Reviewer: NeverEnoughJam Signed
Date: August 25, 2007
Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13: Here It Comes Now, Sure As Silence Follows Rain
While I enjoyed this story, I have to say that the ending surprised me a little. Maybe I've got this all wrong, but it sounds as if Pam is having sex with Jim in order to get back at Roy. That's pretty low, even if Roy has hurt her. It's cruel beyond words to Jim. Even when she thinks
Even in her haze, she knows the logic is dangerously, recklessly flawed -- that what she's feeling right now has nothing to do with Roy and everything to do with Jim.
That says she knows what she's doing--and still does it. So she knows she is going to hurt Jim, hurt Roy, hurt herself, and she goes right on ahead? Very self-destructive. Hard to believe that's Pam. She's too kind to do this.
"I just want to...once."
That sounds pretty rough on Jim, whose about to get his heart's desire only to have it snatched away again after she's gotten her revenge.
Am I totally reading this wrong? I hope so. I loved all the rest of this story. I loved the line
Sometimes the sheer promise of all that could be burns so brightly it's painful.
And Jim's story about the dog curing Jon of his blindness was funny.
I know it doesn't always have to end happily for Pam and Jim. I know fluff isn't necessarily where you were headed here. Maybe I've misunderstood all of this? Sorry if I'm rambling.
Author's Response: First of all: Thanks so much for taking the time to write such a detailed, thoughtful review; I really appreciate it. Second, much of what you mentioned in your review is exactly what I struggled with while writing this. The original ending/concept that I had in mind was very different from this (it's the ending that appears in chapter ten), but there were a lot of reviews expressing a desire to see an AU version; I thought it'd be an interesting challenge to write one, so here we are.
That said, what I'm actually trying to convey here (and am apparently not doing so well with it) is that Pam's not, actually, doing this as a means to get back at Roy; I've tried to emphasize that what she's most upset about is not the fact that Roy slept with someone else, but that it has cast their lives into uncertainty (and this means she might have to confront just what it is she feels for Jim).
More than that, though, she showed up at Jim's because it's what she's wanted to do all week (longer than that), and Roy's confession is the catalyst for her doing that. In other words, she'd almost like to believe that what she's doing with Jim is just revenge sex that'll mean nothing, but she knows deep down that it has absolutely nothing to do with Roy -- that this is something that she's been building toward since the weekend before when things got out of hand. And she knows full well that it's not just physical attraction, on either of their parts.
As far as Jim is concerned, I think he'd be aware on some level that this likely won't end well -- or rather, that it won't change things between them (at least not in a positive way), but he's still hopeful. And he's also a man, of course -- and isn't going to turn down an opportunity to be with the woman of his dreams, even if it's only for one night.
Now, it's still a pretty horrible and reckless thing for Pam to do (not to mention simply stupid, given that she has no real intention of leaving Roy). It's why I had such a hard time writing this and figuring out a way to make it plausible; this was the best scenario I could come up with.
But as for your statement that Pam's too kind to do this -- I absolutely agree, totally. It's why this is the AU version and not the "real" one.
Thanks again for the review!