: Chapter 1
This was beautiful...I love the angst, and the hopeful gem you placed at the end. This part absolutely killed me:
Today she thinks she may make it to his hands. They’re her favorite part to draw, maybe because she only gets that far on nights when she’s feeling happier. She makes it past the eyes and the lips and can go on.
I hope you write more soon.
10 [Report This]Date: October 29, 2006 12:05 pm Title: Chapter 1
Aw, I thought this was really sweet and a little sad. I wonder what Jim would think if he knew that she'd been drawing illustrations of him while he was gone. Hmm. I always find it interesting, too, that people talk about Pam drawing his hands a lot. I imagine that she must be pretty good, because hands are one of the hardest things to draw... at least, in my experience. The eyes are always easy, and then the mouth and the nose, but the hands... trying to capture those long, slim, but masculine hands ... I think that would be hard. I just think it's interesting how every time people write about Pam drawing Jim, there's always a comment about his hands. :)
I also really liked the line about the hidden treasures in her desk: the yogurt lid metal and the yearbook picture!
10 [Report This]Date: October 29, 2006 10:21 am Title: Chapter 1
really, really well done. Welcome to the madness! :-)
10 [Report This]Date: October 29, 2006 08:38 am Title: Chapter 1
I liked this piece of Pam angst; the idea of her using her art as a healing device is a very good one.
10 [Report This]Date: October 29, 2006 07:40 am Title: Chapter 1
This is absolutely beautiful and haunting. Wonderful imagery and execution. Wow.
10 [Report This]Date: October 29, 2006 05:04 am Title: Chapter 1
This is beautiful. I love the way you tied Pam as an artist into her feelings for Jim and her coming to terms with herself (one of my favorite fic themes too.) In the part where she ends it by simply saying 'Jim,' then their hands part, you perfectly captured the feeling of that moment. Just perfect.
Date: October 29, 2006 04:53 am Title: Chapter 1
this was realy great. you really created a mood, and the descriptions were perfect. just lovely.
9 [Report This]Date: October 29, 2006 04:25 am Title: Chapter 1
This was lovely. I liked how she worked through her emotions by finally completing the drawing just as Jim reappears in her life. And the last line gives hope.
10 [Report This]Date: October 29, 2006 04:01 am Title: Chapter 1
aww! i realy loved the imagery, and you nailed the descriptions of the emotions attached to her drawing.