1 [Report This]Date: April 19, 2020 11:54 pm Title: The Tipping Point
This is great! I feel like you’ve balanced the dialogue and Pam’s thoughts well. I love this reaction! I so wish it had really gone down like this...
Author's Response: Thank you, I appreciate the technical feedback! And thanks for enjoying the story too!
1 [Report This]Date: April 19, 2020 09:54 pm Title: The Tipping Point
Yay! Amazing to see Pam snapped, and I'll be excited with any direction you choose (except with Pam going back to Roy, but I hope that ship is sailed).
Can't wait for the continuation :)
Author's Response: Thanks for your feedback! I too always wanted Pam to snap at some point, and that is why we write fanfic!
1 [Report This]Date: April 19, 2020 08:55 pm Title: The Tipping Point
Another direction would have been for her to take that ring and shove it... well, never mind...
I've always had a hard time relating to Pam in this scene with her level of self control (or self esteem). It would have been a breaking point for me, so I'm excited to see where you take this! I forget to consider that the doc crew is filming and how that adds another element to their behavior and choices (and that there is so much we never see). Glad you brought that up here with Pam's reaction.
Thanks for writing!
Author's Response:
... and shove it up your butt?
Stanley's great, I loved that gag.
Thanks for your feedback!
I always thought it had to be especially humiliating in scenes like this where it could theoretically end up on national television at some point in the future. I'm glad you like where I'm headed with this, and I hope not to disappoint!
1 [Report This]Date: April 19, 2020 08:03 pm Title: The Tipping Point
Great premise!! Can’t wait to read what happens next
Author's Response: Thank you!
1 [Report This]Date: April 19, 2020 07:31 pm Title: The Tipping Point
Damn, what a Jerk Roy is and he totally deserves to lose Pam. Great set up and can't wait to see what you do with it.
Author's Response: Thanks! This episode always had me wondering, so now I get to make it up myself.
1 [Report This]Date: April 19, 2020 06:23 pm Title: The Tipping Point
Oooooooh this is gonna be good. I love that Jim got to see her break up with Roy too. I can't wait to see what comes next
Author's Response: Well, I hope what I write next lives up to your expectations! Thanks for your encouragement.
1 [Report This]Date: April 19, 2020 06:08 pm Title: The Tipping Point
OH I like this. PLEASE continue. Any direction is good (although, you know, JAM would be a nice direction...).
Author's Response:
Jam intended, but we'll see how they get there. I feel at this point in the show Jim wasn't exactly ready to be making proclamations, so he might be gunshy.
Thanks for your feedback, I will certainly be continuing. Got nothing better to do between providing help desk support to elder relatives.
1 [Report This]Date: April 19, 2020 06:05 pm Title: The Tipping Point
I was MAD mad until that last paragraph. I kept thinking Roy is so dumb and going back to that line in the series where Pam wishes she had just realized sooner that he wasn't right for her.
AND THEN YOU CAME IN WITH THAT LAST PARAGRAPH! Honestly, I am so excited to see this new take on what this looks like. Please don't let them get back together. I'll still read because I was really into this story, but I just love Jam.
Awesome awesome for first time writing drama.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review! I'm glad that I was able to evoke such an emotional response from you, whenever I read my writing myself it comes off flat.
Pam certainly has a bumpy road ahead... She may realize later that she still lives with the oaf.
1 [Report This]Date: April 19, 2020 06:02 pm Title: The Tipping Point
Go Pam! After that classic jerk move from Roy, yeah, good for her to take off the ring and throw it in his face. Wish we would have seen that in canon. Ah well, that's what fanfic is for.
Lots of ways this could go. Is Roy going to try and chase after her? Will Jim see this as his opportunity to escape the friend zone? Will Pam say no to both of them and take some time to figure herself out before getting involved with another guy? Lots of way this could go and I'm excited to see where it leads.
Author's Response: Well, I'm leaning towards a bit of all of the above. Thanks for your feedback!