10 [Report This]Date: September 05, 2008 09:31 am Title: Chapter 1
My goodness. You run the gamut of emotions, here. Each section captures the character and his progression beautifully. And what contentment in the last section. So pretty. Thank you for writing this!
8 [Report This]Date: February 09, 2007 09:48 pm Title: Chapter 1
This was excellent. Just wonderful. :)
Author's Response: Thanks for reading!
Date: February 05, 2007 10:49 am Title: Chapter 1
These are all wonderful, but number two is by far my favourite. It's so beautifully written I can practically taste the heartbreak. Consider that entire section quoted back to you.
Author's Response: Aw, thank you! There are some lines in that section that I really like too, so I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thanks again for your comment!
Date: February 05, 2007 10:47 am Title: Chapter 1
He struggles with them for a few seconds, trying to open them as quickly as he can because he knows that voice and that smell and he wants to see her, to know she’s really, really there. The thought of him trying to open his eyes as fast as he can just to see her is just breathtakingly beautiful. Great piece.
Author's Response: I'm so glad you liked that part -- it was one of my favorites too. Thanks so much for your comment!
Date: February 04, 2007 06:20 am Title: Chapter 1
He winds a lock of hair around his finger and holds it there, silky strands against his skin, and he tries to pretend. It's too hard, though, because if it was curly, it would cling to his finger. Instead, it falls flat to his chest, straight and easy and not at all what he needs.
I've used a metaphor like this myself and I just love it. Because Karen is for all intents and purposes simple and Pam looks simple but is so much more complicated. Poor Jim.
This is so good allibabab. Thank you!
Author's Response:
That's really such a great metaphor because it's a pretty obvious symbol of their differences, which is what's making all this so hard for poor Jim.
Thank you! I'm so happy you liked this!
Date: February 03, 2007 10:00 am Title: Chapter 1
He hopes he slides off the highway and into a tree on the way to work because he can’t go in but he can’t not go in, and if he’s dead no one will blame him. You can’t work when you’re a cadaver.
This is just the saddest thing ever, except I don't doubt he felt like that. Poor Jim.
All five parts were beautiful, but I am happy he got his happy ending. (TWSS. ;)).
Author's Response:
Yes, poor Jim. He is a sad boy. Hopefully not for long, though! We seem to be getting closer...
So glad you enjoyed this. Thanks so much for your comment!
Date: February 03, 2007 09:56 am Title: Chapter 1
really really nice. Thanks.
Author's Response: No, thank you! :)
10 [Report This]Date: February 03, 2007 09:44 am Title: Chapter 1
So wonderful. The first one and the last one are my favorites, and the second one made me cry. And the last one made me cry from the sweetness of it. And the first one is so perfectly season-2 Jim.
Author's Response: Oh gosh, I don't think I've ever had a reviewer say I made them cry -- I'm sorry for that, but at the same time, please allow for a bit of squeeage! Haha. Thank you so much!
Date: February 03, 2007 09:22 am Title: Chapter 1
How good are all of these?? Together they were completely beautiful, and very Jim-like at the same time. And they hurt, hurt, hurt until that last one, which was lovely. Loved this.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I love to hear they were Jim-like. :)
Date: February 02, 2007 09:24 pm Title: Chapter 1
...and he has never, never been this happy.
Favorite line ever. Wow. Your writing is so beautiful and sensory and just lovely. I like the different stages that Jim goes through. Very nice work.
Author's Response: Aw, I'm so glad you liked that line! I worried that it might be too smooshy, so it's nice to hear it was good (too, since it was pretty smooshy :P). Thank you so much for your comment!
9 [Report This]Date: February 02, 2007 07:57 pm Title: Chapter 1
I like how you combined the evolution of Jim with the always-favourite 5 things meme. It's always all about Pam, of course, but in different stages of the relationship. A pleasure to read.
Author's Response: Thank you! I love the 'Five Things' trend that's been going around lately, so I'm happy to hear my attempt turned out well.
10 [Report This]Date: February 02, 2007 07:08 pm Title: Chapter 1
love this so much, you have such a way with words, its incredible, everything you write is like poetry! we are so lucky to have you here! My favorite line is:
The sun is still shining and the world is still turning but sometime in the night his heart dropped straight out of his chest and it’s somewhere beneath his bed, buried and dusty among all the other things he doesn’t want anymore.
The imagery, the emotions, its all just SO GOOD! :-)
Author's Response: Saying everything I write is like poetry... um, okay, you are officially my new favorite person ever. Thank you so much!
Date: February 02, 2007 06:42 pm Title: Chapter 1
All I can say is you have a way with words and I thank you for this lovely, touching little story. So looking foward to the happy ending for our couple.
Author's Response: Oh gosh, am I looking forward to this ending too. Thanks so much for your comment!
Date: February 02, 2007 06:03 pm Title: Chapter 1
Love this! Beautifully written.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! Happy to hear you enjoyed it. :)
Date: February 02, 2007 05:49 pm Title: Chapter 1
I. Hate. You. Too. Much. How. Did. You. Get. So. GOOD?
*jumps* Seriously there's SO much here and it's so GOOD.
Author's Response:
Oh, stop. We've had this argument before and I think we'll have it again -- I got nothing on you, woman! Just get used to it, is all I'm saying.
Haha. Thanks for the comment!
Date: February 02, 2007 05:17 pm Title: Chapter 1
“Hey, sleepyhead,” she mumbles, catching his lips with hers, and he has never, never been this happy.
*swoon*
This is really cute and I love it. nice job.
Author's Response: Thank you so much!
Date: February 02, 2007 04:55 pm Title: Chapter 1
The tips of his fingers are always cold and he thinks if somehow it were to happen again, even the slide of iridescent silk beneath his fingers wouldn’t dull the numbness, even the feel of her skin wouldn’t burn.
So beautiful - I have so much love for this. It's such a different way to view Jim with respect to all of the....Pam emotions. I really wish that I could successfully articulate everything I loved, but I can't right now, so I'll just repeat - love. I adore the flow of your writing style.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! Complimenting my writing style is probably the nicest thing you could do -- it's something I work hard on, so I appreciate that. Thanks again! So glad you liked it.
Date: February 02, 2007 04:40 pm Title: Chapter 1
Right when I think I've had enough of 'Five Things', you go and write this. There's something so intimate about the idea of catching him right as he wakes up. This feels so hopeful then forlorn then finally just exactly as he should be. ...his bones tingle in response. Like that alot.
Author's Response: Thanks so much, Colette! I'm so happy to hear this wasn't just another boring 'Five Things' piece, and I'm so glad to hear you liked this! Thanks again!
10 [Report This]Date: February 02, 2007 04:31 pm Title: Chapter 1
He loves her. She doesn’t know yet, but he’s going to tell her. Soon.
I almost wanted to stop reading right there, because I knew what was coming. I knew that with your talent and your insight that it was going to hurt like a bitch to go through it all again, and it did. But then you made it OK, and we were all happy. Beautiful. Here's hoping we get our good morning soon.
Author's Response:
Yes, here's hoping.
Thank you so much for your review! It's so flattering to hear good things from writers you admire. :)