9 [Report This]Date: November 10, 2009 05:26 pm Title: Body Parts
This story was really great! The lyrics to this song were just perfect for the scene you set up. I loved the way you wrote the little details that Pam noticed of Jim, the descriptions of the apartment and of the characters themselves were just so good! I thought the dialogue was spot on and in character and of course...the ending was just so sexy and sweet.
Thanks for sharing! Excellent job!
10 [Report This]Date: October 09, 2008 08:35 pm Title: Body Parts
That was awesome. Really enjoyed it :)
Date: February 03, 2007 10:43 am Title: Body Parts
Oh, that was nice. I could just feel the heat and tension leading up to that smoking kiss. And the ending's cute :)
Date: January 31, 2007 04:14 pm Title: Body Parts
Very sexy. I really enjoyed the breakdown of all the body parts.
Date: January 31, 2007 12:56 pm Title: Body Parts
Holy crap. Wow. That was really very dawesome. Love the way that her state of arousal snuck up on her. Very real.
Typo: They assignment was actually... I'm guessing it should be just "The".
Date: January 31, 2007 10:52 am Title: Body Parts
Wow that was really....Hot. Loved it !!
9 [Report This]Date: January 31, 2007 07:00 am Title: Body Parts
Heee, I loved this.
Date: January 31, 2007 06:02 am Title: Body Parts
Wouldn't that be perfect if Pam drew him? I 'd love to see that for real. Good job.
8 [Report This]Date: January 31, 2007 05:38 am Title: Body Parts
Wow. This is so quietly erotic. A tiny nitpick- you use the expression "she was getting aroused" several times- maybe change the wording a bit to express how it is building up (that sounds so much dirtier than I mean it!). Seriously, though, you have the right tone and wonderful, in-character dialog. Nice work!
Author's Response: No, no thank you! I like constructive criticism, and I have trouble trying to put any type of erotic feelings into words hahah. Thanks!
Date: January 31, 2007 04:44 am Title: Body Parts
I loved it! The ending was especially great. Thanks for this!
Date: January 30, 2007 10:40 pm Title: Body Parts
“Holy shit, Pam. Who’s the guy? He’s hot as hell.”
Ok, why did I get all giggly for Pam about this. lol. I just love the idea of someone KNOWING that she's got it bad for him. Good job!
Date: January 30, 2007 09:21 pm Title: Body Parts
Thank you for writing this. It brightened my night!
Date: January 30, 2007 08:25 pm Title: Body Parts
Adorable! I love the ending, hee. I like to think that Pam gushes about Jim to all her new artsy friends.
10 [Report This]Date: January 30, 2007 08:12 pm Title: Body Parts
yeah, if i were in pam's shoes, i wouldn't have made it past a vague outline before kissing the living daylights out of him.. i loved it!
Date: January 30, 2007 07:52 pm Title: Body Parts
That was hot and I loved it! Pam getting increasingly turned on while drawing him..well, who could resist?? And of course, her art friend figures it out immediately. Nice, nice fic.
Date: January 30, 2007 07:42 pm Title: Body Parts
in the words of pam: "WOW. that was just.....wOw."very hot. is there more? please say there is more?
Date: January 30, 2007 07:34 pm Title: Body Parts
I don't know how anyone could stare at Jim that long without pouncing on him. Nice job.
8 [Report This]Date: January 30, 2007 07:28 pm Title: Body Parts
pretty good one, here. i'll be checking for some more of yer stuff. respect.