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Reviewer: Alex Wert Signed [Report This]
Date: February 23, 2007 07:18 pm Title: Chapter 1

Great stuff.  Michael/Jan is truly the only pairing that I actually care about in that "they must be together or I'll die" sort of way, so I'm glad you've chosen to enter the fray.

Reviewer: Nestani Anonymous [Report This]
Date: January 03, 2007 04:33 pm Title: Chapter 1

This is the first and only Michael/Jan that I've read, but wow, it's spot-on. Nice work!

Reviewer: 69 cups of noodles Signed [Report This]
Date: January 01, 2007 05:58 pm Title: Chapter 1

Wow.  This is very telling of Jan.  She's just as lonely as Michael is, and afraid of being old and having nothing important, the way Michael is as well.  I love this view of what's going on inside her head. 

Reviewer: xoxoxo Signed [Report This]
Date: January 01, 2007 05:09 pm Title: Chapter 1

Jan and Michael are my favoritest - after Jim and Pam that is. 

I love that in the end she simply can't help herself and I'm all sorts of anxious to see this play out on Thursday (at least in some fashion!)

Yay for you!  Write more!!



Author's Response: Um, yay for you!  You've written some of the most impressive pieces I've read.  And thanks ;o) I'm already working on the next one... work?  What's that?

Reviewer: kaystar Signed [Report This]
Date: January 01, 2007 04:51 pm Title: Chapter 1

Really enjoyed this - especially this line - "There is also no question about the fact that she (Jan Levinson, oldest, most successful child in her family, graduate of some really excellent schools, well-respected corporate executive) is in the process of failing at life."  Congrats on your first fic, can't wait to read more from you.

Reviewer: nqllisi Signed [Report This]
Date: January 01, 2007 04:30 pm Title: Chapter 1

Worst of all, the pieces seem to fall away faster when Michael’s around.

This is a great line in a story full of great lines. Seriously, this is one of the best Jan-centric pieces I've read. You convey her facade and her fragility beautifully. Welcome to the cult of fanfic!



Author's Response: thanks, nqllisi.  I think one of the things I love most about Jan is just *how* much Michael rattles her.

Reviewer: Chicgeek Anonymous [Report This]
Date: January 01, 2007 03:43 pm Title: Chapter 1

Wow, I don't usually read Micheal/Jan but this was very good. Fits in perfectly with her character!

Author's Response:

Thanks!  I'm glad it came across as in character.

Jim/Pam is really my first love... but something about Michael/Jan can be really compelling, too, I think.

Reviewer: lisahoo Signed [Report This]
Date: January 01, 2007 12:34 pm Title: Chapter 1

Those freaking diamond commercials!  HA!  I can't wait for the new episode on Jan 4th!  This just makes it more so!

Author's Response:

I admit, that line came straight from my life.  If I hear one more reference to "the journey diamond necklace that symbolizes our journey together..."

The 4th canNOT come soon enough. 

Reviewer: ElizabethLynn Signed [Report This]
Date: January 01, 2007 11:33 am Title: Chapter 1

Oh, Jan.  I loooove her so much, and you're captured her brittle/competent mix so well.  And how can she say no to Michael, what with those two sad little presents under her tree?  Nice touch.

Author's Response: Thank you!  When I first started watching the show I definitely liked other characters better... but the more I watch (and re-watch) and think about who she is and where she is coming from... I, too, love Jan.

Reviewer: girl7 Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: January 01, 2007 11:33 am Title: Chapter 1

Oh my god, monkeybear - WOW.  This was spot-on and gut-wrenching and actually really...uplifting at the end.  You have definitely filled in any blanks between Michael and Jan here, offering up a completely plausible backstory/scenario wherein she'd accept his invitation.  So many great lines, as well:

"It scares her sometimes, how it seems as if pieces of her are beginning to crack and fall away from her body." This whole paragraph was gorgeous and so inisghtful.

And this: "...is in the process of failing at life."  Wow.  Sucker punch, that, but I could see her believing that, given what we know about her regrets WRT her marriage and her desire for kids. 

And this: "The floor tilts a little (but surely that’s just the vodka) as she glances at the phone and snaps it open"

I choose to believe that you're implying here that she's got some inherent weakness where Michael's concerned, and that's why the floor's tilting....because I think she really does have a thing for him, despite her best efforts at rationalizing it away. 

This is simply amazing - can't believe it's your first fic!  I'm looking forward to more of your stuff!

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