1 [Report This]Date: August 31, 2021 07:59 pm Title: follow the light over
This is brilliant and gorgeous and DEVASTATING.
Date: December 16, 2009 11:51 pm Title: follow the light over
owww i love it. its sad but at the same time its nice and cute. good job
10 [Report This]Date: February 08, 2009 06:28 pm Title: follow the light over
amazingly well written.
10 [Report This]Date: October 04, 2008 06:13 am Title: follow the light over
Very touching and moving story. Beautiful. Thank you for sharing it.
10 [Report This]Date: September 14, 2008 10:02 pm Title: follow the light over
Oh man, this just kills me. I'm sitting here in tears and it's really too late at night to call my mom and tell her I love her. Excellent, excellent work.
Date: June 19, 2008 11:07 pm Title: follow the light over
I loved this.
Date: January 31, 2008 11:53 pm Title: follow the light over
Oh how heartwrenching!! And so beautifully written. I just want to give Pam and Jim hugs. *sniffle*
Date: June 23, 2007 12:35 pm Title: follow the light over
Wow. This was gorgeous. Heartbreaking, but gorgeous.
Date: June 04, 2007 12:46 am Title: follow the light over
A little difficult for me to read but beautiful nonetheless.
Date: April 04, 2007 08:15 pm Title: follow the light over
This is so beautiful and intimate. It's sad, but very well done. I loved the part where Jim talks with her in bed, telling her his fear of losing her. There's definitely a quietness to the whole piece, apart from the serious subject matter. It's really beautiful.
Date: April 03, 2007 01:20 pm Title: follow the light over
thanks, I needed a good cry.
this was so beautiful, very true to life. I watched my fiance go through this a few years ago, it's so hard to feel so helpless and I think you captured it perfectly.
wonderful.
Date: April 02, 2007 10:34 am Title: follow the light over
Man. This hit very close to home, as I went through the same thing as Pam a few years ago. You've got me in tears, so I'd say you got it all just right. Very well done.
Date: April 02, 2007 08:48 am Title: follow the light over
Wow...I really liked this. I teared up toward the end.
Date: April 02, 2007 05:33 am Title: follow the light over
This is gorgeous. It's achingly sad, but it still feels like Jim and Pam. Everything is perfect, from the descriptions of the drive and the hospital to her choosing an outfit to the rain. I wore a blue dress to my grandpa's funeral for much the same reasons, but it's one of those things that's incomprehensibly distressing when you're already a mess, and you've captured that. Wonderful, wonderful job.
10 [Report This]Date: April 02, 2007 01:42 am Title: follow the light over
this is so incredibly heartbreaking, but it's really a beautiful piece. a friend of mine just had a remission and we found out it spread to his brain, so this story definitely strikes a chord. again, beautifully heartbreaking story.
Date: April 01, 2007 10:05 pm Title: follow the light over
This story just gave me a big lump in my throat. Your prose was beautiful as always, and it just felt so real. I was aching for Pam. You really pulled off first person Jim with mastery, which is so hard to do.
Date: April 01, 2007 06:34 pm Title: follow the light over
BEAUTIFUL.
Date: April 01, 2007 10:07 am Title: follow the light over
This is so well done.
Date: April 01, 2007 09:00 am Title: follow the light over
Wow. I still have a lump in my throat from reading this.
This was beautiful and touching. I too love your first person Jim. It feels real and honest and very - him. The whole thing, every word, was just perfect.
Date: April 01, 2007 08:57 am Title: follow the light over
first off, yeah, so this pretty much brought me to tears. it is nothing like the experience i had with death, but i guess it was close enough.
and even though that i saw one place (talking about pam's old bedroom) where it is the walls a light green and .
but this was a great story. so incredibly sad. and i love all the emotion.
now i have to find something happy to read before i spend the day in tears.
9 [Report This]Date: April 01, 2007 06:51 am Title: follow the light over
Everything about this was so true to life. My mom wore green to my grandmother's funeral for similar reasons that you gave for Pam here. And if anyone could pull off first person Jim it's you. The details of her losing her mother manifesting into his fear of losing her - just amazing. And you have this perfect way of showing just how much he loves her.
Thanks so much for sharing it.
Date: April 01, 2007 05:09 am Title: follow the light over
This was beautiful in so many ways that I'm not sure where to begin. The sadness comes through so intensely, without a single overwritten or maudlin sentence. So many great moments, but a couple that particularly struck me: the situation evoking Jim's fear of losing her someday, and this floored me - how being with her in her teenage bedroom made him fall for her all over again. So completely true to Jim, I'd think.
Loved the Jim first person narrative (hard to pull off - I'd be scared to even attempt!), the small details (what to wear to the funeral), that he doesn't know what to say to her...what I loved most of all: how this story is so profoundly about loss yet simultaneously an affirmation of what's so alive between them. The stunning last sentence just bursts with a sense of that - that damp smell of summer - absolutely beautiful.
10 [Report This]Date: April 01, 2007 04:24 am Title: follow the light over
I have always liked everything I've read by you. This included. I am never disappointed when I read something with your name on it.
Of course I have nothing but praise for this, but I have to especially thank you for this story told in first person Jim. I don't think there are more than a handful of stories out of all the hundreds on MTT that take this point of view. You completely convinced me of Jim's love and care for Pam, his fear of losing her, of their gentleness together. And if I have to single out one sentence that really says "Jim" to me, it's this one:
That endless sort of falling where it feels like I could never stop, never reach the bottom.
Thanks for this.
10 [Report This]Date: April 01, 2007 01:53 am Title: follow the light over
Fanfic rarely makes me cry, but this one got me. You write with such pure emotion (not the kind you see on tv, but the kind in your head). Jim's helplessness was perfectly done, because even though he's sad, her grief is far more important than his. I especially love Pam's difficulty getting dressed. It's so stupid, but that really does happen. And the hopeful ending was beautiful, the kind of thing you need to hear after heartbreak.