Date: April 09, 2007 06:03 pm Title: Consequences
Too, too great. So much awesomeness I think my head will explode. Seriously. Between the bike riding, broken sentences, and all around Jamminess..... yeah.
All I can think about when I read this is how the ending was born out of an off-handed joke I said about bikes and our insane e-mail series that followed that........ heh.
I can't wait for the epilogue!
Also *rises fingers in air* I love your Dwight-isms. Very true to character. And you know my feelings about Jim's investigating.... ;)
Date: April 09, 2007 06:02 pm Title: Consequences
Oh Shan. Bravo. Perfect Jim and Pam dialogue - and also...because of Dwight. :) Love this. Cannot wait for the epilogue.
Date: April 09, 2007 06:00 pm Title: Consequences
WOW - nice! that was just freaking hot! and i love what dwight whispered to jim -that is SO perfect and so in character. haha!!! loved it. and would love an epilogue!!
Date: April 09, 2007 05:47 pm Title: Consequences
Cute cute cute. Love Dwight in this. So hilarious and yet comforting. And Jim...oh i love Jim. He rode his biike. How come no guys mapquest my house and ride their bikes over for me? Haha. Excellent job. Looking forward to the epilogue.
Date: April 09, 2007 05:44 pm Title: Consequences
Love this chapter! The passion and broken sentences at the end when Jim comes back? Amazing! Can't wait for more! --CH
Date: April 09, 2007 05:09 pm Title: Consequences
THANK GOODNESS it was Jim and not Roy at the door! I loved that Dwight was so nice (weird but nice) to Pam, it reminded me of the inventory night so much. This has been SUCH a great story, I can't believe it's already time for an epilogue...but I can't wait to read it!
Date: April 09, 2007 04:51 pm Title: Consequences
Oh. My. God. Shan, this just gets better and better! You caught Dwight's voice so well. This “Pamela, my encounters with Roy have been mundane, but there lurks in every man a feral instinct. It is our curse. Good men have learned to quell that instinct with a respect and appreciation for womankind. But there are some men, weak men, who have not evolved in this way.” was priceless!
Date: April 09, 2007 04:48 pm Title: Mosquitoes
oh I loved the end, my favorite after jealous!jim is out of control Jim and you captured him perfectly. Loved it, a perfect ending. The amazing thing about this story was that throughout we were never assured of a happy ending and yet this was so perfect and sweet.
Date: April 09, 2007 04:46 pm Title: Consequences
Oh man. Dwight. That was awesome. :) I'm all giggly.
Date: April 08, 2007 06:14 pm Title: Mosquitoes
Wow, I really really love this fic, it's written wonderfully and captures the characters perfect. I think when watching the show I am looking for someone to blame for all of this, whether it be Pam, Jim, Karen, or Roy, but in this fic you've layed it all out so well it really hit me how no one is to blame for all of this, they've all made acceptable mistakes, and all of them are suffering the consequences just because no one can speak their mind and talk about it, which is so real. There is nothing worse than reading a fic that is out of character, but you have managed to nail everything, can't wait to read the last chapter. (And it so sounds like Dwight at the door =P)
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I love the way that you put it-- "all of them are suffering the consequences just because no one can speak their mind and talk about it." So true. And as for the next chapter... I'm not telling!
Date: April 07, 2007 08:46 am Title: Mosquitoes
First time I've bothered to review any story.I'm such a lurker but I really had to tell you that your fic is one of the very few on this site that manages to stay so in character. It's been Jim, Pam, Karen and Roy for 7 chapters without hesitation. And I love that it's told from numerous points of view. There really isn't a bad guy. Everyones hurting and it's so rare for that to come out in fics. I am anxious to see where this is going and all I ask is that you would wrap it up around 10 chapters please. Of course it's your story but I can't stand the waiting.
Author's Response:
Wow. To get a compliment from Gregory House. That's like unheard of! (hee!)
Thank you so much! I'm honored to be the first story you've reviewed :) And the next chapter should be the last one, although I'll probably write an epilogue too.
Date: April 04, 2007 08:27 am Title: Strength
This whole story is amazing. The suspense is killing me but in a glorious way. I love how you have portrayed Pam, so hesitant, which is so true. On one hand I just want to scream at her, "it's Jim, what are you waiting for!" but on the other hand it is so realistic. I have to say that the sneeze was hilarious. I literally laughed out loud, which I hardly ever do in fics. Great, great work. Loving every word.
Author's Response:
Awww, thank you! I want to scream at Pam too! And Jim. Basically, the only reason I don't scream at my TV every Thursday is that I watch with like 10 other people and it would be awkward.
And yay for the sneeze! I was cracking up writing it.
Date: April 03, 2007 02:10 pm Title: Strength
GAH! I need more now. It's gonna be Dwight, right? I mean, it has to be Dwight. Right?
This was just so capital R Romantic and then the cops come. Figures.
Author's Response:
Pleading no comment on Dwight...
Thanks so much for all of your reviews!
Date: April 03, 2007 08:59 am Title: Burn
It really hit home when Karen realized that Jim actually forgot she was there. I actually forgot to break up with my then boyfriend when I met my husband. Oops.
I loved the parallels of the non-answers. Sure Pam may give them to Roy and Jim, but Jim also gives them to Karen and sometimes even Pam.
Author's Response: Ha! Great story about meeting your husband! That is love.
Date: April 03, 2007 06:34 am Title: Strength
So I already told you I had the worst Monday and then I opened this up and I caught myself smiling for the first time all day. So I don't have a higher compliment than that, it literally took me away from all the stress. Thanks for that!
Let's start with this, Jim doesn't know that he's sexy, that's sexy in and of itself. And when he sneezes in her cocoa, I loved it. Haven't we all been there, with our significant other thinking this is not the romantic moment we've seen on TV and yet it was better because of it, that's this moment.
I also love that when the moment gets too heavy then can switch back to their banter. That's awesome. I think that's a big part of who they are as a couple, so it is great that you didn't change them into super romantic couple but left them a little quirky.
Pam leads off and lets Jim have it a little - that's perfect, it is like the mirror image of the Roy conversation and she hasn't lost her courage! And Jim needs to hear all this, he isn't the only victim at all and (as you know) I think he forgets this.
I have no way to tell you how great it is that she calls him out about Karen. Truthfully, because I am slow, I haven't pieced together the timing of when they started going out, but that's just brilliant for Pam to. And I think he needs to get called out about that, it was a little selfish and mean to bring Karen back just to hurt Pam.
The knees to knees part is awesome. I love that he won't let her run, won't let her not look at him. That's just GUH hot!
Love this:
“I was really drunk, but there are two things that I couldn’t forget from that night if I tried. The first was kissing you.”
“What was the second thing?” he asks.
“Dwight leaning over me with his shirt off,” she says, wrinkling her nose in disgust."
JUST AWESOME, Funny and hot at the same time!
Ok down to it: "“Only part of what I told Roy was a lie,” she says. “I didn’t mean to say ‘had.’ I meant ‘has.’” MY heart is beating faster, I can't imagine Jim's! I love that he didn't understand, but that she explained, it upped the tension in a good way.
"
He wants to kiss her. He’s pretty sure that she would let him. He imagines himself leaning forward, her eyelids fluttering shut, his hand sliding the rest of the way up her leg, trailing up and underneath her shirt, resting on her bare back and running up and down the expanse of skin there while his lips move over hers.
However, just as he is about to act on these thoughts, when he’s just starting to lean forward, there is a loud pounding at his front door."
YOU ARE NOT NICE! I MEAN THAT'S JUST HOT AND THEN THEY HAVE TO STOP!!!!
Loved it, seriously from beginning to end. It made me happy and it was really perfectly in character. And you made all the drama build to this and it is NOT in any way a let down which is hard to do. WELL DONE. (now must pretend that I am working). - sorry for not proofing this, but I'm afraid someone will walk in my office so I better send this off. :-)
Author's Response:
Again, you + reviewing = makes my day
So glad you liked the banter, because I feel like they do that all the time--diffuse awkward situations with jokes. As for Pam letting Jim have it, I had to do that, because for me personally, I blame Jim more than Pam for this whole situation. Especially for starting to date Karen after he knew about the merger, which has always bugged me so I needed Pam to call him out on it. Heh. This story is like cathartic for me :)
And I'm sorry for the ending! I'll make it up to you in the next chapter! Promise :)
Date: April 03, 2007 06:17 am Title: Hot Water
"It happens all the time; hands brush unintentionally. But this isn’t a brush. It’s a caress. She can tell because when she jumps their hands don’t immediately fall apart. They don’t. Because it’s not a simple accidental brush. It’s a purposeful embrace."
From this line I know this is going to be a great chapter. I love that you've used kiss and embrace with reference to their hands. It makes such a simple gesture exude all the passion that they have yet to show each other. And then you go on to talk about the hand holding on CN, which is such a special moment but mostly overlooked because of the kiss itself. But the way he holds her hands there, doesn't it just say bride and groom?
You did a great job with your description of his new apartment, showing how even his surroundings are different than they used to be. EVEN HIS FURNITURE EVOLVED.
'"I don’t. But you look pretty shook up, and I know that you like tea when you need to relax,” he says matter-of-factly.'
This is so Jim to be worried about her. This is why you should pick him Pam, pick him!
"Her stomach flipped when she heard the question, but Jim never responded. And what did the absence of a response mean? She feels like she’s being swallowed by her doubt and fear and confusion."
I think this is very honest in the way this would happen for them, but seriously do we need to print up shirts? He still loves you Beesly! And I adore the analogy to the amusement park with Roy, I know that feeling like it should be the calm part but it is somehow more terrifying. Beautifully done.
"She’s so sorry for not being brave and honest. For choosing Roy over him. But she can’t bring herself to say any of those answers, although she knows she should say them all."
WOW JUST WOW. I think that says it all right there.
And then he just stands in front of her, so hot! I mean I can see it clearly in mind my and I can just imagine the delicious tension. When he says that they need to talk, my stomach did the floppy thing! Awesome.
The fact that he forgot about the teabags, so JAM. And it was a good way to cut the tension.
I still need to review the next chapter, but I can't tell you how much I love this story. It is exciting and well done and doesn't feel recycled but seems fresh. On to the next chapter that had me smiling on my bad day!
Author's Response:
First of all-- when I saw your reviews, I was soooooo happy! Long reviews = love.
I was hoping I wasn't doing too much with the hand holding by calling it an embrace, so I'm glad you liked it. And yay for picking up on the fact that even his furniture evolved! Wasn't sure if that worked either. and YAY for stomach flipping! So glad that moment worked!
Date: April 03, 2007 06:00 am Title: Strength
Oh no who could it be? I can't wait for the next chp to find out. Great fic.
Author's Response: Thanks! Hopefully you'll have an update soon :)
Date: April 02, 2007 11:20 pm Title: Strength
uh oh...update soon!
Author's Response: Hee! I'll try!
Date: April 02, 2007 10:59 pm Title: Strength
"How he hesitated 100 times but didn't let her hesitate even once." Ok, I literally GASPED when I read that. That was just so profoundly stated, and something I never really thought about from that angle. Just a wonderfully candid view of how things went down and I'm glad Pam got to vent. It seemed to me that Jim wanted to be the one to vent and then wanted her to be the one to just admit that she was in love with him too. I'm glad we got so much more out of it than that. They deserved a scene with this level of honesty. LOVED IT. I can't wait to see what happens now that they've been so honest...hmm...a little lovin?
Author's Response:
Oh, thanks LoveFool! A gasp? Squee!
You are so right about JIm. He had the talk all planned out in his head, and Pam was *not* cooperating, which-- good for her, right? They definitely had to have a "fight" before... well, you'll see in the next chapter!
p.s. Baby Talk rocks my world!
Date: April 02, 2007 08:35 pm Title: Mosquitoes
Loving your story.
Especially loved this bit: Maybe spin her around and hoist her onto the counter, cocoa be damned, and ravish her right there.
"cocoa be damned" lol, good stuff
Author's Response: Hehehe. I think I should try to work the phrase "cocoa be damned" into every story I write :) Thanks for the review!
Date: April 02, 2007 06:25 pm Title: Truth
Oh now that is a beautiful piece of confusion. It's all completely true. But the lies of omission, hooboy. I love that the two kisses have been conflated!
Author's Response: Thanks belsum! I really appreciate that you're writing reviews for each chapter. Really above and beyond!
Date: April 02, 2007 05:08 pm Title: Strength
oh my god - the world's sexiest sneeze. hahaha....can't wait to see what's up in the next chapter. this was great. if only, one day, the two of them will really what idiots they are...the pair of them!
Author's Response: Haha! Thanks sp! Jim and Pam take the most exasperating baby steps, don't they?
Date: April 02, 2007 03:57 pm Title: Strength
If this weren't so pathetically sad, their situation would be hilarious.
Oh, poor Jam! but I'm glad that they're FINALLY getting somewhere.
Thanks SO MUCH for this story.
seriously.
cheers.
--Lex
Author's Response: Thanks Lex! You're such a wonderful, loyal reviewer!
Date: April 02, 2007 03:29 pm Title: Strength
1. This was great--actually talking?? Not just jumping in the sack?? Much more believable :)
2. He SNEEZED in her cocoa, hahaha. I love when he's about to and then he panics because she thinks he's about to do something sexy
3. That entire first section with Jim wondering whether or not he's sexy was top-notch! I was cracking up.
4. Pam putting his hand on her thigh? H-O-T
5. Police!! Dwight? Hahha
Great job as always, can't wait to see how it ends!!
Author's Response:
Thank you!
1- Much less exciting, but I couldn't bring myself to even let them kiss. I'm very mean ;)
2- I loved writing that part. I just started out thinking what Jim would be feeling as he was whispering in her ear, and I was like, "Her hair would totally be in his face." It just cracked me up picturing it.
3- hee! It just makes him more sexy when he says he isn't ;)
4- Squeeee! You write the most amazing steamy moments known to man, so to hear that you liked that moment... My heart is very full.
5- Maybe...
6- More Hey Jealousy?
Date: April 02, 2007 02:25 pm Title: Strength
Finally, they talk! Awesome. You've been able to build the tension so well in this story. Kudos! :)
Author's Response: Thanks MA! Next up it'll be a different kind of tension :)