I've been writing fanfiction for awhile now. Just recently discovered The Office and figured I'd try my hand at that as well.
At first I thought of having all my stories in the same universe, but then I had some AU ideas. So any stories that occur within a common universe will be in a given series.
The crew that is going to film them around the office has arrived and Jim realizes things are going to change... and he has to do something about it.
Season 1, episode 1
1 If only. Still it was very cute. I did like how Jim put everything here. To give him a chance and then she can decide. I've got a feeling that he made the most of his chance, at least that's the way I'm picturing it in my head. Nice job.
Author's Response: Thanks very much!
I think Jim grew impatient during season 2, which is what makes him just say it all and run. He was much more cautions earlier in the show. Then again, she was going to marry and he was desperate
1 A very cute story here. Rather than go through all the heartache of Season 3 we just fast forward right to the good parts. I liked it. I'm kind of a sucker for Pam-finds-her-courage-early stories and even though this one is quick, it's very nice. The kiss on the end was just the right way to finish this one off. Great job for your first fic here.
Author's Response:
Thank you! I too am a sucker for any Pam-finding-courage stories. For all the angst of Season 3, I just love her growth. I feel like she’s such a better/stronger version of herself from it all.
High School Pam meets High School Jim and that becomes an opportunity for learning a few things.
Usual disclaimers: Don't own anything you recognise and, of course, not profit is being made.
Well that's an interesting way to start things out. Not really surprising that Pam would have other things on her mind in this situation. You've got me very curious to see where this one is heading.
Author's Response: Thanks very much, w4! There is going to be a slight nod to your epic story in the mext chapter ;)
1 Great way for Jim and Pam to meet. Kind of fun that it was a quick meeting like this but they still had a great connection right away. Lots of great detail and good internal thoughts too.
Author's Response:
Thanks a lot! The idea is that everything happens fast, and has to be intense like that.
Chapter 3 is almost ready.
1 Great way to slowly build from fluff to steam here. Don't really know what else to say other than well done.
Author's Response: Thanks a lot, w4!
1 A cute chapter with a bittersweet ending here. I did like it as the whole Jim and Pam dynamic came across well even with all the added tension. I do wonder if Pam is going to screw up enough courage to ask him why he didn't call way back when.
Nice job
Author's Response:
Thanks very much! It took me a while to decide how much tension was ok for this, so that they will still feel like Jim and Pam.
I wonder the same thing
Interesting take on Pam's reaction. Clearly Jim is still forefront in her mind. That she wants to get things done quickly with Roy to move onto better things with the thought of Jim seems to be telling as to her state of mind. Still wondering why he didn't call though.
Author's Response:
Thanks a lot!
I was going to explain that in the next chapter (this one), but this idea came out of the blue and I decided to go for it.
1 The mystery is finally revealed! Jim's brothers being jerks back in high school, Jim trying to find Pam after meeting her one time...sounds familiar. Maybe I'll write a story about that. ;) In all seriousness, that was a great way to put you own twist on that kind of theme.
I do like how honest Jim and Pam are being here with each other. It's very refreshing than the normal "don't talk about it tension." Then how their conversation ended. Nicely done.
1 Thanks for the Birthday wishes Kuri.
Great chapter here. I liked that scene there where Jim said he didn't want to be her rebound before they got into anything really heavy. Good way to make sure they're on the same page. I'm really glad they're being honest with each other like this too.
Very steamy and detailed after that scene. Lots of vivid images that make it clear how right they are for each other. Well done.
Author's Response: Thanks very much! It still feels weird to venture into MA territories... but it's also fun. ;)
Okay so first off let's go with the technical side of things. Is there any way you could re-post this with a bigger font size? It's kind of small on a normal laptop screen and thus kind of hard to read. If you're worried about spelling errors I would suggest slowing down when you post. I know it's exciting to get something up. When I finish a chapter of a story I'm writing, I usually take 12-24 hours off. Don't look at it or post it. Then go back and re-read it to try and catch spelling and grammar issues. Then I'll post. I might not get them all, but I'll get a lot more than if I post right after I get done writing.
There were really only two inconsistencies I saw here. First is that Jim knew Pam hadn't gotten married well before the merger. Second, Jim and Karen didn't officially start dating till right around the time of the merger. Here it's as if Jim and Karen have been a couple for a while. However this is also AU so we could chalk that second one up to that.
Other than that, I do like how Pam is reaching out here. Good on her for doing that. Onto the next chapter.
Author's Response: Oh my gosh. I am so sorry about the font! I haven't posted to this site before, just found it actually, and I absolutely love it. I type on a Mac and the font looked okay on there and I thought that it would kind of change the font to how everyone's is on here. Total rookie mistake, my bad. I haven't written in like gosh I don't know like six-seven years. I'm just glad you liked something about it. I know I should have read through it and I will do that for my third chapter, I just had this idea and I wanted to get it out right away. And I totally hear what you're saying about the plot and I was reallyyy worried I was going to mess something up like that...
Again PLEASE make this a bigger font size. It's very hard to read. I won't repeat what I wrote in my last review about not rushing to post, but it still applies.
Good on Jim to break things off with Karen early like this. Sets things up nicely for his return. Also good to see Jim and Pam together again. Looking forward to seeing how the catch up with each other.
1 On minor technical issue here. The following line. "Jim laughed. Pam leaned in. “Just like old times, huh?” Karen smiled from down the table. Jim looked down at her. He moved his arm from his lap and laid it across her shoulders. She looked up at him." Since Karen is the last named person, when I read the rest of that line it made me think the pronouns following Karen were about her. Thus Jim was putting his arm around Karen and Karen was also looking back up at Jim. I know I'm being kinda sticky about grammar here, but it did honestly confuse me for a second and I had to go back and re-read things to make sure it was Pam that Jim had his arm around. An easy fix would be to either not have the line about Karen smiling at Jim or put it after when Jim has his arm around Pam.
Story wise it was fun to see everyone bouncing off each other like that. Jim and Pam are back together and they're very cute too. Her coming out in his old clothes was fun to visualize as well. Welcome back to writing. Thanks for sharing this one.
1 Wow, that went through a ton of emotional beats all in a very short time. Great writing to pull it all off. I do like how you have Jim so secure in his feelings for Pam though. Even through his shock, he still knows what his feelings are for Pam and then he's there to support her. Well done on that regard. I can very easily see Pam hiding the miscarriage. Especially considering where she was at in her life at the time. The line you had there about how now they have a stronger bond is great when Pam shares it all with him.
A little bit of a hard story to read considering the subject matter, but you pulled it off well.
Author's Response: Thank you! I personally believe that Jim and Pam’s relationship tends to show its self best in difficult situations. Like the fluff and joking is adorable but them dealing with real hardships tends to showcase their love in the best light. Really shows the depth of how much they love each other.
1 Font size is fine this time around. I like how it was Phyllis who is the one who gets through to Angela. That Angela is being the opposite of everything she says she stands for and inso doing causing more harm to everyone. Makes complete sense that Andy would fly off the handle a little there. Good job.
Author's Response: Thank you! I appreciate it :)
No you're right about the order of the Jello pranks. I was referring to the second prank in my review. After that bit where Michael made Pam cry, I figured Jim put Michael's mug in Jello in retaliation for that. However the way you took it with him buying the phone and telling him off was fun too.
Author's Response: Ohhh gotcha. Well thank you sorry I got confused :)
Nice way to wrap it all up. Mostly following the plot, but your own AU twists along the way. Well done.
Fortes Fortuna Adiuvat
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it :)
Short but sweet. Nice little scene to envision.
Very cute scene here. If we're not going to get the proposal in the rain at the gas station, then having the proposal at the office is also fitting.
Good for Jim for not backing down on a hard topic. It's fun to be silly and goofy, but there are times to have honest adult conversations and hit seems like Jim's learned that lesson.
D'awww, Jim's meeting the parents. Good times.
Good little chapter there. I do enjoy that there's more detail in this one than some previous chapters. Jim staring down Andy like that was a fun scene to picture.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I wasn't sure how fast these would post but I'm glad you liked them. I was agonizing over Casino Night so it may have been a bit rushed, I agree. I was trying to force more plot but I think these slice of life short chapters fits what I was trying to do much better. Thank you for all the reviews :)
Good job Jim being the supportive boyfriend here. Nice to see that.
Kind of fast here. After so much detail in the earlier chapters this seemed really rushed. It's cute and nice and all, but just felt rushed in comparison to earlier chapters.
1 That's a different take on Roy than I think is usually done. He's a lot more understanding here. He's aware that he proposed for the wrong reasons but didn't have the courage to really face that. He's very much just wanting things to stay the same. Good on Pam for confronting him like that though. It's a little of an abrupt turn to have Roy plop down in front of the game and then to get kind of introspective like this, but, yeah I'll say it works.
Good way to break things up with what happened with Jim back at his place. Cuts through the tension nicely while still creating the feeling that I want to get back to Pam and see what's going on with her.
Looking forward to Jim's reaction at this news.
Author's Response: Thank you :)
1 Chapters 5-8? Wow! Good job on getting ahead like that. Anyway this was delightful. A lot of fun to see Jim and Pam just happy and easy like this with each other. I liked it a lot.
Author's Response: Thank you!