Date: March 29, 2007 03:31 pm Title: Purple
I have come to the conclusion that anyone who ends off any chapter with Karen winning has a death wish. Seriously, there are some extremist fanatical jammers out here. I hope none of them know where you live. But I suppose if anyone came after you, you could escape them with your gravity defying powers.
Author's Response:
Hee, the pen name comes from the best musical in the world, 'Wicked'. That's right, I'm that kind of geek. I am actually an extremist fanatical Jim/Pam fan myself, I promise. I'm just trying to keep things as realistic as possible, and I believe, as horrible as it is to type, that Jim and Karen are having sex. Please, put down the torch and pitchfork!,
Date: March 29, 2007 03:22 pm Title: Purple
I really like the way you're treating the aftermath of this whole Roy thing and the way you're retaining the relationship dynamics and characterizations that we've seen. Love that you had Jim & Pam leave nothing resolved at the end of their insanely passive-agressive conversation and that you followed with true, in-character Jim/Karen. Both dynamics held just the right amount of feeling, passion, and holding back.
I'm excited to see how you resolve it all :)
Date: March 29, 2007 02:10 pm Title: Purple
fine, no garbage, but you better make up for it. because, thats not jam. that is like the opposite of happy jam! its happy jaren! not cool :)
i really nejoyed it besides that fact
Author's Response: I'm sorry! I swear, it will be worth it though
Date: March 29, 2007 02:09 pm Title: Purple
No garbage here. If anyone throws garbage, you are the Gravity Defier - make it float into space instead of hitting you. Do I have to explain everything?
I think this is great. I don't love Karen in general, but you did a great job here humanizing her and telling this story. I hope you keep going!!
I love Jim's joke about the mailman.
Author's Response:
I don't love Karen at all. I wish she would get kissed by a truck. But, I figure that if I can really challenge myself by finding the human side of her.
Thanks for the encouragement!
Date: March 29, 2007 12:40 pm Title: Purple
I'm not one to throw garbage, so don't worry about that. I love the first chapter, with Angry New Beesly getting to say what's been building up on her mind for so long. It's about time the two of them practiced a little honesty with each other!
And I love the second chapter as well, but for different reasons. While I don't necessarily like Karen, I do find her an interested character to explore, and I appreciated that you gave her a little more depth than some of us usually do.
In short, I am enjoying this and i look forward to seeing where you take it from here.
Author's Response: Thank you so much!!
Date: March 29, 2007 11:55 am Title: Purple
i definitely like it :) it's about time for some angry!pam.
Date: March 29, 2007 10:32 am Title: Purple
she didn’t mind showering with the tall paper salesman at all.
Question: Who would have a problem with this??? :) haha I am liking the imagery and everything in your story. Even though I don't like Karen, I'm willing to overlook that for now. Please continue! Also I think you need to change 'know' to 'known' in this sentence:
She had only know Jim for nine months, but as far as she could tell, he had a split personality.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! That's what I get for going without a beta I guess. It's fixed now.
Date: March 28, 2007 09:59 pm Title: Teal
I'm impressed!!
I've read several post-Cocktails stories, but I like that this one leaves almost just as much unresolved, but there's hope there.
Thanks so much.
cheers.
--Lex
Date: March 28, 2007 03:38 pm Title: Teal
I actually love this as a one-shot. Well done!
Date: March 28, 2007 01:46 pm Title: Teal
Me likey. :) So yes, more please. I actually think that Pam should get mad. It bugs me that it hasn't dawned on Jim that he kissed her three weeks before her wedding and expected she wouldn't have any conflicted feelings giving it all up...
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review! Well, if this story goes where I think it's going, Jim is definitely not going to get to the end unscathed. And it's about time he faced all the messes he's been causing, right?
Date: March 28, 2007 01:23 pm Title: Teal
Oh man. I SO did not see the teapot image coming there. Of course I'm one of those sad people who can't ever see the sailboat in the "Magic Eye" paintings either. ("It's a schooner!")
Uh, anyway. Yes, I think this has wonderful potential. The emotions here feel really real to me, like we could imagine this happening in canon. It's the kind of angst that is believable between these two people who can be kind of understated with their emotions.
More, please! Definitely.
9 [Report This]Date: March 28, 2007 01:19 pm Title: Teal
You should keep going, I want to see more Stan! ;)
8 [Report This]Date: March 28, 2007 01:15 pm Title: Teal
wow. its good. i love their argument. angry!pam and angry!jim are amazing. and its good. if you keepwriting, i'll keep reading.
i loved how she painted the teapot without knowing it. great!
Date: March 28, 2007 12:45 pm Title: Teal
I like it a lot, so I'd say absolutely keep going.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the support.