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Reviewer: Paper Jam Anonymous [Report This]
Date: December 22, 2006 11:51 am Title: Four: Calling Birds

His voice is full of appreciation as he slowly runs his tongue over his lips. "So that's what that was."

That line? Guh.

Smokin' chapter, with the bumping into furniture and whatnot.



Author's Response:

I hope I can keep the smoke up for the continuation.  

Wish me luck. ;)

Reviewer: Paper Jam Anonymous [Report This]
Date: December 22, 2006 11:48 am Title: Five: Golden Rings

I gave in. I'm reading a WIP again. *headdesk* It's a really good one, though. I love this chapter, it feels like an action chase scene. Breathless and exciting.

Author's Response: Oh Paper Jam!  So glad I made you cave!!!  I promise (hope) to make it worth it!!!

Reviewer: 69 cups of noodles Signed 8 [Report This]
Date: December 22, 2006 06:58 am Title: Four: Calling Birds

I really truly believe that Pam would not go any further with Jim until Karen is out of the picture.  This line is really good:  "There's still someone standing between us and I just don’t…"  She shakes her head.  "I don't want to be that girl.  Someone who can't be trusted…someone who could do this when the other person involved has no idea I even exist."  Because obviously faithfulness is something she feels strongly about. 

And I like how you segued that into Jim saying that he feels like he's been cheating all along.  I think that's a very real thing that Jim would have going on in his mind. 

Ok, bring on the hens! 



Author's Response:

I'm glad you said that - because after I wrote that Jim part I second guessed a bit.  I mean he technically wasn't cheating at all.  He told her how he felt - she told him - in effect - no - and so he was perfectly within his rights to date who he wanted.

But I think the point is he didn't really want to.  So I'm glad you thought so too!

Reviewer: agd300 Signed [Report This]
Date: December 22, 2006 06:55 am Title: Four: Calling Birds

GAH.... I love this story!!  Too bad for Karen, but not really!

Author's Response:

Yeah.  I'm trying to feel bad.

But I really don't.  LOL!  Thanks so much for the review!

Reviewer: pennylane83 Signed [Report This]
Date: December 22, 2006 06:19 am Title: Four: Calling Birds

Guhhhlflifdjsdj. That is all.

No wait, as frustrating these two are where you want to be like "JUST DO IT ALREADY!!" I think it is much more realistic that Pam would still be hesitant. The fact of the matter is there's more people involved then just Pam and Jim and I like that Pam gets that. Or I suppose that YOU have Pam get that. I'm just sayin, the payoff better be pretty good for all this cliffhanger nonsense. So no pressure or anything :) (French hens=french kissing??) Just sayin ;)



Author's Response:

HA!  pennylane.  They french kissed here.  You want more?

Oh alright.  Twist my arm! :)

Reviewer: nqllisi Signed [Report This]
Date: December 22, 2006 05:44 am Title: Four: Calling Birds

Mmmm. Yeah, this is good stuff. I love the push me/pull you dynamic here, alternating between kissing and talking, moving and backing up. Very realistic rhythm for these two.

And now I'm going away for Christmas, where I will have no internet connection. I can't wait to get home and finish up! Merry Christmas!



Author's Response: Merry Merry to you too Lis!  Thanks!

Reviewer: Colette Signed [Report This]
Date: December 22, 2006 03:37 am Title: Four: Calling Birds

Nope, does not disappoint. Love me assertive, passionate Jim.  We're not talking right now. And then another Hi from heaven...nice flashback there. He sure knows how to greet a girl.

Speaking of heaven, alert the Vatican, because they need to start considering Pam for sainthood. Can't wait until Jim does the right thing re: what's her name (oh, yeah, Karen) and they can finish what they started. You made it SO vivid that neither can he. (But seriously, what would Angela say about the way you've sullied this traditional Xmas carol...you hussy!)



Author's Response:

Sigh.  I love him too.  And I wanted him to take his time and process everything - but the way she teased him in 5:GR begged for some assertiveness on Jim's part.

Pam is a saint - but because of the conversation she had with Karen - I can't see her being able to do that...no matter how much it might be killing her (and me!) 

Yeah.  I don't think Jesus and his Dad would be real keen on me translating the 4 Gospels to two people making out and talking about putting off premarital sex for a day.

Then again - it's a far from a lame b-day party. ;)

Reviewer: falldownmore Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: December 21, 2006 10:50 pm Title: Four: Calling Birds

sdjgfsjhgfsd. that was so hot. SO HOT. and also so hot.


Author's Response: HA!  Glad to hear it.  Thanks so much!

Reviewer: LoveFool Signed [Report This]
Date: December 21, 2006 10:39 pm Title: Four: Calling Birds

He pulls back and leans his forehead against hers as he whispers.  "Hi."  :::sigh::: shades of Drug Testing. That's all i could hear when I read this. Jim is SO hot when he says "hi" like that. ::sigh:: LOVED this one! Keep it coming!!!! I can't wait to see how you round this all out.



Author's Response: Jim is SO hot when he says hi isn't he?  Who knew 2 letters would make women across the globe melt so. :)  More soon!

Reviewer: LoveFool Signed [Report This]
Date: December 21, 2006 10:26 pm Title: Five: Golden Rings

LOVE how you worked in FIVE GOLDEN RINGS!!! Very, very clever! This story is so great!

Author's Response: Thanks!  I'm glad you liked it!

Reviewer: Lenore Anonymous [Report This]
Date: December 21, 2006 09:25 pm Title: Four: Calling Birds

"So don't bother making any plans tomorrow night."  He whispers huskily pressing a kiss to the side of her neck.

Oh my God.  So hot.

Something I really loved about this chapter was that it was so real - I could definitely see Jim and Pam having to wade through all the muck about Karen and Roy before just falling into bed.  Very nice.  Can't wait for more.



Author's Response:

Hee!  I can definitely see them getting caught up in the moment and not caring until after - but because both Pam and Jim have had conversations with their respectives "others" it seems callous and cold of them to me to just forget about who else would be affected.

So glad you agree!

Reviewer: Semby Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: December 21, 2006 08:39 pm Title: Four: Calling Birds

Mmm, yes. Lovely way to open a chapter. And great way to leave us begging for more, *yet again*, at the end of the chapter!

Author's Response:

Hee!  That opening scene still is giving me goosebumps. 

I don't mean to make you beg...but I can't say I'm not happy that you're anxious to read more!

Thanks so much for taking the time to review Semby.  I appreciate it more than you know. 

 

Reviewer: aggiegurl22 Signed [Report This]
Date: December 21, 2006 08:31 pm Title: Twelve: Drummers Drumming

What a wonderful concept! Every chapter is so brilliant! You have their voices down perfectly! And all the humor and hotness and sweetness and sadness?!? I could go on and on! I'm loving this! Can't wait for the next one!

Author's Response: Aww thanks aggiegurl!  I'm so glad you're enjoying it.  I'm having a blast writing it.  Puts me in a very festive mood!

Reviewer: MrsKamorri Anonymous [Report This]
Date: December 21, 2006 07:26 pm Title: Four: Calling Birds

More. Now. Please.
I am flying 3000 miles tomorrow morning and will be gone for a week but I WILL be checking up on you at least daily.

Author's Response:

Trying.  Promise.  Soon.

Safe travels!!  If things go as planned it should be finished by Monday the latest. 

Reviewer: DinkinFlicka Anonymous [Report This]
Date: December 21, 2006 07:11 pm Title: Four: Calling Birds

This fic is kind of like crack.  What a creative idea!  Keep it coming :)


Author's Response:

I hope you don't wind up in rehab after it's over. :)  Thanks DinkinFlicka!  I'm working on it!

Reviewer: Amalia Kensington Signed [Report This]
Date: December 21, 2006 05:31 pm Title: Four: Calling Birds

oooooooohhh!!!
I'm so giddy about this fic, it's not even funny.
I just..you..this...

I've been reduced to incoherency.
Thanks for that.
cheers.
--Lex

Author's Response:

Incoherency.  My work is done. :)

Thanks Lex!

Reviewer: time4moxie Signed [Report This]
Date: December 21, 2006 05:13 pm Title: Four: Calling Birds

I loved this so much I read it twice before reviewing - you've got them just perfect.  So much love for this!!!!!!  :-)

You totally rock, xoxoxo



Author's Response:

Awww.  Thanks Moxie!  I'm telling you it killed me to put on the breaks.

But good things come to those who wait. :)

Reviewer: DunderSnob Signed [Report This]
Date: December 21, 2006 04:51 pm Title: Four: Calling Birds

your going to finish this before christmas right? I don't think I can wait that long...Finish it tomorrow please!!! I won't be able to read it till Wednesday if you don't...Please..please...please...pleasee..Did I say please?

Author's Response:

I can promise a chapter tomorrow - not sure if I can get the last 3 chapters all done.  I'll see what I can do.

But yes.  It'll be done before Christmas nonetheless.  Thanks DunderSnob!

Reviewer: fireworkfiasco Anonymous 10 [Report This]
Date: December 21, 2006 04:40 pm Title: Four: Calling Birds

OHMIGOD. WHAT ARE YOU ON THAT MAKES YOU SO WONDERFUL? NOT FAIR NOT FAIR NOT FAIR! Kelly? And the answering machine? And the lip gloss? And the making out? And the banter? *huff*

In conclusion, that was very nice. ;)



Author's Response:

I'm simply at the mercy of Greg Daniels & Co.  Nothing more - nothing less. :)

In conclusion, thank you very much! :)

Reviewer: lisahoo Signed [Report This]
Date: December 21, 2006 04:19 pm Title: Four: Calling Birds

Love how you worked the 'Lords a Leaping' back into this.  I had no idea that 'Calling Birds' could be so hot!  And who doesn't love some Crazy!Kelly -- ha!

Love this deliciously angsty line: "I don't want to have to watch you leave."  What is that line, "hate to see you go, but love to watch you leave?"



Author's Response:

Thanks lisahoo!  Ahh yes.  Crazy!Kelly. 

You've got the line right - I actually cracked up tonight because there was a similar line on Scrubs!  Too funny!

Reviewer: Morning Angel Signed [Report This]
Date: December 21, 2006 04:05 pm Title: Four: Calling Birds

Mmmm, tasty sexy Jam.  Clever to have Kelly be the calling bird.  You are awesome.

Author's Response:

Hee!  Like Pam - I really didn't want it to stop but I think it'll be better for them to start out with a clean slate. 

RE: Calling Birds - It was honestly the only thing I could think of. 

Oh.  I might have to ask you to help me out with the French Hens.  ;)

Reviewer: rebecca Anonymous [Report This]
Date: December 21, 2006 01:24 pm Title: Five: Golden Rings

gar!! please write the next installment soon, i really want to know what happens next. please!!

Author's Response: LOL!  I really don't mean to torture!  Next chapter is up...is up!!

Reviewer: Ami17han Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: December 21, 2006 12:32 pm Title: Five: Golden Rings

ARRRGGGGGHHHHH. Cliffhanger!! This continues to be amazing. Calling 4 calling birds. Waiting......

Author's Response: I didn't leave you hanging for long!!!  Thanks Ami!

Reviewer: nqllisi Signed [Report This]
Date: December 21, 2006 05:13 am Title: Five: Golden Rings

Yep, evil.

You create and sustain the tension here beautifully. Poor Jim. How she tortures him!



Author's Response:

Thanks Lis!  That's Fancy New Beesly for ya! :)

Reviewer: Lindsay Anonymous [Report This]
Date: December 20, 2006 08:47 pm Title: Five: Golden Rings

oh no you did not just leave us right there...

 must. have. more. STAT.



Author's Response:

Yeah.  I kinda did. ;)

please. be. patient.  :)

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