Date: April 28, 2007 04:04 am Title: Chapter 12
At the risk of sounding like a broken record, this was something, my friend. The perfect balance of steam and heart (my favorite combination plate!)
the look on his face somewhere between agonized and almost drunk.
Great description. Can so see it. Or when he says: "Tell me what you need..." Now, that's some hot stuff right there. But all about love too...which is what makes it so wonderful.
But, Pam starting to laugh, and them joking around in the midst of the intensity (and I do mean intensity) is what made this character pitch-perfect. Love when he brings the bottle of Palmolive for the bath - such a BOY thing to do. And when she says he wants to shower so he can see her naked, and he replies:'Well...yeah.' So cute and that tiny moment sounded so like Jim. Okay, I could go on and on, but will spare you...to sum up: well finished, Ms. Girl7. Good to the last drop.
(Oh, one tiny thing: I think it's overture, not overature ;-)
Author's Response: Well as usual, your review made me all happy and smiley - I so appreciate the time you take to point out the stuff you specifically liked. Thanks for the help on this story, BTW. And THANK YOU for catching the typo -- I should've caught that. :o) Thanks again!
10 [Report This]Date: April 28, 2007 12:16 am Title: Chapter 12
Ok first an foremost, awesome. best possible ending.
The sex was incredibly well written, I was holding my breath pretty much the whole time.
secondly, I love that you mentioned the chest hair. I am obsessed with the chest hair, thanks to this picture: http://www.johnkrasinski.fan-sites.org/coppermine/albums/uploads/Gallery/GregHenry/normal_12.jpg
"That we have, in fact, had sex - twice, actually" This line struck me as very true to Jim, probably because of when he said "twice actually" in the convention, I just heard it in my brain and I loved it.
"If you would have, I wouldn't have stopped you." Ahhh! Jenna said that!! I love that so much and that someone else pays such close attention to commentaries
wonderful wonderful
Author's Response:
PamPongChamp, I'm laughing over here, because the first time I saw that picture, I became obsessed with the chest hair. (I was writing Away From the Cameras at the time - the Email Surveillance chapters, and that picture totally inspired me.) You know, I didn't even catch the "twice, actually" - usually I do those things intentionally (have them say a phrase that they've said on the show) - good catch. And yep, Pam's comment came right from Jenna! :o)
Thanks for the review!
10 [Report This]Date: April 28, 2007 12:12 am Title: Chapter 12
There are so many lovely moments in this, but I have to start by congratulating you on this image:
the steady rain continued to fall, looking almost like crystal confetti against the backdrop of the darkened sky
And this one:
The mysteries they unlocked were vast, humbling.
Poetry, m'dear. And your crowning glory:
"Oh come on...like we haven't been faking it all these years anyway."
Perfect. I so enjoyed this story! Well done.
Author's Response: Oh wow - thank you so much, seriously. :o) So glad you liked this!
Date: April 27, 2007 11:42 pm Title: Chapter 12
Oh! Squee!!! LOVE THE ELEVATOR SMOOCHIES! Okay, who am I kidding? I love the whole dang thing. This has been one of my favorite stories, and I just adore the way you ended it. So very sweet. And, obviously, hot, too. :)
Author's Response: I'm really glad! I so desperately hope that when they get together on the show (not IF, but WHEN, damn it!), we have a moment where there's an elevator smooch - even if we don't see it, just see them coming out looking all disheveled and guilty. :o) Thanks for reviewing!
Date: April 27, 2007 11:07 pm Title: Chapter 12
What a wonderful ending, girl7! I like how they're gradually talking about all these things and getting past the insecurities and misunderstandings.
Things that erased the last vestiges of the guise of "just friends" to which they'd clung so desperately for such a long time. Never again could they run from this, hide from the truth of what they really were to each other. ...And, end of Season 3!
Thanks, girl7!
Author's Response: Ohhhh, if only season three would end with them together.... I'm hanging on to my optimism, but it's quickly waning as the time runs out. Gah. Thanks so much for reviewing!
Date: April 27, 2007 10:52 pm Title: Chapter 12
A wonderful conclusion to a wonderful story; nice work! I especially loved this line: "He'd had enough of her to know that this was amazing - that the hum he'd felt beneath his skin from the first moment he'd shaken hands with her was no accident - but he was hungry to know more of her." This was a tasteful and elegant story with a perfect ending that matched the timbre of the story. Wonderful! -CH
Author's Response:
Oh wow - it makes me all giddy that you described it as "tasteful and elegant." (It also makes me giggle because in the initial draft, I had him letting her into the apartment, nodding toward the couch and saying, "Do you wanna...?" -- as in "sit down," but she mistook it as an invitation to have sex. Heh. Thankfully Starry Dreamer called me on that one - hee.)
Anyway, thank you so much for the review!
Date: April 23, 2007 02:14 pm Title: Chapter 11
Oh, sigh. Ah. I think I was as wound up as Pam, waiting for her to come out and say it! You really, really captured the fear, doubt and insecurity between them in all the things they say and don't say, and seriously, I think I held my breath for the entire chapter! Really wonderful. Annnnd now maybe I can breathe again ;)
Author's Response: Thanks so much for saying that - I'm really happy to hear it!
8 [Report This]Date: April 23, 2007 12:12 pm Title: Chapter 11
She lowered her chin to the pavement, willing away the thought.
*blink* Did you want this phrase to say 'lowered her gaze to the pavement'? 'cause I totally got the image of Pam throwing herself at Jim's feet, which I don't think you intended. ;)
She was the one person on the face of the earth who had the power to annihilate him with the things she said - and even more so with the things she didn't say.
Boy, ain't that the truth! Well put.
Pam's "You. Everything." is so right. Love that line. For some reason--maybe the rain--this felt like The Notebook to me, in a very good way. A good ending to a very satisfying story. Thanks for sharing it with us.
Author's Response:
Oh no, I totally meant to do that - why? Is it weird that Pam would kneel before wet!Jim and put her chin on the ground? Bwah! I'm totally kidding - the image I was going for was her sort of tucking her chin to her chest, but you're right; it does read a bit odd. :o) Funny you say that about "The Notebook" - I've never seen it (I know - and I'm a girl!), but Starry Dreamer sent me a deleted scene from it as inspiration (hee). So the rain theme did work its way in from that film.
Thanks, as always, for your thorough and awesome reviews!
Date: April 23, 2007 11:11 am Title: Chapter 11
Oh, holy hell.
Okay so, I have to tell you that both of them remembering what it was like to sleep with each other was almost as hot as the act itself.
Also, the idea of Wet!Jim is making me drool.
And them FINALLY coming back from the brink and just.....FINALLY. It's seriously such a relief and it's making me giddy. Do you get that? you made me giddy.
Thanks so much.
cheers.
--Lex
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked the remembering part - I just kept thinking that, were I in Pam's position (so to speak, of course) I would totally be unable to think about anything else. As far as wet Jim is concerned...shameless of me, totally shameless. :o) I'm thrilled that I made you giddy! Thanks for reviewing!
Date: April 23, 2007 08:17 am Title: Chapter 11
I just loved the rainy setting; it matched their down mood, at least initially. I love seeing Pam being brave about what she feels. About time, I'd say. I've really enjoyed this story!
Author's Response: Thanks so much - I absolutely love rain, and we just don't get enough of it here (especially this time of year). So I love writing it when I can. Thanks for reviewing (oh, and for maintaining this amazing site!) -
Date: April 22, 2007 11:10 pm Title: Chapter 11
Oh. My. God. I believe I awakened all the neighbors with my hysterical SQUEE of happiness! This?
"I need you to tell me what you want, Pam."
"You. Everything."
Un-freakin-believable. I am in love with this story.
Author's Response: Ha - I'm imagining you squealing really loudly and all your neighbors rushing to your door. :o) I'm so glad you're enjoying it - thanks for reviewing!
Date: April 22, 2007 09:13 pm Title: Chapter 11
Oh my god...the ending of this chapter was just so cathartic and wonderful and...gah. Awesome.
Awesome, awesome, awesome.
Bring on the last chapter. Great job!
Author's Response: Yay - so glad you liked it! Thanks for reviewing!
10 [Report This]Date: April 22, 2007 08:31 pm Title: Chapter 11
This is sooo good! Pam is finally being really honest. I was kind of hoping that they would just ravish each other outside in the rain, but I quite like this too.
Author's Response: Heh - I think I'd have to ravish Jim out in the rain if I were Pam. :o) Thanks for reviewing!
Date: April 22, 2007 06:54 pm Title: Chapter 11
WHOHOOO!!! YAY!!!!!!!! AWESOME!!!! Man when he got down on his knees in front of her and put his hands on her face...ugh, I could just SEE that so clearly. Such a beautiful picture! Thanks so much for this story.
Author's Response: Is it wrong that I just want to see Jim get on his knees in front of Pam? (THat sounded really awful, and I swear I didn't mean it to. Hee.) THanks so much for the review!
Date: April 22, 2007 06:49 pm Title: Chapter 11
saweeeeet!!! cant wait for the "final" chapter -!!!
Author's Response: :o) Thanks for the review!
10 [Report This]Date: April 22, 2007 06:27 pm Title: Chapter 11
Wonderful...just wonderful. I just love it all. Please say there is more smut coming to make up for the angst. Maybe???
Author's Response: There's more - a whole new chapter, angst-free! :O) Thanks for reviewing!
Date: April 22, 2007 04:00 pm Title: Chapter 11
he was this fucking amazing -- yeah, this rocks! And the miscommunication, the near miss when Jim is out running when Pam shows up on his doorstep -- so agonizingly true to the show, so true to character.
Author's Response: I just hope they manage to get it together on the show - damn it, they're running out of time! Thanks for reviewing!
Date: April 22, 2007 01:42 pm Title: Chapter 11
Even though it seems like it should be impossible, this story keeps getting better and better. Just... wow.
Author's Response: I'm so glad to hear that - thank you!
Date: April 22, 2007 11:46 am Title: Chapter 11
Oh, beautiful story and a beautiful ending. :)
Author's Response: Thank you!
Date: April 22, 2007 10:39 am Title: Chapter 11
This was well worth any delay. All kinds of wow.
And thank you for the image of Jim in a T-shirt, coming in from the rain. You know, with that thunderstorm and all, it's really not safe for anyone to go out. They should stay in for a day or so, get comfy.
Thank you for your amazing story; I look forward to that final chapter. Whenever you get to it.
Author's Response:
I'm such a skeevy little perv - I write via visualizing the scenes, so let me tell you, whenever I can write wet!Jim it's a real treat...
And oh yes - bad, bad storm outside. She may well have to stay for the rest of the weekend, perhaps beyond. :o) I'm looking forward to writing the next chapter - finally a little lightness after all the angst! ;O)
Thanks for reviewing!
Date: April 22, 2007 10:24 am Title: Chapter 11
Oh wow. This was so worth the wait. I absolutely love this story and this chapter just... there are no words. Thank you!
Author's Response: Yay, I'm glad to hear you say that! :O) Thank you for reviewing!
10 [Report This]Date: April 22, 2007 09:55 am Title: Chapter 11
When I saw the new chapter was up, I actually gasped. The power and the glory of this...I can't do it justice.
"I really want this...You. Everything."
"I don't even want to say we should try it becuase I've got more faith in it than that."
You made them work so hard t get here, but the payoff was worth it.
So. Fucking. Great.
Author's Response:
Well I'm so sorry it took me this long to post it (after I said I'd post it yesterday morning). And wow - your review really made me smile. I'm glad you liked it - one more chapter left, and it'll be much easier on them than the previous ones.
Thanks, as always, for reviewing!
Date: April 22, 2007 09:34 am Title: Chapter 11
Wowza. Still just as awesome as before. I love that you continue to astound and captivate with your words. I am hooked. So seriously hooked that I'm considering starting an addiction clinic. But its soooo worth it, especially with chapters like this.
Author's Response: Well hey, I have you to thank for all the input and suggestions - seriously. And does your clinic service a John Krasinski addiction, too? :o)
Date: April 22, 2007 09:11 am Title: Chapter 11
This was just perfect; I love the insight you put into their thoughts and how, even though they try to carry on with their respective evenings, there's just no going back. The helplessness, the security, the emotions were just so perfect here. I've loved this story--well done, well done, well done! --CH
Author's Response:
Oh, thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed the interior stuff; I know it's sometimes slow going to read a chapter that isn't heavy on the action, but I always feel the need to explore the way these two think (probably because I find myself wondering what the hell it is they do think each week on the show). :o)
Thanks for reviewing!
10 [Report This]Date: April 22, 2007 08:57 am Title: Chapter 11
Yay!! As if Jim couldn't possibly get any hotter - wet!Jim !!! Girl7, are you kidding me???? And on a Sunday! Damn. I already knew I was going to hell; at least I have a very nice image to take with me. :-)
Awesomeness to the Nth degree!!!
Author's Response: Is it wrong that when I see a review from you, my first thought is: Yay, Moxie left a review! ...And my immediate next thought is, Damn it...that means she's not working on Squirrel... Hee. :o) (I am loving that story and have torn through the last two chapters, short on time - but I will leave proper reviews, I promise. Until then: Awesome stuff that gets better with every chapter; you kill me with your ability to weave these fascinating chapters that just hook me.)