Reviewer: Colette Signed
Date: October 19, 2008
Title: Chapter 4: This is Water
You have irrevocably broken my brain. I don't know where to begin, because there's just so MUCH here. From the commentary on the shifting 1st/2nd person voice (1), to the precise, but simple language, to what a sensitive and freaking interesting character study this is...and it's romantic as hell to boot.
AU rarely convinces me like this - this story feels like a place - a literal and emotional place. And it's seamless and complete (and by complete I don't mean length, I mean that intangible sense of truth and fullness that make it alive.) I could quote a dozen great lines from this chapter alone, but that's almost besides the point. I love how you've threaded the poems through - they feel integral, not mannered, and that's hard to pull off.
Now, you know I need to comment on that unspeakably sexy, funny, touching section that begins, so aptly: Saturday morning on 30 minutes of sleep.Woa. And this may be the hottest line ever written: She takes off my glasses and I get an erection. Not just for the literal ref, but also for the notion of anticipation and letting go and the implication of trust in not seeing clearly. And if this doesn't beautifully and succinctly nail new, unexpected love, I don't know what does: ...and I want nothing more than to lean into her and close my eyes.
Okay, this review is totally rambling stream of ubnoxiousness. What more can I tell you? What a perfect last line. I can't possibly top that, so I'll just stop. Right here.
(1) Did you ever read A Book of Common Prayer by Joan Didion? Major novel for me, and (though I know you had DFW on your mind) there are elements here that remind me of it. She begins by explaining her limitations/idiosyncrasies as the story's narrator (basically telling you neither omniscense nor objectivity interst her) and she ends with perhaps my favorite ending ever of a novel: "I have not been the witness I wanted to be." Anyway, that comparison is a big compliment. Seriously.
Author's Response: I don't know if I can even respond to this! First, it's YOU. DUH. Second, YOU PUT A FREAKING FOOTNOTE IN THIS REVIEW!!!! Best. Thing. Ever! I'm so grateful.
I know what a huge influence Didion has been for you and that is just the ultimate compliment to me. I've only read The year of Magical Thinking - which I admit now to borrowing two words from in Chapter 1. I was so mesmerized by the concept that I think we all do - that if we just engage in the right kinds of thoughts or rituals, we can make magic and bring someone back from the dead - but I'd never heard/read it given a name. I could never be as concise as she is (or you are) but I aspire to that level of precise word choice. Just beautiful.
Thank you so much for thinking the poems flow and don't stick out like a 7th grade book report! I was so worried about that.
And thank you for the detail and quotes! Gosh, I'm so chuffed you liked the glass/erection line! I was so happy with that! I tinkered with the kitchen scene quite a bit (why do I always have them ending up getting naked in the kitchen? What is that?) so I'm pleased you liked that bit. And yes...30 minutes of sleep. The mind reels.
I should hope to write a last line as perfect as the last line of Didion's you quoted. God, that is perfection. She and DFW both give me so many things to marvel at in sheer awe.
Thank you so much, my friend. Means the world to me.