1 [Report This]Date: November 30, 2018 10:28 pm Title: Chapter 1
I mean...I WANT this to happen, but, ugh! You’ve done such a great job here of making happen what we all want, but you also paint Karen as a three dimensional person. Really wonderful. Little details (her popping that almond in her mouth like everything is casual; the sound of the key but not seeing it) were just perfect.
10 [Report This]Date: April 26, 2007 05:14 pm Title: Chapter 1
This makes Karen so real, and her pain so palpable, that it almost made me ashamed of how much I want her gone. Beautiful line here: now he’s just a series of ripples, like she’s looking at a reflection of him instead of the real thing. She starts to think that maybe that’s all he’s ever really been.
Gorgeous work.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! This was definitely a challenge to write because I too want to see her out of the picture. Glad you enjoyed it :)
Date: April 06, 2007 10:42 pm Title: Chapter 1
So sad but so well-written. I like how quiet the whole thing was- no yelling or loud sobbing, just a mutual realization that it was over. Great job.
Author's Response: Thank you so much!
9 [Report This]Date: April 06, 2007 07:39 pm Title: Chapter 1
This was so heartbreaking. Poor Karen. So sad that she knew just by looking at him what was going to happen. You did a great job with this - I am totally a JAM shipper and you really made me feel so badly for Karen.
Author's Response: Glad to know that this story makes the Jammiest of Jam fans feel some sympathy for Karen. Thanks for reading!
Date: April 01, 2007 11:34 pm Title: Chapter 1
loved the writing and your attention to detail. I like what you were able to omit from the ending and still have enough development in the characters to lead us to resolution. It is easy for me to imagine Jim walking easily to his car with a light step, and it is easy to feel Karen's pain as she continues to toss the salad.
Very well done.
Author's Response: Thank you so much, I'm really glad you enjoyed it!
Date: April 01, 2007 07:50 am Title: Chapter 1
damn, making me feel sorry for karen!! i do feel so sorry for her. i hate the fact she has to get hurt!!!
Author's Response: I know, she really is a cool character, she just happens to really be in the way. Glad you liked this and thanks for reading!
Date: March 31, 2007 09:39 pm Title: Chapter 1
Holy crap! A break-up with 4 words!! Who said that Jim and Karen can't communicate without words? You have made this so incredibly believable with your descriptions of Jim's expression and actions.
Karen's thoughts and reactions are wonderful as well. I especially like how he "lets him hold her because it’s the last time he ever will".
Two nitpicks - "rampant" tears kind of take me out of the moment (could be just me), and referring to Pam as "the receptionist" always takes me out of the moment as well. "The receptionist" seems to be used a bit in fanfic, and I really doubt Karen ever thinks of Pam as that in her head. Maybe "that bitch who broke my boyfriend", I don't know, but again "the receptionist" just jars me a bit.
I love "You can go now" as her last line to him, and her hearing the key being returned. You've made Karen very sympathetic and real here!
Nice job.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for your comments! I really do appreciate the constructive criticism, and your points are very duly noted. I'm glad you felt that I stayed true to the characters, thanks again for reading!
10 [Report This]Date: March 31, 2007 09:39 pm Title: Chapter 1
Okay, this is seriously one of the nicest fics I've read in a while. For one, it's written beautifully, but you already know that I enjoy your writing. The best part about this fic is that you remember and recognize that Karen is a real person--she's all the women out there in the world who are NOT Pam, but still good, decent individuals with real hearts and real feelings.
Because, wouldn't you want to hold onto Jim Halpert? I'd want to hold on to Pam.
Congrats to you, my dear Ms. Wendy Blue,
You've made a fic that stands both good and true.
/Really bad imitation of a couplet
Author's Response:
Oh Doof, I know that couplet is an homage to my Shakespeare title of this fic. Nice work my friend.
And thank you so much for all your kind words about the story. I'm really glad you enjoyed it! See you at band practice ;)
10 [Report This]Date: March 31, 2007 09:00 pm Title: Chapter 1
Well, I'm reviewing here too, because this was so good. If you manage to make the Karen haters sad, you're doing something right.
Author's Response: Well if you're nice enough to review places, I'm certainly nice enough to respond to both :) I really appreciate your support of the story, even if it does make you feel sorry for our most hated JAM roadblock.
Date: March 31, 2007 08:21 pm Title: Chapter 1
You are brilliant. It's as simple as that. And I'll tell you again what I told you elsewhere: darn you anyway for making me feel bad for Karen!! :)
Author's Response: Oh gee whiz, you're too kind. And I'm sorry for making you have a change of heart about Karen, but come on, the girl deserves a bit of a break, right? Maybe? Okay maybe not, but still. Haha, thanks for everything Mose!
Date: March 31, 2007 07:36 pm Title: Chapter 1
This is actually really good, even though I'm not crazy about Karen, and a lot of times the karen/Jim resolution is kind of contrived but this felt true to their characters.
Good job
Author's Response: Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it even if Karen isn't your favorite. Glad to hear that I stayed true to these people, wouldn't want to do them any injustice :) Thanks again!
Date: March 31, 2007 06:41 pm Title: Chapter 1
Nicely done. I like the simplicity of this ending. Nothing big and angry and scary. Just sadness. You can sort of feel Karen's heart break a little in that last sentence.
Author's Response: Thanks, I'm really glad you liked it! We'll have to wait and see what the real breakup will be like (assuming there is one in the near future). Thanks again for reading!
Date: March 31, 2007 05:58 pm Title: Chapter 1
karen, karen, karen, you should have dropped him at 'yes'! Nice job
Author's Response: I know! Weren't we all screaming at the TV when we found out she still stayed with him after that? Yeesh. But I'm glad you liked this, thanks for reading!