10 [Report This]Date: February 28, 2007 04:33 pm Title: Mosquitoes
OMGGG WRITE !! I NEEDDD TO HEAR WGHAT HAPPENS NEXT!! Dude, i'm saving this in my faves, so i can keep clickin to see when u add chapter two!
Author's Response: Hahahaha! Oh my God, this is hilarious. THANK you! I feel the need to update really fast now! I'll try to have chapter two sent to my betas by tomorrow night.
Date: February 28, 2007 03:19 pm Title: Mosquitoes
Wow, intense! I love seeing Karen's perspective on this. The mosquito analogy works really well and I love how even her fun prank kind of gets turned into something else when she realizes it only worked because he doesn't know her as well as he knows Pam.
Author's Response: Thank you! No matter how awesome Karen's pranks get, we all know that Pam would do it better. And if Pam couldn't do it better, it's because of some deficiency in Karen. Right? Yeah, that's my story and I'm stickin' to it!
Date: February 28, 2007 02:15 pm Title: Mosquitoes
OHHOLYCRAPWHATTHEHELL?! jeez, and they say *i'm* bad with cliffhangers. are you crazy? you can't just stop there! if i was a demanding person, i would demand that you continue *immediately*. but i'm not. (you're very lucky.) instead, i shall only *strongly suggest* that you continue...immediately. :0) awesome, by they way. really interesting. good dialogue, too. yay!
Author's Response:
HA! I had a feeling you might take issue with my cliffy. Well, it's okay when I do it!
I have to take a nap (running on 3 hours sleep... ugh) and then write two papers. And then watch Lost. But I swear I'm working on it :)
Date: February 28, 2007 10:13 am Title: Mosquitoes
Okay, "monogrammed relationship" made me spit out cookie crumbs and laugh out loud in the middle of my office. HILARIOUS. I liked that Karen hid the cell phone call - that seems very much in keeping with her, given the deleted scene from "Business School." I can't wait for more! More more more!
Author's Response: Melody! Hi! Yeah, that Business School deleted scene is totally what I was thinking of when I got the idea for this fic. I don't think Karen is a bad person, but she's definitely losing it. It's an unhealthy relationship. And I have to credit WildBerryJam with the idea for Michael to trip over the word "monogamous." Hehehe.
Date: February 28, 2007 10:08 am Title: Mosquitoes
Love, love, love this story! Update soon!
Author's Response: Wow! Three loves! Thanks :)
Date: February 28, 2007 08:47 am Title: Mosquitoes
okay, this seriously has to be updated, like, NOW.
Because you cannot leave it just when it's coming to the good part.
Besides that, thank you for presenting Karen this way. We saw in the ep before Cocktails that she in fact CAN be jealous and petty, and it makes her so wonderfully human.
I'm really enjoying this. Thanks.
cheers.
--Lex
Author's Response: Yup. Karen is capable of some nastiness. It's nice that the writers sort of fleshed her out. I know the cliffy was cruel, but I promise I'm working diligently on the next chapter!
Date: February 28, 2007 08:39 am Title: Mosquitoes
Really liked your view on Karen here--a pretty cool gal but one who's abnormally insecure because she's landed herself in an icky situation that she doesn't entirely understand. Could definitely see her hiding the VM as an act of desperation--she finally had a really nice moment with Jim, and it would ruin it to let Pam back in again.
And good job on character voices! Your Michael was great :)
Author's Response: Perfect explanation of Karen! Nice job! That's exactly how I feel about her. Except each week I lose a little more respect for her because I'm like, "Why are you still with him? It's called self-respect!" But then I think, "Would I ever leave Jim?" He could tell me he had feelings for Dwight and I'd stay with him. Because it's JIM.
10 [Report This]Date: February 28, 2007 08:05 am Title: Mosquitoes
Ooooh - you are so cruel to actually document nice moments between Jim and Karen. It actually hurts to read it. Hope you are planning on making this up to me in the next chapters!!!
Author's Response:
I know I'm cruel! As I was writing I kept thinking, "Ew. I need to stop giving Jim and Karen cute dialogue. EW." I actually deleted some of it, but I just figured that Jim would have cute dialogue with a rock, you know?
But I will definitely begin the process of making it up to you in the next chapter. I figure there will be a couple more chapters after this one. Gotta draw it out, you know? (p.s. getting reviews from you makes me SO happy)
Date: February 28, 2007 07:27 am Title: Mosquitoes
If I bit my nails they would be nubs by the end, way to build the suspense! you're killing me, more please. time to break karen's heart!
Author's Response: Yay! I wrote suspense! I've never done that before! Just wait until the next chapter...
Date: February 28, 2007 06:45 am Title: Mosquitoes
Seriously, shan, you just amaze me! The mosquito and I LOVE the monogrammed relationship better than monogamous.... brilliant! I'm glad you changed it ;)
I can't wait to read the next part!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for all your awesomeness! The monogrammed thing is all you :) (As is the part where Jim tells Michael to ask Dwight for help... shameless thievery on my part...) You should get chapter two in the next couple of days!
Date: February 28, 2007 05:50 am Title: Mosquitoes
ooh this is interesting :) I love the mosquito thing throughout the entire story. I'm really looking forward to the rest of this
Author's Response: Thanks Jess! Aren't mosquitoes just awful? It's all I could think of when I was trying to figure out what to compare those nagging anxious doubts to.
Date: February 28, 2007 05:13 am Title: Mosquitoes
This is really good. Great dialogue - especially Michael, which isn't easy. And I like how you got Karen without belaboring it. Another perfect detail: how Karen knows Jim's just doesn't ring true...one word (like, ahem, Yes) on this show carries so much weight. Really looking forward to more!
Author's Response: Thanks Colette! I had tons of fun writing the dialogue, although you're right- Michael isn't easy. I have betas to thank for helping me with it. And I just feel like Karen has to realize that Jim can't quite pull off "just." She's a smart lady, even though I think she's making stupid choices.
Date: February 28, 2007 04:38 am Title: Mosquitoes
LOVING this!! Seriously, the interactions between Jim and Karen were so great, and I loved the mosquito metaphor. Also "monogrammed relationship"?? Hahahah.
I cant wait for the next chapter--finally someone tackling the Jim/Roy confrontation!!
Author's Response:
Yay! Thanks! I thought for a while about what metaphor I wanted to use (because I can't seem to write a fic without one) so I'm glad the mosquito stuff worked. And the idea to have Michael trip over monogamous was all WildBerryJam's. I was sitting in my room like a weirdo sounding it out and thinking, "What could Michael confuse monogamous with?..."
And I'm really nervous about writing the Jim/Roy confrontation, but no worries. It will happen. It will be a little scary. I just wrote my first draft of it (when I should have been taking notes in my Public Policy class).
Date: February 28, 2007 04:30 am Title: Mosquitoes
you've written karen perfectly! she's likeable, but she's perfectly capable of doing something catty like that. i really liked this, please update soon!
Author's Response: Exactly. Karen really is likeable (which bugs me, by the way. Couldn't she make it easier for everyone and just be a terrible person?) but she's definitely insecure enough to do some catty stuff. Thanks for reviewing!
Date: February 28, 2007 04:22 am Title: Mosquitoes
Eeeee! More, more, more! Please, I have to know what happens next!
I love lots about this story, but particularly your treatment of Karen as somebody who's being a little irrational because she's not used to being the insecure one in a relationship. I really liked the detail about the gasoline game, and your Michael voice was cringe-inducingly accurate.
Hurry! I need more!
Author's Response: Thanks! I like the way you put the Karen situation. And the gasoline game is something that my dad and brother do because they're special like that. Oh, and WildBerryJam helped me with the Michael stuff because she's brilliant at writing him.
Date: February 28, 2007 12:36 am Title: Mosquitoes
Oh my gosh. This is very exciting. I would actually like to be there, because I would totally have Jim's back. Well, maybe I'd run into the apartment and shove furniture against the door, (making sure Jim came in also) and then call the police.
I am anxiously awaiting more. I like your details, like the disgust Michael shows when Jim suggests going to Dwight.
Thanks for this.
Author's Response: Ha! Definitely make sure that Jim is inside first. Otherwise--badness. I'm glad it's exciting! I'm writing chapter 2 right now and I'm really trying to maintain the suspense.
Date: February 27, 2007 11:56 pm Title: Mosquitoes
Yay! I don't even know how to express how much I love this story! I love the mosquito metaphor you carry throughout. I thought that did a great job of showing us Karen's mindset, or her view on the situation.
How's part 2 coming? I'm dying over here!
Author's Response:
Hahaha! Don't lie--you just wanted me to have him dump her. You were very subtle about your dislike for Karen, but I was somehow able to pick up on it.
Part 2 is coming. Slowly but surely. I have the rough framework. Hee!