Date: January 14, 2007 10:50 pm Title: The Second Fight
I like the soda tab flicking back and forth; it's playful and distracts from the underlying tension of the scene. Great visual.
Date: January 11, 2007 09:12 pm Title: The Second Fight
Loved the little detail about sliding the soda tap across the table! Off to read the next chapter...
10 [Report This]Date: January 11, 2007 12:39 pm Title: The Second Fight
Awesome!
Date: January 11, 2007 10:05 am Title: The Second Fight
"don't do it just to make her happy. Because she'll know...that you're not" That's RIGHT! Karen will see (eventually) that Jim's heart just isn't in it. Because it belongs to Pam and only Pam. Now, if she would just do something about it!!!
Love the detail about the soda can tab ;o) Grape soda forever!
Date: January 11, 2007 09:25 am Title: The Second Fight
To make poor Shakespeare roll in his grave - these two love each other so unwisely but so well. Lovely beginning.
10 [Report This]Date: January 11, 2007 02:31 am Title: The Second Fight
He sounds angry and says "Valentine's Day" like the way people say fuck or shit. - I have so much love for this line. Great story, you gave us just enough without going overboard.
Date: January 10, 2007 10:36 pm Title: The Second Fight
I really like this, and I really really adore the very end. Awwww. :)
9 [Report This]Date: January 10, 2007 10:13 pm Title: The Second Fight
i like. and i can't tell if i'm more sad or happy.. but i like!