10 [Report This]Date: April 11, 2007 11:20 am Title: It's impractical, I'm not going to try to get a house like that.
June 10th is so soon! Hopefully BJ will be available then...
Oh, the chapter just does things to me, because it's so real and PAM and that is just how Jim IS and even in his declarations of love(?) Ryan is still snarky and matter of fact and amazing and I kind of just want to make out with the whole thing.
So. I'll just be over here, dying slowly until the ending. Storing up words so I can babble at you through 3 different internet mediums again.
Just promise me you won't dump me a few days before June 10th, mmmmkay? I promise I won't hold you back from your dreams!
Date: April 11, 2007 11:18 am Title: It's impractical, I'm not going to try to get a house like that.
wow, maybe my favorite single chapter of a long fic ever, this went to from being a fun slash story to something way, way more.
Date: April 11, 2007 10:59 am Title: It's impractical, I'm not going to try to get a house like that.
Awesome...just...awesome. I love this dynamic you have really created between the fantasy life of the boat, and the reality of the office and how a seemingly insignificant drunken-office-outing weekend can really change Pam's outlook. And the evolution of Pam? Love it. This chapter is particularly dawesome.
Date: April 11, 2007 10:58 am Title: It's impractical, I'm not going to try to get a house like that.
wow, Pam is all independent woman now... in this story I just don't know how I feel about Jim... I just know that I'll never like Ryan, too much negative reinforcement from the show lol.
Date: April 11, 2007 10:52 am Title: It's impractical, I'm not going to try to get a house like that.
Wow. I am so proud of Pam. Her life is just one big train wreck right now, and doing something for herself is the best possible thing she can do.
Other things I LOVED:
CowardJim! He's all hedging his bets, and trying to make her stay, and not doing it for her with his kisses, and I want to punch him in the face.
Ryan... just Ryan. When he made his little "I'm not Jim" speech I covered my mouth with my hand and went, "Oooooh," like that girl from the cell phone commercial who thinks her boyfriend is cheating on her, only I was happy. It was just sooo good.
You rock.
Date: April 11, 2007 10:43 am Title: It's impractical, I'm not going to try to get a house like that.
I really like this story whether it ends up being Jim, Ryan or no one.
I think the last chapter should be very smutty, but that's just me. :)
Date: April 11, 2007 10:39 am Title: It's impractical, I'm not going to try to get a house like that.
I like that Pam is finally doing something for herself! I like that it looks like this isn't so much a Pam/Ryan story, or a Pam/Jim story. I like that it looks like it's a Pam story.
*doing a little Pam dance*
10 [Report This]Date: April 11, 2007 10:30 am Title: It's impractical, I'm not going to try to get a house like that.
Wow, DF. I just. I've been going at this story ALL WRONG. This story isn't about Jam or Pryan, it's about Pam and her journey as a character. I mean, I love the previous chapters, and all the Jam/Pryan goodness, but now I'm going to have to go back and read the whole story with this new perspective.
Your Pam voice is remarkable, really. The inner turmoil she's facing is so thick and rich and just GUH. I know exactly how she feels, and you've written that struggle so, so well. The second guessing, the pushy, irritating Jim, the sweet, understanding Ryan, being pulled in 400 different directions without a clue of what she actually wants/needs, ALL SO AMAZINGLY GOOD
Just WOW in general. I'll be so sad when this is over, and yet I can't wait for the next chapter. DOUBLE EDGED SWORD, DF.
10 [Report This]Date: April 11, 2007 10:28 am Title: It's impractical, I'm not going to try to get a house like that.
I don't think I've reviewed since they were still on the boat, but I have to tell you I LOVE where you've taken this since. [And also that I was WAY more pissed at Jim than usual during last week's episode, and I'm pretty sure that was all your fault. ;)] You've done a fantastic job of guiding us through Pam's dilemma, especially because we're in pretty much the same situation she is - at the beginning, of COURSE I wanted Jim and Pam together, but then who was this Ryan character being all sexy and fantastic? Then when the cruise ended, I had no idea what I wanted, and now that Pam's sorting it all out I'm right along with her. In other words, NICE WORK.
Also I would totally appreciate one last appearance of SexGodRyan in the final chapter, but I know he's a very busy man so I understand if it can't be arranged.
Date: April 11, 2007 10:17 am Title: It's impractical, I'm not going to try to get a house like that.
ooh ooh ooh! Things are heatin' up in the office! I love the great insight you have on Pam and how confused she is. It's very realisitic and provides more drama ;) Only one more chapter! Ah!
What will happen in the dramatic conclusion? Will she choose Ryan? Jim? Neither? Will Pam leave Dunder Mifflin? Tune in nexxt time to find out..... ahha sorry I've been watching too much TV! Lovely lovely writing DF!
Date: April 11, 2007 10:16 am Title: It's impractical, I'm not going to try to get a house like that.
ok I'm going to try and keep this nice, considering the discussion at TWoP yesterday...
what the hell?! (jk)
I am finding this story to be more frustrating than the show! I'm smacking my gum all angry like because I just cant stand the way they are all acting! ugh! At this point I think I would be happy if Pam left them both in the dust because this is just ridiculous.
Provoking this kind of response from me has GOT to be the sign of a fantastic writer.
gah, you got me all flustered now...must. go. read. gooey. fluff.
Date: April 11, 2007 10:16 am Title: It's impractical, I'm not going to try to get a house like that.
Woo-hoo! Go Pam!!! Okay, seriously? I love where you're going with this. And this line:
"She finds herself asking herself how the one thing that she’s been wanting for so long could possibly hurt this much"
Just amazing.
Date: April 11, 2007 10:04 am Title: It's impractical, I'm not going to try to get a house like that.
That was such a surprise! Pam taking an internship alone in New York. Wow. I'm really sad that Jam is falling apart, but I have to say I've become a fan of your Ryan. He's pretty amazing. This story just keeps progressing in all kinds of interesting new ways :)
keep up the great work. I love it!
9 [Report This]Date: April 11, 2007 10:04 am Title: It's impractical, I'm not going to try to get a house like that.
Oh God, I love this. I love how your Pam is so - Pam. She kind of lets things happen to her, but while they're happening she's thinking, trying to figure out what she wants, how she feels, what she's doing - and then she acts, finally and decisively. I love that she's doing things for her, realizing things about herself and about the guys. I love how Kelly thinks the Ryan call is about her - because to everyone, what's going on with them is the most important thing, and because Kelly doesn't know.
It kills me how sad things are with Jim, but it's also so realistic - it kills me that they've missed their opportunities. But also, Jim DOES always work with a safety net, and I like how Pam's figuring that out.
It's making me think about it on the show, how at least Pam broke up with Roy for herself, that she didn't work with a safety net, make sure she had Jim lined up first. And yeah. This is just great.
I also like how I'm really not sure that she's going to end up with either Jim or Ryan - I still want her and Ryan to be in love forever, but I think the uncertainty is so realistic.
Date: April 10, 2007 08:01 pm Title: It's been a really rough couple of days... this helps a little.
Gah, poor Ryan! This story is so awesome. Keep up the good work! (and Yay! for Kelly being happy.)
Date: April 10, 2007 06:29 pm Title: Hold on, its gonna be a bumpy one
I must say, you've made me see BJ/Ryan in a new light. I was a wee bit giddy during "The Negotiation" because I had this lovely new Ryan in my head to contend with!
I'm so glad you're writing this!!
Date: April 10, 2007 04:05 pm Title: It's been a really rough couple of days... this helps a little.
Oh, Pam. I wish she'd figure out what she wants. Now I'm feeling sorry for Ryan since she seems to be just using him, but then there also seems to be real feelings there that she's just not able to own up to... but then Jim's finally being all happy and friendly again, so I'm torn!
Date: April 10, 2007 03:40 pm Title: It's been a really rough couple of days... this helps a little.
Lunch??? Can't wait to see what happens with that.
Date: April 10, 2007 01:28 pm Title: It's been a really rough couple of days... this helps a little.
I found this chapter to be so heartbreaking, but wonderfully done. The intro with Pam rang very true to me and the fact that she is really hiding from everyone.
Interesting to me that Jim is trying to strike up conversations with Pam but she's not sure she cares and frankly neither am I. Ryan being heartbroken is killing me. Seriously can I console Ryan? (I know the line for that forms to the left.)
Ok you did it to me again, she talking to someone and I don't know who it is, and I don't know who I want it to be, but for the first time I can say that I hoped it was Ryan! And it was!
The finality of that last scene with Ryan and Pam was sad. Part of me really does say just give up on Jim, he's flirting with you, he dating Karen, just go for Ryan. I like that you brought them back to reality though, I think that was necessary.
No matter what the ruckus, I think you've done really great with the story and best of all you've made us all think about Jim, Pam and Ryan in a new way.
But really just get her together with Ryan!!! For me!!!!
Date: April 10, 2007 01:23 pm Title: It's been a really rough couple of days... this helps a little.
I really liked the sense of dread and awkwardness in the office scenes after the cruise. Of course it was like that, and you captured it well. I'm so happy that Kelly has found someone, not only because it works for Ryan in this story, but also just for her to have a happy ending. I'm easy like that.
Ryan is starting to break my heart a little in this one, I have to say. He's really fallen for Pam, though I'm not sure she feels the same. I love that kind of angst, though, and I'm very curious to see what develops with Jim, not because Jim/Pam 4eva!!1!OMG, but because they have issues that need to be addressed before either of them can move on. However, Jim did seem to be pretty much angst-free in this chapter, which must have been a conscious point, so I'm wondering if the jerk is gone.
Sorry for all the pressure everyone's giving you, but this story is just too awesome for words. Can't wait for the rest!
Date: April 10, 2007 10:38 am Title: It's been a really rough couple of days... this helps a little.
Hello again! I just wanted to add something to my previous review: I think you're doing a great job, and it's a fresh, original idea. I have so many stories written that I've never posted, so I'm always impressed when good writers keep producing amazing stuff. Bravo.
Author's Response: Thank you! What a great compliment, that means a lot!
Date: April 10, 2007 08:59 am Title: Hold on, its gonna be a bumpy one
Hey DF - I just have to say - you have something amazing here. Sure a lot of people love K+R and J+P but you've really taken an unique idea and run with it - your characterizations have been fun and compelling, and I love where this is going. Where is it going again? Post again soon please!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I really really appreciate it and I'm so glad you've enjoyed reading it :)
Date: April 10, 2007 08:34 am Title: It's been a really rough couple of days... this helps a little.
Oh I love Kelly! my favorite quote:
"our favorite songs from Dreamgirls" - hahaha...so is Ken gay? Now THAT would be an awesome twist! I wonder if Pam would ever tell Jim about Ryan at her apartment. I can't wait for the saga to continue!
Author's Response: Hahaha, yeah THAT would be interesting! Thank you! :)
Date: April 10, 2007 08:09 am Title: Well I heard they made out... and had sex.
this story is awesome Dnkn - my only comment about this particular chapter is that I feel like the pacing of the story changed. It was like - ok, all of a sudden it was time to leave to boat, and then they were off the boat and then they were back at the office. On the way into the cruise, there was a lot more description of what happened, and it seemed that you may have skipped a great opportunity to flesh out those scenes for awkwardness. I don't mean to be so critical, because I could never write like this, but That just really jumped out at me in this chapter.
This story is still awesome and I can't wait to see where you go!
Author's Response: Thanks for commenting on the pacing, I think I was avoiding fleshing out every detail to give it a sense of Pam's avoidance of the real issues at hand, but maybe it came across as strange. Definitely gives me something to think about. Thanks!
10 [Report This]Date: April 10, 2007 08:04 am Title: It's been a really rough couple of days... this helps a little.
DinkinFlicka, I am kind of jealous that this isn't MY story. You are doing such a good job with this. Your Ryan has played this game before, but somewhere along the line he's missed the turn-off and left himself wide open to be hurt, which is so heartbreaking to me. Oh, and also there's a character named Jim that seems interesting. ; )
Author's Response: Speaking OF your stories... are you going to update Inventory??? I'm dying over here :) The things you reduce me to!!