Reviewer: darjeelingandcoke Signed
Date: June 25, 2022
Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26 - Boys and Girls
Okay, definitely accidentally refreshed halfway through, let's see how much of that review I can recreate.
The way Pam felt safer when she was unable to change things and desperately trying not to than now, when she's experiencing new things, is a *really* good use of genre to explore characterization.
This description of trying to hang onto dreams is Spot. On,
I'm just starting to get that Pam Prime has effectively time traveled into the future. Fun!
PAM'S POKER FACE. I love her being able to see what we all see again, and the call-forward is clever.
THE CHIPMUNK STORY!
Holy CRAP BREAKTHROUGH MOMENT FOR OUR PAM. MULTIPLE BREAKTHROUGH MOMENTS IN FACT.
I continue to really enjoy how you're giving Pam a chance to analyze her behavior the same way we all did, and let her reach the same conclusions.
Author's Response:
I hate when that happens - and it has happened more than once to me.
Thanks first for all the typo pickups - I knew there were a lot and I do appreciate you catching them and so fast too.
So that dream thing - I'm glad it came across, and don't you hate that. You know you had a dream - a good one - and you have no idea what it was and even if you could remember - either way - poof its gone and with it that amazing feeling you were in. I worried that part would not translate well. Works with nightmares too, that heart racing panic you have no idea why you wake up having, but that description is for another story (and I already know which one).
Not quite, but all the things she's doing in her travel to the past are having their effect on what the other her is experiencing in her present and effectively that's getting her to the future maybe a bit "ahead of schedule"?!?!?
You know how I like to meld my stories together and even bring in parts of other's too (always hoping it's viewed as intended as a tribute and not otherwise)
Thank you again for the editor's eye, and the review. It means the world.