1 [Report This]Date: March 23, 2021 03:06 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oh this is beautiful. I love all the metaphor you put into your prose. *Siiiigh*
10 [Report This]Date: March 05, 2007 07:55 pm Title: Chapter 1
When I read this the first time when you first posted it, I didn't really get it, but now it has taken on a dreamlike, ethereal state for me which elevates it from sort-of-off to artistic.
10 [Report This]Date: February 20, 2007 10:11 pm Title: Chapter 1
Sigh. So wonderful.
8 [Report This]Date: February 20, 2007 08:20 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow...I love this. I love that Pam has the guts to leave like that and that they just leave for who knows how long. Great stuff.
Date: February 20, 2007 03:52 pm Title: Chapter 1
wow. i teared up reading this. everything about it is so perfect. this definitely made my day :)
10 [Report This]Date: February 20, 2007 02:51 pm Title: Chapter 1
Woww this is good! Please keep thiis going!! Now I'm going to be checking back every like 2 seconds! Lol <3
Date: February 20, 2007 01:48 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow, that was bold. In this case, bold is the right word. That's a really interesting twist.
Date: February 20, 2007 01:01 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow. Ah. Beautiful! I have nothing to add on top of what others have said so well, but I just wanted ot let you know that I found this so lovely. Ah.
9 [Report This]Date: February 20, 2007 12:55 pm Title: Chapter 1
Beautiful prelude to West -- or, at least, that's how I see it. :)
As always, your writing basically hits me straight in the gut because it is so honest and realistic and evocative and wonderful and have I mentioned how much I love the way you use your dashes? They add realism, of course, especially in dialogue, but I love them more particularly because they're used to kind of lead the reader forward, but then stop, like this is something too profound for words, but you know what I mean.
Just lovely.
Date: February 20, 2007 12:34 pm Title: Chapter 1
This may be the most romantic thing ever. Jim's feelings - from nervousness to joy to how much he loves her - just pulse through the language.
Kisses her in that strange limbo between night and morning as the door closes behind them...
How exquisite that is. Loved this.
10 [Report This]Date: February 20, 2007 11:45 am Title: Chapter 1
I have no idea where they are going, but I am glad they are. Thanks for the little break in the angst!!!
10 [Report This]Date: February 20, 2007 11:28 am Title: Chapter 1
Superb, as always. You don't write enough. Your work is crack cocaine to me, and I'm in withdrawal most of the time.
Much as I would like to quote every single line of this and point out how wonderful they all are, these particularly stand out:
her spiraling staircases of hair
It’s delicate, breakable.
he chuckles, always over romanticizing everything (how very Jim of him -- self-aware but still doing it)
I love how you compress so much into so few words. I love the silence between them speaking as loudly as their (few) words. I love the idea of an elopement--I think that after the disaster of her prolonged engagement to Roy and the chaos of her wedding planning, Pam would be relieved not to have to go through all of that again just to be with the man she loves.
Anyway, I could babble on forever in effusive praise, but I'll just end with a heartfelt thanks. This is going in my Favorites.
Date: February 20, 2007 11:01 am Title: Chapter 1
I've come to think of fanfic as everything that could have happened if they'd just taken a deep breath and let it.
This was so lovely. Thank you!
9 [Report This]Date: February 20, 2007 11:00 am Title: Chapter 1
So many beautiful phrases in this. Love the relative silence - anticipation, understanding, eggshell-treading.
Gorgeous, unfold, as usual.
Date: February 20, 2007 10:53 am Title: Chapter 1
This would have- oh. Yes.
The pain and joy here is so much bigger than what we have now. And it might be less realistic but it feels so much better. Thank you for a look back at the hope we used to have.
Date: February 20, 2007 10:52 am Title: Chapter 1
he is her escape. i like it