Date: April 23, 2007 10:54 pm Title: it felt just like love except no fear of losing and it wasn't tough
Wonderful. And I got a little laugh out of your ending line, because judging from the rest of the piece, you wouldn't think "big sombreros" would go with it, but it really fits right in. I don't know how you did that, but great job. :)
Date: January 27, 2007 03:54 am Title: it felt just like love except no fear of losing and it wasn't tough
This is so beautiful. It's like a tiny pebble that has been rubbed smooth and sparkling by the stream- nothing left but what is pure and whole.
Date: January 22, 2007 10:45 pm Title: it felt just like love except no fear of losing and it wasn't tough
Ahhhhhhhhh. [/satisfied smile]
10 [Report This]Date: January 22, 2007 02:45 pm Title: it felt just like love except no fear of losing and it wasn't tough
That was just beautiful, until the last line that was so funny that it kinda reminded me that that's probably what it will be like for them the first time.
10 [Report This]Date: January 22, 2007 05:56 am Title: it felt just like love except no fear of losing and it wasn't tough
I love it. The tone is perfect.
Date: January 22, 2007 05:00 am Title: it felt just like love except no fear of losing and it wasn't tough
SIGH. This is just lovely. So much said so simply. It's a true gift to do that. Thank you for sharing it.
Date: January 21, 2007 09:57 pm Title: it felt just like love except no fear of losing and it wasn't tough
Seriously, way to go sombreros! This was a nice short and sweet treat!
Date: January 21, 2007 08:13 pm Title: it felt just like love except no fear of losing and it wasn't tough
All I can say is, "Wow!" Thank you so much for that beautiful piece of writing. *Sigh*
10 [Report This]Date: January 21, 2007 08:02 pm Title: it felt just like love except no fear of losing and it wasn't tough
unfold, i love you. ^_^
Date: January 21, 2007 08:00 pm Title: it felt just like love except no fear of losing and it wasn't tough
Whew. Short 'n' hot. Loved it!
Date: January 21, 2007 07:58 pm Title: it felt just like love except no fear of losing and it wasn't tough
"you have no idea" has become the sexiest phrase ever! PLEASE, feel free to indulge your weird moods if this is the result.
Date: January 21, 2007 07:55 pm Title: it felt just like love except no fear of losing and it wasn't tough
Uhhhh beautiful. And I LOVE that song. Your writing has such a flow to it that always makes my insides twist. :)
Date: January 21, 2007 07:50 pm Title: it felt just like love except no fear of losing and it wasn't tough
Making something this elegantly written so hot and emotional is quite a feat. He says her name against her skin, like some sort of plea for her to really let this happen...Jim's intense longing for her right there in one sentence. Perfect last line too. Just stunning.
9 [Report This]Date: January 21, 2007 07:50 pm Title: it felt just like love except no fear of losing and it wasn't tough
Love the moment you create in your first paragraph, particularly the light and the snow. Very insular.
Date: January 21, 2007 07:49 pm Title: it felt just like love except no fear of losing and it wasn't tough
Oh, you and your words! Stop being so amazing.
I love how much you convery with so little; He says her name against her skin, like some sort of plea for her to really let this happen. And all I can say to that is !!!!!
10 [Report This]Date: January 21, 2007 07:46 pm Title: it felt just like love except no fear of losing and it wasn't tough
I love everything about this, especially what Pam says to Jim. It's just amazing how the only spoken line in the entire story just says everything. It gave me chills.
Date: January 21, 2007 07:44 pm Title: it felt just like love except no fear of losing and it wasn't tough
Wow -- The first paragraph made my heart flip three times. So simple, but intense and real. Well done!
Date: January 21, 2007 07:42 pm Title: it felt just like love except no fear of losing and it wasn't tough
You said the mood so well. I am so impressed how much you can convey with so few words. I love the mirroring of what Jim said to her in GWH with “You have no idea how long I’ve been waiting for you to lean over my desk again.”
10 [Report This]Date: January 21, 2007 07:32 pm Title: it felt just like love except no fear of losing and it wasn't tough
this is gorgeous. the colors in the first line are just perfect, and set such a soft, wistful tone. bravo!