Yeah, she's going to need some steel in her spine. Fortunately for her she's got an anchor in Jim and it seems to be working out well. One thing I did notice here was that Roy didn't come up and tickle an apology out of Pam at Jim's desk like we saw in canon. I could see him trying something like that when she and Roy get back to the apartment which gives Pam the fire to get it through his head that she's done. Or if you have another way, I'm sure that'll work too.

Nice job getting into her head as well as characterizing the craziness that is the DM Scranton office.

Author's Response:

I do have some fire on tap for Pam, in the form of a plot hole that I created inadvertently that may come back to bite Roy in the butt.

My thinking is that Roy was hoping to leave Pam alone long enough for her to "realize what and overreaction" she was having, and as such avoided her for the rest of the day.

Thanks for taking the time to give feedback, I hope to see you next time!

Seems like a bit of a filler chapter. Needed info to get out of the way so that's good. Nice to see Jim and Pam still getting on good. Also good to see Jim getting on well with Will. Nice job.

Author's Response:

Yeah it was a bit of a filler. I'm trying to move things forward, I don't want to get stuck in the same week for the rest of the story. I'm glad you liked the meeting with Will.

Thanks for reviewing, I really appreciate the time you take to provide feedback on every chapter. See you next time! 

Not bad with the multiple POV's. They were different enough to know who was thinking what so that's good.

Loved Pam's excitedness and her little trick in parking in Dwight's spot. Just a little bit of mayhem to keep things fun. Roy is still the clueless kind of oaf here. Thinking they're still together like that. Kinda feel bad for him, but on second thought, no I don't. Saying you'll try to do better rather than saying I will do better shows that even now he's just not committed to the relationship and Pam's right to dump him.

Looking forward to seeing how Jim interacts with everything.

Author's Response:

Thanks, I tried to lead off every paragraph with a clear shift if that's what was happening and I'm glad it worked out.

I'm glad you enjoyed Pam's brand of pranking. Roy is committed to the idea of Pam: A live in maid - not Pam herself. I'm sure he'll find someone who wants to fill that mold eventually. 

Thanks for your review! 

Outline? What's an outline? Kidding of course. A quick mention on the technical side of things. There are a few times you switch between past and present tense. Not a lot but it's noticeable. Something to watch out for in the proofreading phase.

Story wise, this is all sorts of cute. Not that I ever doubted that Pam and Nikita wouldn't hit it off or anything.

The Jim and Pam interactions are great as well. Loved the trick Jim played there with the cooler. I remember back when my wife and I were first dating "accidentally" leaving something at her apartment. Years later when I came clean that I left that thing there for the purpose of being invited back, her face was a joy to behold.

Nice job.

Author's Response:

As far as tense shifting goes, I will admit that I'm pretty rusty on writing conventions. If you have the time and the inclination, I'd really appreciate you pointing out some specific examples so that I know what to look out for in the future. You can reach me via discord or the site's email function if you feel like it.

I'm glad you liked the cooler trick, this is exactly what I was going for.

Thanks for the feedback! 

A bit of a filler chapter. Jim and Pam here are still squarly in friendship zone. Still it's nice to see them out and about. Is what Pam said somewhat hurtful? Yes, but it's also honest. Sometime honesty hurts. She could have been more tactful sure, but having something like that is a good way of showing she's a real person who sometimes acts somewhat rudely.

How to get rid of Roy? Hmmm, Angry or Drunk Roy isn't the guy to talk to. He's the kind of guy who punches first and doesn't ask questions later. Sober Roy might be a better guy for Pam to talk to. I could see this Roy storming up to the office again. Or coming up to the office so often it starts to affect his work in the warehouse or gets to the point of workplace harrasment. Both of which could become fireable offenses. Then after Roy's not only lost Pam but his job, does he realize what he's done, sobers up, and finally leaves Pam alone. A suggestion is all.

Author's Response:

Hopefully we'll see some movement on the anti-friendzone front soon, I just have to figure out how I want it to flow. 

I'll take the ideas under advisement, and we'll see what fits, thanks for reviewing! 

That feels more like early Pam. Getting embarrassed for an outburst and fairly quick to apologize. Looks like the Roy situation is dealt with. Might be some lingering frustration, but it's fading which is good to see.

Bring your dog to work day seems like a lot of fun.

Don't get to down on yourself Pam. Granted she's still got Jim squarely pegged in the friendzone right now, but I sense that might start to change soon. Looking forward to it when that happens.

Author's Response:

Great, I'm glad you think that this is more in-line for season 1/2 Pam, I was looking to scale it back a little after you pointed that out last time. 

Roy should indeed be riding off into the sunset, that's the hope anyway.

I am really looking forward to writing the pet day chapter tomorrow, it should be a lot of fun.

Pam'll get there eventually, we just have to believe in her!

Thanks for reviewing, I always look forward to hearing from you! 

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Ah Princess Bride, what a great movie.

Lots of really good introspection with everything here. Nice to see Pam's thoughts really starting to go to more than friendship. Kind of a confusing time for her to be sure.

Same goes for Jim. I'm thinking he's going to need some kind of big Jim moment here. Considering this is well before when he gives her the teapot there's plenty of room for something like that.

Nicely done with this chapter. I think you wrote it well.

Author's Response:

I'm really glad you liked the introspection, that's the most I've done of that ever and it took a couple revisions.

Thanks for your continued encouragement and reviews!

P.S. The Princess Bride was my childhood at the grandparents, so yeah, totally agreed.

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Now you've done it. You've really entered the fold of MTT writers by leaving a nasty cliffhanger like that. I mean it's a good place to leave it, but still. Just kidding, since of course I've left my fair share of evil cliffhangers so all's good.

Lots of fun here. Nice touch having the warehouse crew leave like that. Of course it happened in canon, but rather than a bit of disappointment, we get just instant relief. Drunk Pam was adorable as she usually is. Can't wait to see how this all pans out.

Author's Response:

Had, I couldn't not when I was writing it, I kept going for a little but then moved the extra to next chapter figuring this would be a good fit. Glad you can empathize.

I'm glad you liked the chapter, I wanted the warehouse crew to be there long enough to bring the mood down, but then I banished them because, really, nobody likes those guys. Except Darryl, but he's just too cool for the warehouse anyway. Drunk Pam was and is a joy to write, so hopefully we'll see where this goes in a bit.

Thanks for reviewing! 

Nice way to wrap it all up. Loved that Pam finally figured out the movie reference. It's a classic movie and a classic line. They're both very sweet and cute here.

You displayed a lot of growth in both of their characters as this story progressed. Nicely done in that regard. It's been a lot of fun to watch this story grow and develop.

Fortes Fortuna Adiuvat

Author's Response:

I'm really happy to hear you liked the wrap-up, it was a lot of fun to write!

I'm especially pleased to hear that you liked how their growth was portrayed throughout the story, this is the longest I've ever written so I'm glad to hear you thought it had a nice linearity!

Thanks for being there and reviewing every chapter, I really appreciated your input! 

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Big city Jim and Pam AU here. Still has all the same feelings of canon. The wistful glances, Jim pining after her from afar, their solid friendship. Lots of really good internal thoughts too. Looking forward to seeing where you go with this.

Author's Response: Thank you! I hope the idea I try to write down will be interesting. 

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That felt very heavy. Interesting to see them square off like that. I do have to wonder if Jim's bluster has more of an effect than he knows.

Jim's introspection is key here I think. Even before he got drunk, I think it's telling that he is realizing that all the distraction wasn't doing anything to get her away from Roy. It was just covering up things to make the bad relationship easier to forget. I wonder how he might now react after this epiphany.

A heavy but a good chapter to be sure.

Author's Response: Thank you for your great review, Warrior! This chapter was hard to write, but I hope it was worth it. I'll try to keep the story on the same level! 

Good chapter to get us moving. Yeah it's a hard time for them. But at least Roy's out of the picture now. Kinda figure it's going to take Pam some time to get her feet under her. Hopefully things start shifting for the better sometime soon.

Jim's ache as he's still just the friend felt very real here. He really wants to be more. You really get the fact that following his sister's advice is wearing on him.

Author's Response:

Thank you for your review, warrior! I'm glad that this chapter worked for you because I'm not feeling good about writing the heavy stuff (but it has to be written nevertheless). 

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Just to let you know this will be the 1000th review I've left here on MTT since I joined the site. Kind of a cool milestone and I figured I'd let you know.

So a decent amount of things going on here. Jim and Pam are continuing to progress in their relationship. Pam's still stressed out, but she seems to be holding up better too. Seems having an outlet for her art as well as girl time with her roommates.

I like this moment Jim is creating with Pam. It feels very much like how he would create moments with her in the early seasons of the show. However here there's no Roy in the way so that's a nice thing to think about.

Great banter between the two of them. Lots of fun. It also opened the door for a more meaningful conversation so that was nice to see too.

Lovely chapter.

Author's Response:

Thank you, Warrior! And congratulations on your achievement! 

Hope you'll enjoy the continuation as well.