Penname: warrior4 Real name: Eric
Member Since: May 31, 2018

Bio:

Author of the Month March 2020

I've been writing fanfiction for awhile now. Just recently discovered The Office and figured I'd try my hand at that as well.

At first I thought of having all my stories in the same universe, but then I had some AU ideas. So any stories that occur within a common universe will be in a given series.


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Hey Mr. Pinstripe Suit by miserycrush, BecauseOfYou Rated: MA [Reviews - 9] 8
Summary:

The year is 1929. Pamela Beesly was doing alright despite everything going on in America. She was engaged to a miner, Roy Anderson, who swept her off her feet and took her to a new kind of life back in Chicago. After the stock market crashed she began to seek employment in order to stay afloat. Thanks to a sexy local club singer, in a pinstripe suit, named Jimmy Halpert and his in with the owner of the Green Door Tavern Pam was working nights as a waitress at the town's most popular speakeasy. Not to mention she was now employed by the largest Mob Boss in America. Michael Scarn.



Categories: Jim and Pam, Alternate Universe
Characters: Jim/Pam
Genres: Romance
Warnings: Violence/Injury
Series: None
Chapters: 3 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 10367 Read Count: 815 ePub Downloads: 0
[Report This] Published: April 29, 2019 Updated: June 26, 2019
Reviewer: warrior4 Signed
Date: June 27, 2019 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

The plot thickens. Nice intro for Scarn. Seems just the kind of classy sleezeball gangster type the fits the era right. I do like how your presenting the Jim-Pam-Roy triangle here. Roy is in classic form, even in this new setting. Basically taking Pam for granted. Jim and Pam are slightly shifted though. A little more snarky but there's still a connection even if it's somewhat new.

A few typos here and there so keep an eye out when you're proofreading. It's possible to understand what you mean, but they're there and noticeable. At least to me, which is why I make mention.

Congrats on the upcoming wedding! That's plenty of reason as to why updates are slow and I doubt anyone around here will blame you for that. I hope you have a great day.

147 Miles by celluloiddreams Rated: MA [Reviews - 35] 46
Summary: There are 10,000 stories about what would have happened if Pam came to her senses either during or shortly after the events of Casino Night. Here's 10,001--complete with several of my favorite tropes. Post Casino Night. Completely AU.
Categories: Jim and Pam, Alternate Universe
Characters: Jim/Pam
Genres: Angst, Drama, Fluff, In Stamford, Inner Monologue, Romance, Steamy, Travel, Weekend
Warnings: Adult language, Explicit sexual content
Series: None
Chapters: 7 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 19550 Read Count: 14443 ePub Downloads: 11
[Report This] Published: May 05, 2019 Updated: June 19, 2019
Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1
Date: May 05, 2019 Title: Chapter 1: Give Me One Excuse

Yes another Post Casino Night Pam comes to her senses story, but for the most part those are fun. I liked how you got into Jim's mind here. His thoughts about Stamford and his new co-workers are good too. Great way to get into his mind.

So, Pam's here. I'm very curious to see how you take this one. Looking forward to the next update.

Author's Response: I can't help it. I'm way too obsessed with Casino Night and all of the infinite possibilities of a post-Casino Night world. Thanks for reading and the review, warrior!

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed
Date: May 07, 2019 Title: Chapter 2: Gotta Learn From Far Away

So not going with the whole doorstep confessional trope then? Nice call. I do find it kind of funny that even though they've been apart for a month now the first thing that happens is they spend the first moments apart. In this case Pam to get changed and then for Jim to put her clothes in the wash.

Overall though, I do like this. That Pam is almost as surprised she's there as Jim is. Now that she is with him again, it seems a lot of her old fears are still there. While she and Jim may be great at being buddies, they weren't great at really telling the other how they felt about the other. That even though she's here that's still the case. Great writing to bring that out. Can't wait to see what happens next.

Author's Response: Oh, this fic will be trope-y for sure, and while I'm a sucker for doorstep confessions, I wanted to build this one up a bit. And yes! The whole being honest with how you feel thing is VERY new for both of them, and I definitely wanted to bring some of that out with these first few chapters. Thank you so much for providing your insight into it because it definitely lets me know that people are seeing how they're struggling with being so vulnerable.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1
Date: May 09, 2019 Title: Chapter 3: You're Haunting Me

Nice way to put in some cannon lines there. Pam's beach speech is always classic regardless of where it's put in. That you've got Jim speechless here is another nice touch. Casino Night devastated him. It makes complete sense that he's put a lot of armor up around his heart, even if it's Pam talking to him.

Good on Pam for figuring things out. Even if the trip wasn't planned, I like that she knows what she wants now. She's fighting through her fear and it's great to see.

Author's Response: YESSSS!!! I was going for blank stare/confused/unreadable Jim from Beach Games. And her speech is classic and truly a defining moment, not just for jam, but for Pam herself. Absolutely one of my favorite moments from the series.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1
Date: May 14, 2019 Title: Chapter 4: Permission to Love

Wow! So that was a trip. You can almost see all the years of pent up emotions, missed chances, wonderings why , and years of tension between them there at the counter. And finally when it does snap it's even hotter and more steamy than I think either one of them could have imagines. Great detail and vivid imagery. You've done a great job at building up to this moment. Can't wait to see how things will progress after this.

Author's Response: Sorry, I'm behind on commenting back, but thank you so much for this, warrior. Definitely boosted my confidence a little bit.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1
Date: May 21, 2019 Title: Chapter 5: All My Safest Places

Don't you dare sell yourself short! This was vivid, descriptive, steamy, everything it needed to be. I loved how memories of the past showed up here. That even though they walked through a very trying time, they still have years of happy memories to fall back on. Made for a lot of depth in this scene.

There was one thing that kind of took away from things. You have Jim taking off her bra there in the bedroom, but then a bit later described how her bra had been discarded in the kitchen. A little confusing. However the rest of everything was great to see.

Well done.

Author's Response: It was the very last sentence I edited. That's what I get for not re-reading it one last time before posting. ARGGGGGH. It's fixed now. Thanks warrior!!

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1
Date: May 27, 2019 Title: Chapter 6: Tell Me What You Want From Me

Now let the shenanigans begin? What have the last few chapters been then?

Very real emotional beats here. You convey their nervousness and anxiety really well here. They're in a hard position to be sure. It's not a fairy tale type thing here where with one breathtaking kiss and a night of passion all is now right with the world. Many of the same issues and pressures that plagued them before are still there. However I get the sense that since they've had the courage to be this honest with each other, they'll also find the courage to keep moving forward.

Author's Response: pre-shenanigans? haha! And yesssssss....even though they're sorta on the same page, there are some things to iron out. Definitely not a quick fix.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed
Date: June 19, 2019 Title: Chapter 7: Come Back to Heaven

So other than Jim and Pam are together now, this feels a lot like the canon episode. However since they are together there's a new nuance to the looks they'd have given the cameras or the feelings behind their eyes. Great job in capturing that.

Go Pam! Go get him. Can't wait to see what happens next.

Living in Color by JennaBennett Rated: K+ [Reviews - 36] 43
Summary: Michael feels very blessed a little earlier than Season 4 and Meredith is spared from being hit by his car. Instead, he hits someone else – because he’s Michael and occasionally he’ll hit someone with his car. So sue him? Set Season 3.

Categories: Jim and Pam
Characters: None
Genres: Angst, Romance
Warnings: Violence/Injury
Series: None
Chapters: 8 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 20157 Read Count: 23210 ePub Downloads: 8
[Report This] Published: May 25, 2019 Updated: July 04, 2019
Reviewer: warrior4 Signed
Date: May 29, 2019 Title: Chapter 4: 4: I can see the paint on your toes

Again well done with the emotions here. Don't worry about it being dialogue heavy. From how you've set things up it flows well. Good on Pam for being brave enough to fill Jim in on what's happened. Even if it means re-living all the pain of Casino Night and the aftermath. That takes a lot of courage on her part and it makes a lot of sense she'd be scared.

I love how Jim reacts the way he does. A lot of the same words as before, "more than that," for example. However the sting is gone this time around. Great way to re-purpose some of the lines from the show. I also love that even though Jim is the one in the hospital bed, he's still there for Pam. If there's a silver lining, it's that he accepted he was a jerk to her, doesn't want to be like that, and is reaching out to comfort her.

Feel free to use any of the lines from any review or story I've written. Just remember, it's only plagiarism if you don't cite your sources.

Author's Response: I’m glad you didn’t find the dialogue too much. I suppose it’s bound to be a fairly dialogue heavy story if one person has no clue what’s happened & is stuck in a hospital bed. I wrote myself into a bit of a that’s just how it’s gotta be spot there. Thanks for sticking with me! 

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed
Date: July 04, 2019 Title: Chapter 8: 8: Filled my heart with red again

This story was a lot of fun. Tons of great emotional beats all the way through it. Interwoven through it all was the connection that Jim and Pam have always had. It was great to see Pam take such a big chance with Jim here, but the rewards were great.

Getting into this chapter, it was fun to see Jim back at the office. I really enjoyed the moment with Micheal. For to most part Micheal is an immature man-child, but every so often he surprises you and is a generally good guy. I feel like he had one of those moments with Jim there in his office. It was a great way to set up Jim getting his memories back.

The scene up on the roof though? With Jim and Pam in each others arms like that. Beautiful just beautiful. Not only were they sweet together, but all the hints of past

However my favorite part of this chapter was right there at the end. Pam's done living in blacks, whites, and greys. The fire in her life if back and so she's embracing every color of the spectrum she can. Wonderful to see her light up like that. I get the feeling that she's got the image of Jim on his knees on the roof burned into her mind, and just HAS to get it out on canvas, but since the life is back in his and her eyes, charcoal just won't do. Not now, possibly not ever again. Thus grabbing every color she can to imbue her future painting with life, love, and hope.

Great job
Fortes Fortuna Adiuvat

Author's Response:

Thanks for following this story, Warrior & for your lovely & always detailed reviews. I appreciate hearing your thoughts.

I love those little moments on the show that reveal a deeper, dare I say wiser, side to Michael. I thought it would be really impactful to Jim if even Michael had noticed the shift in his dynamic with Pam post-Stamford.

I wanted to end on a link back to the color that fills (or doesn’t fill) Pam’s life. I was worried it was a little too cheesy, but glad to hear that it came across okay!  

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed
Date: June 23, 2019 Title: Chapter 7: 7: And with two steps, I'm saved

The first bit of this chapter was a little to narration heavy I think. Having some actual dialogue I think would have helped. Like having the actual conversation between Pam and Oscar. Achieve the same goal, let the reader know what happened, but it might feel a bit more natural is all.

The rest of the chapter was great fun though. Pam listening in on Jim and Betsy's conversation was fun. That Jim has, and even after Stamford KEPT, a Pam box is very sweet on his part. Then when Pam and Betsy meet and instantly join forces was lots of fun. He may put on a show of annoyance, but as the last line shows, it's just a show and he's happy to have these two women who he loves so much together.

I liked it.

Author's Response:

Thanks Warrior! I was trying to balance moving the story ahead and not rushing through everything too quickly with the narration early on the chapter. It seems I have erred a little on the move the story ahead side of things. I appreciate the feedback. 

I’m glad you enjoyed Betsy - I had a lot of fun with her!  

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1
Date: June 16, 2019 Title: Chapter 6: 6: You put the blood to my blue lips

Ah, I figured you'd get around to updating sooner or later. Interesting chapter here. The two Jim's if you will continue to collide. Evolved Jim (EJ) and Pam's Jim (PJ) if you will.

In one sense it's very sweet to see PJ back to adoring Pam and now he is able to really enjoy that. At the same time it's a little heartbreaking to see PJ come into touch with everything EJ turned into. I'm sure there is a happy medium that can be found but until it is, there's just something a little off. Great writing to bring that out.

Same goes for Pam. She's so hopeful that this is really the start of her and Jim together but she's still so scared of everything when/if his memories return. Again great writing to bring out those dual emotions.

Can't wait to see where this all ends up.

Author's Response:

I appreciate your belief in my follow through 😂

I like your PJ/EJ comparison - that’s essentially what I’ve been going for. It’s nice to put a name to it though. 

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1
Date: May 27, 2019 Title: Chapter 3: 3: Forced the life through still veins

Now this is a roller coaster of a chapter. You wrote Pam's conflicted emotions incredibly well from start to finish in this chapter. She's going through this hue big thing, and all the carefully built walls and barriers she's put in place are breaking, cracking, and crumbling. It's as if someone has taken the colour (you're welcome) palate of her life and rather than painting a clear and ordered painting, they're just tossing paint around and messing with the tint and contrast at the same time.

Likewise goes for Karen. I gt the sense that Karen is doing her best to keep things together. That she can't allow herself to be seen breaking by anyone. Clearly this Karen's not stupid and I can almost see the gears turning in her head as she processes what Pam had told her and that Jim is reaching out to Pam rather than her. Like I said, great writing.

So, where does this leave us? Well, as other have stated, Pam stayed and Karen left. Jim is going to see that. His so-called girlfriend bails, but Pam is still there and without an engagement ring to boot. I can't wait to see where you're going with this.

Author's Response: Hypothetically, if I were to repurpose phrases from your review, would you class that as plagiarism? 😂 Jim will reflect a little on the so-called girlfriend bailing in the next chapter (or two). I feel for Karen early on, she’s pretty oblivious to Pam & Jim’s history. Although, I feel for her less when she has more information and begins to treat Pam like a threat that must be stamped out, but I digress... I hope you find things to like in the next chapter too! 

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1
Date: May 26, 2019 Title: Chapter 2: 2: And watched the color rush forth

Very good with the internal thoughts this time around. Both with Jim thinking the whole thing was a prank and his hope at having Pam hold his hand like that and with Pam's conflicting feelings. You've got them in a fragile position and I very easily see why Pam is so hesitant about going forward.

To borrow a line from LOTR, the quest stands on the edge of a knife, stumble but a little and you will fall. That's where I see Pam right now. She has a thread of hope here, but if she doesn't tread carefully things around her will shatter. I get the feeling Jim might come to the same realization soon as well. And then of course what will Karen think about all this? Can't wait to see what you've got planned next.

Author's Response: Oh yes, so much potential for things to shatter... Although, there was enough shattering in reality & fic is for happier things as far as I’m concerned so there won’t be too much devastation. I’m glad to have you along for the ride! 

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1
Date: May 25, 2019 Title: Chapter 1: 1: Even in the blackout, I know

Excellent descriptions here. I really like that Pam's thought process involves color so much. It perfectly fits her personality. That everything is dull and faded there in the beginning is a great way to get into her frame of mind.

We've had memory loss/amnesia stories before. Jim or Pam forgetting about the other. However a Jim forgetting Karen story, like this one is shaping up to be, is a very unique twist. I really like the premise and can't wait to see where you go with it.

Author's Response:

As an Australian, I can’t even begin to tell you how much it annoys me to have spelt “colour” wrong so many, many times for this - so I’m glad to have it pay off, & that you’ve enjoyed the use of it. 

Thanks for reading! 

 

 

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1
Date: June 05, 2019 Title: Chapter 5: 5: I am floating

So I read this chapter last night at work in a kind of rushed fashion. I really liked it. One because I always like it when Jim and Pam finally get over themselves and find each other. It was great to see here.

Question for you, did you intend this to be kind of a PB&J sandwich kind of chapter? What I mean by that is we start out with a nice sweet moment with Jim and Pam, in the middle is everything with Karen, and we end with another sweet JAM moment. If so, well done.

I do like how introspective Jim is here. Jim has always been a bright kind of guy, even if like anyone he has his stupid moments here and there. However, here with only a few prompts he's able to figure out the what's and why's of the whole Pam and Karen triangle he got himself into. Nice to see that.

Sometimes it takes a hard reset to get things back on track. In this case it was Michael's car to expunge Stamford Jim and bring back Pam's Jim. Nice to see that return even if it's at a hospital bedside.

Also Jim's list of praises of all things Pam while she denies him and then just shuts him up with a kiss. Wonderful. Great way to bring back some of their banter.

Author's Response:

Did I consciously and deliberately PB&J sandwich this chapter? Uh, sure... This observation made me laugh - I was at one point a teacher & we very intentionally provided constructive criticism (& feedback to parents) based on the sandwich model (a positive, a not so positive, & then finishing on another positive). Apparently, this approach has permeated into other parts of my life if this chapter is anything to go by... 

 I think without feeling the hurt that surrounds Casino Night, Jim would be able to see things from a much more logical standpoint & draw those sorts of conclusions a lot more easily. I love your hard reset example - that’s exactly it. 

 As always, thank you for reading & reviewing!  

Cosa Nostra by Coley Rated: M [Reviews - 67] 84
Summary: “This life of ours, this is a wonderful life. If you can get through life like this, hey, that’s great. But it’s very, very unpredictable. There are so many ways you can screw it up.”

Jim and Pam are going to screw everything up. Starting with rule number one: Never fall in love.
Categories: Jim and Pam, Alternate Universe
Characters: Ensemble, Jim/Pam
Genres: Angst, Drama, Romance, Steamy, Suspense, Workdays
Warnings: Adult language, Other Adult Theme, Secondary Character Death, Violence/Injury
Series: None
Chapters: 6 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 33269 Read Count: 5964 ePub Downloads: 9
[Report This] Published: June 03, 2019 Updated: August 31, 2020
Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1
Date: August 06, 2019 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

I just watched a video on how to write screenplays. In it they said one of the best things a writer can do to get their audience invested in the story is make the audience curious. You've been doing that with every chapter and continue to do so here. Even while filling in some of the backstory there are still questions that are being brought up. Where is and what is Pam's tattoo? Why does Jim think he'll really be able to handle getting back into the business? Is there only one FBI guy monitoring Coley's activity to ensure this stays just a simple fanfic or is there a whole team now? ;) However most importantly, does Pam really think that she'll be able to cross off item #6 and not fall in love with Jim?

So yes it seems like you're still setting things up, but you're doing so in a way that really pulls one into this world. Great job in that regard.

Lots of fun with the banter here too. I really liked how they're starting to relax with each other. There are still some big hesitations to be sure, but this was a fun chapter.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed
Date: September 01, 2020 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6

I almost didn't believe it when I saw it. Very glad to see this update don't get me wrong.

Helene seems very sharp. She clearly knows something's up and I doubt the explanation Pam just gave her will really suffice. However Pam's quick on her feet too. Though her holding off on telling Jim this new update seems like a set up for something to bite them in the ass later. At the same it also rings true to canon Pam. Clamp down on the truth.

The visit to Betsy seemed less ominous, yet at the same time, there's still tension. Especially with Betsy pulling that little quiz about where Jim went to college. Betsy may seem sweet, but there's hidden depths to her.

Seems like that line on Pam's list, about not falling in love, is starting to shake. Just a little bit. There does seem to be something stirring with her in regards to Jim. Same for him. Nice way to bring that all out.

Again thank you for this surprise update. It's really great to see this continue.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed
Date: April 02, 2020 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

Writing this down now so I don't forget. Love the deleted scene line from Kelly there pointing out Pam is smiling at something Jim said. Great use of the line in a new way here.

I do remember this story by the way and I'm very glad for an update. Lots of twists and turns throughout everything. Even though it's been so long, the banter between them is still on point. Again it's not quite canon-banter, but there's enough reminders to see the source material.

Great scene with Jim, Pam, and Helene. I loved how quickly Jim was able to change tactics. Then of course that kind of cliffhanger at the end. Helene here seems very intense. Almost crazy intense. Makes for a very compelling read. Well done as always.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1
Date: June 27, 2019 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

Again you're using all these great lines from the show, but in such a different context. It's kind of funny to see them sniping at each other like this. Granted the situation warrants it.

You've done a great job keeping then snarky with each other too. In the show Jim and Pam worked well because they had very similar personalities. You've done the same thing here, just shifted those personalities. However even if it's biting rather than teasing sarcasm, it still has the feel of JAM banter. Great job.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed
Date: June 14, 2019 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

That's one helluva proposal there. They hardly know each other, barely tolerate each other, there are so many other unanswered questions and Jim has the balls to suggest this. Wow!

Great writing as always. Can't wait to see what comes next.

Author's Response: I mean, what could go wrong with that proposal? Thanks for reading! :) 

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed
Date: June 04, 2019 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

You're right. After all the anticipation and hearing about Coley's Mob story, it's here. Good set up so far. The characters are familiar, yet there's enough of a difference to them that makes them unique within this world. Lots of suspense in this initial chapter. Not the usual fluffy banter between Jim and Pam to be sure, but it is banter nonetheless and it works well. I did enjoy the addition of the jello prank. Great way to but in a familiar detail, but with a new twist. Can't wait to see how this all plays out.

Author's Response: Thanks warrior! Yeah for now at least, the banter is gonna be a little darker and tense, but it’s still there because I can’t imagine a banterless JAM, even if they don’t really like each other right now. Glad you liked the jello prank! I’ve had a great time figuring out how to work key show moments into this world, and I’m excited to start sharing them! Thanks again for reading! :)

Useless Knowledge by impreciseotto Rated: T [Reviews - 20] 23
Summary:

“We’re friends,” she says, and it is the only true thing she can bear to admit in this moment. The only true thing she thinks he could hear without being lost to her forever. “We’ll always be friends.”

Response to 'The Apartment' challenge. Set immediately after the events of 'The Merger' (S3), Jim changes his relationship status and moves into the apartment across the hallway from Pam. 


Categories: Jim and Pam, Present
Characters: Jim/Pam
Genres: Angst, Fluff, Romance
Warnings: None
Challenges: The Apartment
Series: None
Chapters: 7 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 15308 Read Count: 12814 ePub Downloads: 4
[Report This] Published: June 15, 2019 Updated: June 23, 2019
Reviewer: warrior4 Signed
Date: June 16, 2019 Title: Chapter 5: Business

So that was kind of intense. I think it's very real to have Jim and Pam have this sort of confrontation. They're both in the middle of a storm and are getting tossed around. Makes sense they'd both have heated feelings.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed
Date: June 15, 2019 Title: Chapter 2: Fancy New Halpert

Okay that kind of cleared up the last chapter. I got done reading the last chapter and was confused as to who exactly lived across the hall from Pam. Jim or Karen. Good on you to clear that up right away.

Good job getting into Pam's head this time around. You portray her conflicted feelings very well.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1
Date: June 22, 2019 Title: Chapter 6: Confidence

I really liked this chapter. You did a great job getting into her head with the scene with Roy. Very appropriate for him there. He tried, but like always he falls short of what Pam needs. And she knows it now too. She knows she's worth more than wine and cold fast food and she's not afraid to let Roy know too.

Then she used that confidence with Jim like she did was wonderful. Re-doing Casino Night is always a fun way to go. She's got the confidence she needs to finally be really open with Jim and it pays off great for both of them. Lots of fun to see that. Nice job.